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Is Danna a girl or boy? You have to use the right pronoun. He/Him (boy), She/Her (Girl)

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"I know what will happen in the future", said Danna.

"For example, tomorrow, there will be a storm and a woman will come asking for help because her car broke down."

"Really ?"

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The next day, the sky becoame cloudy and effectiveventually a storm broke out, and t. Ten minutes later, someone knocked on the door.

You used "mother" before, continue it here.

And ohWhat a surprise, it was a woman.

Her mother was scared asking her, "how it'ss that possible!?" she asked.

So Danna said that this was a joke, she knew"It was a joke!" Danna said. She checked the wheather forecast and the woman was Danna'sat the door was her friend.

AtIn the end the day, everyone was laughinged at the joke.

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The next day the sky become cloudy and effectiveconsequently a storm broke out, and t. Ten minutes later, someone knocked on the door.

And oh surprise, it was a woman.

Her mother scared askinged her, "how it''s this possible!?!"

So Danna said that ithis was a joke, she knew the whether forecast and the woman was Danna's friend.

One day, Danna said hiser mother, "I have a super power ¶
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Usually, the subject (in this case, Danna) comes before the verb. You can say "Danna said" but not "said Danna." There are some exceptions, but those usually appear in poems or in old literature.

For example, tomorrow there will be a storm, and a woman will come asking for help because her car broke down.

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The next day, the sky become cloudy, and effectively, indeed, a storm broke out, and t. Ten minutes later, someone knocked on the door.

"Let's go to see" isn't really wrong, but I wouldn't phrase it like that. I'd suggest either "Let's go and see" or "Let's go see."

In the phrase, "...and effectively a storm broke out," I wonder if you were thinking of the Spanish word "efectivamente" (=in effect, indeed). That's why I suggest "indeed" instead of "effectively," which wouldn't be used in this context. "Indeed" also helps to emphasize that Danna was right about the storm.

I split this sentence in two to help with the flow of the text.

And, oh, surprise,! It was a woman.

On its own, "was a women" is not a complete clause, so we include the word "it." This is a use of "it" as a "dummy subject," such as in the phrases "It's raining," "It's me," and "It's warm outside."

Her mother was scared askingnd asked her, h"How it'ss it possible!?!"

This is just one way that you could express this idea. You could also try something like:

"Her mother, scared, asked her how it was possible."
"Her mother got scared and asked her, 'How is it possible?'"
"Her scared mother asked her, 'How is it possible?!'"

Etc.

So Danna said that this was a joke, s. She knew the wheather forecast, and the woman was Danna's friend.

"Whether" and "weather" are words that even native English speakers sometimes mix up, since they sound the same.
whether = si
weather = el clima/el tiempo

At the end of the day, everyone was laughing at the joke.

One day Danna said hiser mother, "I have a super power ¶
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Changed to her to match rest of the story. The quotations are a very common stylistic choice for this sort of story to clearly separate the narration from the actual things said by the characters.

said Danna ¶
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"I know what will happen in the future.

Some small punctuation and more "" usage.

For example, tomorrow there will be a storm and a woman will come asking for help because her car broke down."

This is a good example of why "" helps. It shows this whole section is one phrase said by Danna.

"Really ?

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The next day the sky becoame cloudy and effectively a storm broke out, and t. Ten minutes later someone knocked on the door.

became is the proper conjugation here. effectively isn't useful or correct here. Broke the sentence up to read a little easier. replied her mom is fine...but one thing with writing these back and forth conversations is that: he said, she said, she replied, he replied can get boring to read. So spicing it up with descriptive words keeps it fresh as well as fleshes out the characters personality.

And oh surprise,ingly, it was a woman.

This is a ok sentence other than removing oh and changing the conjugation of surprise. However, I think saying something like: And surprisingly, it was a woman just like Danna predicted. Is a bit more of a developed sentence.

Her mother, scared, askinged her, how it' was possible!

Moved some word order around to make the sentence read better. A sentence like this doesn't have to use the "" here but you could. It would look something like: Her mother, scared, asked her "How is this possible?!"

So Danna saireplied that this wasit was all just a joke, s. She knew the wheather forecast and the woman was Danna's friend.

Added some words in the first sentence to flow a bit better. Also the correct word here is weather not whether. Homophones are tough!

At the end the day, everyone was laughing about the joke.

slight word choice change. I think at is technically fine, but about reads a little better.