July 19, 2024
Recently, I have graduated from university with a degree of business administration and specializing in Logistics and Supply Chain Management. To make a living, I must look for jobs in Quy Nhon city because I would like to live in this city a lot.
However, Quy Nhon city does not have many companies operating in Logistics. Currently, I had an interview at a company and they required at least two years of experience in the industry, but I am a fresher and I have no experience. I also completed internships at two companies despite them not giving me any crucial work to do, so I just did odd tasks.
Predictably, I was turned down for the job after the interview, but I did not give up, I still look for jobs. Yesterday, I applied for the supply staff position at a company operating in manufacturing and immediately I received an email inviting me to the interview. I think that if I get ready well for the interview, I will get the job.
The journey of looking for jobs (19/07/2024)
Recently, I haveI have recently graduated from university with a degree ofin business administration and, specializing in Logistics and Supply Chain Management.
To make a living, I must look for jobs in Quy Nhon city, because I would really like to live in this city a lot.
However, Quy Nhon city does not have many companies operating in Logistics.
CurrRecently, I had an interview at a company and theywhich required at least two years of experience in the industry, but I am a fresh graduater and I have no experience.
"Currently" suggests the interview/opportunity is still happening.
I also completed internships at two companies despite them. Unfortunately they did not givinge me any crucial work to do, so I just did odd tasks.
"despite" suggests that them not giving you crucial work made it difficult to finish your internships. Instead of "crucial" I would probably say "relevant" or "important".
Predictably, I was turned down for the job after the interview, but I did no. I haven't given up, though - I still look for jobs.
The sentence was a little long. You could also say "I did not give up, and am still looking for jobs."
Yesterday, I applied for thea supply staff position at a company operating in manufacturing, and immediately I received an email inviting me to thean interview.
"the" suggests there's only one. Depending on what the company is, you could also say "manufacturing company".
I think that if I get readyprepare well for the interview, I will get the job.
This flows better.
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The journey of looking for jobs (19/07/2024)
Recently, I have graduated from university with a degree ofin business administration and specializing in Logistics and Supply Chain Management.
To make a living, I must look for jobs in Quy Nhon city because I would like to live in this city a lot.
However, Quy Nhon city does not have many companies that are operating in Logistics.
Currently, I had an interview at a company and they required at least two years of experience in the industry, but I am a fresher and I have no experience.
I also completed internships at two companies despite them not giving me any crucial work to do, so I just did odd tasks.
Predictably, I wasgot turned down for the job after the interview, b. But I did not give up, I still looked for jobs.
Yesterday, I applied for thea supply staff position at a company operating in manufacturing and immediately I received an email inviting me to the interview.
I think that if I get ready well for the interview, I will get the job.
The journey of looking for jobs (19/07/2024)
Recently, I have graduated from university with a degree ofin business administration and, specializing in Logistics and Supply Chain Management.
To make a living, I must look for jobs in the city of Quy Nhon city because I would like to live in this city a lotlong term.
However, Quy Nhon city does not have many companies operating in Logistics.
CurrRecently, I had an interview at a company and theythat requireds at least two years of experience in the industry, but I am a freshernew graduate and I have no experience.
I also completed internships at two companies despite them no, although they didn't givinge me any crucial work to do, so I just did odd tasks.
Predictably, I was turned down for the job after the interview, but I did not give up,. I'm still looking for jobs.
Yesterday, I applied for the supply staff position at a company operating in manufacturing, and immediately I received an email inviting me to the interview.
I think that if I get readyprepare well for the interview, I will get the job.
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