Jan. 27, 2021
The Monster in the Cave
In the highlights of Scotland, there was a certain Montain that traveles scared, the leyend said that onces you climb that montain, you will never go down.
You can get to the higher point of the montain, but be aware that you will never go down again.
Worldwive Travelers who like to defiance stories and are exciting for new adventures, come to that Mountain every months, they call it The Mountain of Nerverland, no ones knows what happend with the persons who dare to climb the rocky mountain.
You want adventure? Go and climb The Mountain of Neverland.
The Goverment of the district have prohibited the climb of that Mountain but there is always a way to break the law.
Also, there has been rescuid operatives, helicopters have passed up the mountain but the recuers have not seen anything, there are no sight of human live. Once, a team of rescuids, from the sky, have seen a certain cave that hide into the trees, one of them ensures, that he had seen an animal moving outside, he says that look like a kind of bird, so big that he can't described what species it was.
Someone says that it was an allucination because around there was so much fire, that was imposible to see clearly, the man who had see the animal, said that it was a Dragon, people did not believe him.
The storie spread all over the world, and travelers dare to climb that mountain to verificated if it was true that there, in the cave, a Dragon live.
Maybe, they have comprobed the stories, unfortunally, they haven't lived to tell.
The Monster in the Cave
In the hHighlightands of Scotland, there was a certain Momountain that travellers scfeared, the leygend said that onces you climb that mountain, you will never gocome down.
A few spelling mistakes, these can easily be fixed! The travellers are scared of the mountain. The travellers fear the mountain.
You can get to the higherst point of the mountain, but be aware that you will never gocome down again.
the highest point= the top of the mountain
Worldwivde Ttravellers who like to defiancchallenge the stories and are excitinged for new adventures, come to that Mmountain every months, t. They call it 'The Mountain of Nerverland,' and no ones knows what happend withs to the persons ople who dare to climb the rocky mountain.
plural of person= people. 'Persons' is quite an archaic word and is only really used in legal writing now.
'defy' would be used more in the context of rules or people eg. 'to defy the rules' 'to resist the rules' The word 'challenge' would be better here or maybe the verb 'brave'.
You want adventure?
Go and climb The Mountain of Neverland.
The Goverment of the district have prohibited the climb of that Mountain but there is always a way to break the law.
Also, there hasThere have also been rescuide operatives, hons. Helicopters have passed up the mountain but the rescuers have not seen anything, there areis no sight of human live.
'found' might be a better word that 'seen' in this context but both are correct.
Once, a team of rescuids,ers from the sky, have seen saw a certain cave that hidden into the trees, o. One of them enwas sures, that he had seen an animal moving outside, he saysid that looked like a kind of bird, so big that he caouldn't described what species it was.
to ensure= to make sure, to guarantee
to be sure= to be certain, to know
You swapped tense a lot throughout the sentence so I have moved it all into the past tense so that it reads more smoothly.
Someone saysid that it was an hallucination because around there was so much fire around, that was impossible to see clearly, t. The man who had seen the animal, said that it was a Dragon, but people did not believe him.
The storiey spread all over the world, and travellers dared to climb that mountain to verificatedsee, if it was true that there, in the cave, a Dragon lived.
Maybe, they have comprobed the stories, unfortunaltely, they haven't lived to tell the tale.
I don't think 'comprobed' is an English word. You could use 'investigate' or 'test out', have a think about the context and look for another verb to use.
'to tell the tale' is a nice expression :)
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Well done! There were some really challenge sentence structures and great word choices in there! Try and use a dictionary to improve your spelling and watch your use of commas and verb tenses. :)
Jan. 27, 2021
Worldwivde Ttravellers who like to defiancchallenge the stories and are excitinged for new adventures, come to that Mmountain every months, t. They call it 'The Mountain of Nerverland,' and no ones knows what happend withs to the persons ople who dare to climb the rocky mountain.
I didn't know this. Thanks you for explain it to me
Jan. 27, 2021
You have help me a lot. There was a lot of things a didn't know and you correct me. Thanks very much!!
Jan. 28, 2021
No problem, keep it up! :)
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In the highlights of Scotland, there was a certain Montain that traveles scared, the leyend said that onces you climb that montain, you will never go down. In the A few spelling mistakes, these can easily be fixed! The travellers are scared of the mountain. The travellers fear the mountain. |
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You can get to the higher point of the montain, but be aware that you will never go down again. You can get to the highe the highest point= the top of the mountain |
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Worldwive Travelers who like to defiance stories and are exciting for new adventures, come to that Mountain every months, they call it The Mountain of Nerverland, no ones knows what happend with the persons who dare to climb the rocky mountain. Worldwi plural of person= people. 'Persons' is quite an archaic word and is only really used in legal writing now. 'defy' would be used more in the context of rules or people eg. 'to defy the rules' 'to resist the rules' The word 'challenge' would be better here or maybe the verb 'brave'. |
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You want adventure? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Go and climb The Mountain of Neverland. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The Goverment of the district have prohibited the climb of that Mountain but there is always a way to break the law. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Also, there has been rescuid operatives, helicopters have passed up the mountain but the recuers have not seen anything, there are no sight of human live.
'found' might be a better word that 'seen' in this context but both are correct. |
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Once, a team of rescuids, from the sky, have seen a certain cave that hide into the trees, one of them ensures, that he had seen an animal moving outside, he says that look like a kind of bird, so big that he can't described what species it was. Once, a team of rescu to ensure= to make sure, to guarantee to be sure= to be certain, to know You swapped tense a lot throughout the sentence so I have moved it all into the past tense so that it reads more smoothly. |
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Someone says that it was an allucination because around there was so much fire, that was imposible to see clearly, the man who had see the animal, said that it was a Dragon, people did not believe him. Someone sa |
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The storie spread all over the world, and travelers dare to climb that mountain to verificated if it was true that there, in the cave, a Dragon live. The stor |
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Maybe, they have comprobed the stories, unfortunally, they haven't lived to tell. Maybe I don't think 'comprobed' is an English word. You could use 'investigate' or 'test out', have a think about the context and look for another verb to use. 'to tell the tale' is a nice expression :) |
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