A friendly person gave me a correctingcorrected my sentences and encouraged me to have a clear goal.

AtThis morning today ,W, when I was drived car on the way to my office, I saw sun that is bright ,and warm in front of car window，I feeling to my office, it was sunny and warm. It made me feel really good .

Car is usually implied when you say that you are driving.
Likewise, when you say sunny, it usually means that you are exposed to sunlight without having to look at the sun directly.
"in front of car window" seems a bit unnecessary unless you really wanted to emphasize that area of the car is particularly warm.

Other alternative would be:

it felt really warm by the window.

Work and life is going, tgo on and on. Tomorrow is the future.

I am not too sure what you are trying to say, so I made a small adjustment.

Yesterday，, I posted my first essantry.

Essay typically means that it is at least a page long - but it is understandable!

A friendly person gave me a correctiong and encouraged me to have a clear goal.

I am so happy about his or her words.

You can also say "their" instead of "his or her"

AtThis morning today ,W, when I drioved my car on the way to my office, I saw sun light that is bright , and warm in front of the car window，. I feel good .