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May 29, 2025

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The howling of the wind

Have you ever heard the wind howling? I believe many people have. But for someone as oblivious as me, it felt like witnessing something supernatural.
I had always thought “howling wind” was just figurative language - a phrase used to vividly describe violent gusts and add an eerie, foreboding tone.
But on this extremely windy day, I heard it clearly. And it was indeed unsettling.
While I was working on my school homework in my room, a low droning sound suddenly drifted in from outside. It resembled a wolf’s howl… and at times, a haunting hum, followed by the disturbing rattling of rooftops.
I knew it was windy . I could see the trees swaying when I looked out the window, but it was unnerving to hear that sound, especially when you're alone. The howling didn’t stop. It grew louder with every passing second.
It felt as though the wind was whirling around the house like some invisible presence you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it's coming. The landscape outside, beneath the gloomy sky, was murky and turbulent. Rain was about to fall.


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But for someone as obliviousnaive as me, it felt like witnessing something supernatural.

I don't think oblivious is the correct word. Also you don't need "like witnessing something" at all.

I had always thought “howling wind” was justsomething figurative language - a phrase used to vividly describe violent gusts and add an eerie, foreboding tone.

Some of the words are redundant here and make it sound unnatural.

And it was indeed .....unsettling.

I added the dots as you could use this to add drama (and it leaves a pause) in English.

While I wast working on my school homework in my room, I suddenly heard a low droning sound suddenly drifted in from outside.

More natural sounding.

It resembled a wolf’s howl… and at times, a haunting hum, followed by the disturbing rattling ofsounded like the howl of a wolf...a haunting hum that rattled the rooftops.

Sounds more disturbing like this (which I assume is the idea!)

In the wind I could see the trees swaying when I looked out the window, but itoutside, but that sound was unnnerving to hear that sound, especially when you'reas I was alone.

As you're in the house already it would be implied you're looking out the window anyway so don't need that bit. Also you can combine the previous sentence with this one.

ItThe howling grew louder with every passing second.

Combine the two sentences here to sound more natural.

It felt as though the wind was whirling aThe wind surrounded the house like somean invisible presence you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it'. It definitely felt like something was coming.

You don't need "you couldn't see" and "invisible" as one of these would be redundant.

The landscape outside, bBeneath the gloomy sky, was the landscape lay murky and turbulent.

More natural sounding. You don't need "outside" as the reader would know that's where the sky is.

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Great English. Keep it up!

The howling of the wind

Have you ever heard the wind howling?

I believe many people have.

But for someone as oblivious as me, it felt like witnessing something supernatural.

I had always thought “howling wind” was just figurative language - a phrase used to vividly describe violent gusts and to add an eerie, foreboding tone.

But on this extremely windy day, I heard it clearly.

And it was indeed unsettling.

While I was working on my school homework in my room, a low droning sound suddenly drifted in from outside.

It resembled a wolf’s howl… and at times, a haunting hum, followed by the disturbing rattling of rooftops.

If the disturbing rattling of rooftops hasn't already been mentioned, "the" sounds better as "a":
"a disturbing rattling of rooftops". The "the" can work though if it's something you intend to mention again; this would tell the reader that that rattling of rooftops is a unique experience to you (it would have to include "the" the second time as well though)

I knew it was windy .

I could see the trees swaying when I looked out the window, but it was unnerving to hear that sound, especially when you're alone.

The howling didn’t stop.

It grew louder with every passing second.

It felt as though the wind was whirling around the house like somean invisible presence you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it's coming.

"Some invisible presence you couldn’t see" is completely fine grammatically (casual), however the above correction seems to me to fit the tone better. Depends on what you're going for

The landscape outside, beneath the gloomy sky, was murky and turbulent.

The howling of the wind

Have you ever heard the wind howling?

I believe many people have.

But for someone as oblivious as me, it felt like witnessing something supernatural.

I had always thought “howling wind” was just figurative language - a phrase used to vividly describe violent gusts and add an eerie, foreboding tone.

But on thisan extremely windy day, I heard it clearly.

And it was indeed unsettling.

While I was working on my school homework in my room, a low droning sound suddenlybegan to drifted in from outside.

'suddenly' works better for a short sound, like a sudden explosion or a sudden booming of thunder. If a sound is continuous, then it might be better to use 'began to' or 'started to' to emphasize that it's a continuous sound.

It resembled a wolf’s howl… and at times, a haunting hum, followed by the disturbing rattling of rooftops.

I knew it was windy .

I could see the trees swaying when I looked out the window, but it was unnerving to hear that sound, especially when you're alone.

This sentence and the previous sentence could be connected with the semicolon [ ; ] which is used to connect two complete sentences with related ideas.

"I knew it was windy; I could see the trees swaying..."

The howling didn’t stop.

It grew louder with every passing second.

It felt as though the wind was whirling around the house, like some invisible presence that you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it's coming.

The landscape outside, beneath the gloomy sky, was murky and turbulent.

Rain was about to fall.

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Great work! I think you could improve your writing by focusing on connecting sentences, so there aren't too many short sentences in a row. Good writing in English usually has a mix of short and long sentences.

Have you ever heard the wind howling?


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I believe many people have.


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But for someone as oblivious as me, it felt like witnessing something supernatural.


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But for someone as obliviousnaive as me, it felt like witnessing something supernatural.

I don't think oblivious is the correct word. Also you don't need "like witnessing something" at all.

I had always thought “howling wind” was just figurative language - a phrase used to vividly describe violent gusts and add an eerie, foreboding tone.


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I had always thought “howling wind” was just figurative language - a phrase used to vividly describe violent gusts and to add an eerie, foreboding tone.

I had always thought “howling wind” was justsomething figurative language - a phrase used to vividly describe violent gusts and add an eerie, foreboding tone.

Some of the words are redundant here and make it sound unnatural.

But on this extremely windy day, I heard it clearly.


But on thisan extremely windy day, I heard it clearly.

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And it was indeed unsettling.


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And it was indeed .....unsettling.

I added the dots as you could use this to add drama (and it leaves a pause) in English.

The howling of the wind


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While I was working on my school homework in my room, a low droning sound suddenly drifted in from outside.


While I was working on my school homework in my room, a low droning sound suddenlybegan to drifted in from outside.

'suddenly' works better for a short sound, like a sudden explosion or a sudden booming of thunder. If a sound is continuous, then it might be better to use 'began to' or 'started to' to emphasize that it's a continuous sound.

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While I wast working on my school homework in my room, I suddenly heard a low droning sound suddenly drifted in from outside.

More natural sounding.

It resembled a wolf’s howl… and at times, a haunting hum, followed by the disturbing rattling of rooftops.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It resembled a wolf’s howl… and at times, a haunting hum, followed by the disturbing rattling of rooftops.

If the disturbing rattling of rooftops hasn't already been mentioned, "the" sounds better as "a": "a disturbing rattling of rooftops". The "the" can work though if it's something you intend to mention again; this would tell the reader that that rattling of rooftops is a unique experience to you (it would have to include "the" the second time as well though)

It resembled a wolf’s howl… and at times, a haunting hum, followed by the disturbing rattling ofsounded like the howl of a wolf...a haunting hum that rattled the rooftops.

Sounds more disturbing like this (which I assume is the idea!)

I knew it was windy .


I knew it was windy .

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I could see the trees swaying when I looked out the window, but it was unnerving to hear that sound, especially when you're alone.


I could see the trees swaying when I looked out the window, but it was unnerving to hear that sound, especially when you're alone.

This sentence and the previous sentence could be connected with the semicolon [ ; ] which is used to connect two complete sentences with related ideas. "I knew it was windy; I could see the trees swaying..."

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In the wind I could see the trees swaying when I looked out the window, but itoutside, but that sound was unnnerving to hear that sound, especially when you'reas I was alone.

As you're in the house already it would be implied you're looking out the window anyway so don't need that bit. Also you can combine the previous sentence with this one.

The howling didn’t stop.


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It grew louder with every passing second.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

ItThe howling grew louder with every passing second.

Combine the two sentences here to sound more natural.

It felt as though the wind was whirling around the house like some invisible presence you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it's coming.


It felt as though the wind was whirling around the house, like some invisible presence that you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it's coming.

It felt as though the wind was whirling around the house like somean invisible presence you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it's coming.

"Some invisible presence you couldn’t see" is completely fine grammatically (casual), however the above correction seems to me to fit the tone better. Depends on what you're going for

It felt as though the wind was whirling aThe wind surrounded the house like somean invisible presence you couldn’t see, but could definitely hear it'. It definitely felt like something was coming.

You don't need "you couldn't see" and "invisible" as one of these would be redundant.

The landscape outside, beneath the gloomy sky, was murky and turbulent.


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The landscape outside, bBeneath the gloomy sky, was the landscape lay murky and turbulent.

More natural sounding. You don't need "outside" as the reader would know that's where the sky is.

Rain was about to fall.


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