July 16, 2020
I haven’t finished the book yet. Actually, I’ve only read the first three parts out of six. Apparently, this series is quite famous in the U.K, in fact, there are some radio shows available on BBC radio which I highly recommend. There is also a movie starring well-known actors but for obvious reasons, the movie was a box-office bomb. The main reason is the plot itself which entails sci-fic, absurd situations, and philosophical questions, in other words, a melting pot where the author blended different topics. All of these topics in the pages of a book work perfectly because the author can stop himself to detail some obscure parts of the story, but in a movie the director has a time limit, therefore has to neglect some parts of the book or downright cut some parts of the plot. Thus, in many cases, the story has to be shortened too much and the audience ends up confused and not understanding a thing, which was the case with this movie.
Now, back to the story, everything begins when Artur wakes up just to realize that the earth is going to end in a couple of minutes. Fortunately for him, his friend rescues him just in time and upon this they begin an odyssey throughout the time-space fabric, going to different periods of time and to diverse points in the universe. This aspect of the novel is quite enjoyable because the author seems to be quite versed in physics and what is more, all the scientific resources he uses to back up his narrative make sense or at least have some base on scientific discoveries, which contributes to creating the illusion that even though the story is pure fantasy it may well have some base on reality.
As for the morale of the story, I’d describe the book as eye-opening because when the reader opens the books he is in the same situation than Artur, a normal human who is convinced that the world that he sees around is everything that exists, and who doesn’t question what is socially understood by reality. However, when the journey begins, the reader goes hand in hand with Artur discovering a completely new universe and multiverse, full of novelties to soon realize that humans are not the center of the universe and that there's more to this than meets the eye. The book is also hilarious. I love it.
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I haven’t finished the book yet, a. Actually, I’ve only read the first three parts out of six.
Apparently, this series is quite famous in the U.K, iK. In fact, there are some radio shows available on BBC radio which I highly recommend.
UK or U.K. are both correct, but I am not sure how the periods in "U.K." should interact with the punctuation (comma or period) of the sentence.
There is also a movie starring well-known actors but for obviousmany reasons, the movie was a box-office bomb.
At this point, you have not discussed the reasons the movie was a box office bomb so it is not obvious yet. Alternately, you could say "...but there are obvious reasons why the movie was a box-office bomb."
The main reason is the plot itself which entails sci-fic, absurd situations, and philosophical questions, i. In other words, it is a melting pot where the author blended different topics.
All of these topics in the pages of a book work perfectly because the author can stop himself to detail some obscure parts of the story, but in a movie the director has a time limit, therefore has to neglect some parts of the book or downright skip some parts of the plot, t. Thus in many cases, the story has to be shortened too much and the audience ends up confused and not understanding a thing, which was the case with this movie.
Now, back to the story,; everything begins when Artur wakes up just to realize that the earth is going to end in a couple of minutes.
Fortunately for him, his friend rescues him just in time and upon this they begin an odyssey throughout the time-space fabric, going to different periods of time and to diverse points in the universe.
As for the morale of the story, I’d describe the book as eye-opening because when the reader opens the books he is in the same situation than Artur, a normal human who is convinced that the world that he sees around is everything that exists, and who doesn’t question what is socially understood by reality.
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Great writing! You might have convinced me to read Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy. I corrected a few run on sentences, but you still have a lot of very long sentences and I am not sure of their correctness.
The Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy
I haven’t finished the book yet.
ActuallyIn fact, I’ve only read the first three parts out of six.
"Actually" is used to contradict what was said before. "In fact" is used to add to what was said. We already know you didn't read the whole book yet, so you're adding to what you said.
Apparently, this series is quite famous in the U.K, i. In fact, there are some radio shows available on BBC radio which I highly recommend.
Most of the time, transition words are a good place to stop a sentence in English. (For example, "in fact," "in other words," "of course," "sometimes," etc.) Run-on sentences are very easy to make in English and they're hard to read. If you have two independent clauses, they should be separate sentences unless you have a good stylistic reason to connect them.
There is also a movie starring well-known actors, but for obvious reasons, the movie was a box-office bomb.
When a word like "but" or "or" is used in English to connect two conflicting ideas, you put a comma before the connecting word. Also, I don't know if you really want to say "for obvious reasons" here. "For obvious reasons" implies the reader already knows the reasons and doesn't need it explained. (For example, "He went out partying and didn't want to drive home, for obvious reasons.") This sentence as a stand-alone would work if there were an easy-to-describe bad quality about it. ("There's also a movie starring some of the most hated actors in the industry, but for obvious reasons, it was a box-office bomb.")
The main reason is due to the plot itself, which entails sci-fic, absurd situations, and philosophical questions, i. In other words, it's a melting pot wherein which the author blendeds different topics.
Verb agreement - since you use "entails" you should use "blends" because they describe the same idea.
All of these topics in the pages of a book work perfectly because the author can stop himself to detail some obscure parts of the story, b. But in a movie, the director has a time limit, and therefore has to neglect some parts of the book or downoutright cut some parts of the plot.
Notice you had your independent clause ("All...perfectly"), and then a dependent clause ("because..story."). That's where a sentence usually stops or else it becomes a run-on.
Adjectives are downright ("That's downright crazy!"), verbs are outright ("He asked him outright.").
Thus, in many cases, the story has to be shortened too much and the audience ends up confused and not understanding a thing, which was the case with this movie.
Now, back to the story, everything begins when Artur wakes up just to realize that the earth is going to end in a couple of minutes.
Fortunately for him, his friend rescues him just in time and upon this they begin an odyssey throughout the time-space fabricfabric of space-time, going to different periods of time and to diverse pointfferent places in the universe.
"Diverse" is used only to describe when something has many distinct types, usually for concepts/genres or people. ("A diverse music taste." or "A diverse population.") "Point" is highly specific, like putting your finger on something. I assume the locations are big, so "place" is the better word.
This aspect of the novel is quite enjoyable because the author seems to be quite well-versed in physics a. And what i's more, all the scientific resources he uses to back up his narrative make sense, or at least have some base on scientific discoveries, which contributes to creating the illusion that even though the story is pure fantasy it may well have some base oin reality.
As for the morale of the story, I’d describe the book as eye-opening, because when the reader opens the books he is in the same situation thanas Artur,. He's a normal human who is convinced that the world that he sees around is everythinghim is all that exists, and who doesn’t question what is socially understood byas reality.
I don't know if you mean moral - a moral is a lesson learned. You could say it's the "point" of the story or even change that first portion to, "To describe the story in one word, I'd say it's eye-opening." That's a common expression in English.
"By reality" means that reality is the one understanding. "As reality" makes reality a part of this comparison.
Also - just a note - "he" for an unknown third person is becoming increasingly formal in English. It's more conversational to use "they" for an unknown person, and more and more grammar resources are accepting it as correct. (In other words, you might consider saying, "when the reader opens the books they are in the same situation as Artur.")
However, when the journey begins, the reader goes hand in hand with Artur discovering a completely new universe and multiverse, full of novelties to. He soon realizes that humans are not the center of the universe and that there's more to this than meets the eye.
The book is also hilarious.
I love it.
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The biggest issue you have here is run-on sentences. Try to avoid linking more than two clauses together into a single sentence unless you have to. Your vocabulary is excellent and I like your review!
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Apparently, this series is quite famous in the U.K, in fact, there are some radio shows available on BBC radio which I highly recommend. Apparently, this series is quite famous in the U.K Most of the time, transition words are a good place to stop a sentence in English. (For example, "in fact," "in other words," "of course," "sometimes," etc.) Run-on sentences are very easy to make in English and they're hard to read. If you have two independent clauses, they should be separate sentences unless you have a good stylistic reason to connect them. Apparently, this series is quite famous in the U UK or U.K. are both correct, but I am not sure how the periods in "U.K." should interact with the punctuation (comma or period) of the sentence. |
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There is also a movie starring well-known actors but for obvious reasons, the movie was a box-office bomb. There is also a movie starring well-known actors, but for obvious reasons, the movie was a box-office bomb. When a word like "but" or "or" is used in English to connect two conflicting ideas, you put a comma before the connecting word. Also, I don't know if you really want to say "for obvious reasons" here. "For obvious reasons" implies the reader already knows the reasons and doesn't need it explained. (For example, "He went out partying and didn't want to drive home, for obvious reasons.") This sentence as a stand-alone would work if there were an easy-to-describe bad quality about it. ("There's also a movie starring some of the most hated actors in the industry, but for obvious reasons, it was a box-office bomb.") There is also a movie starring well-known actors but for At this point, you have not discussed the reasons the movie was a box office bomb so it is not obvious yet. Alternately, you could say "...but there are obvious reasons why the movie was a box-office bomb." |
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The main reason is the plot itself which entails sci-fic, absurd situations, and philosophical questions, in other words, a melting pot where the author blended different topics. The main reason is due to the plot itself, which entails sci-fi Verb agreement - since you use "entails" you should use "blends" because they describe the same idea. The main reason is the plot itself which entails sci-fic, absurd situations, and philosophical questions |
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All of these topics in the pages of a book work perfectly because the author can stop himself to detail some obscure parts of the story, but in a movie the director has a time limit, therefore has to neglect some parts of the book or downright skip some parts of the plot, thus in many cases, the story has to be shortened too much and the audience ends up confused and not understanding a thing, which was the case with this movie. All of these topics in the pages of a book work perfectly because the author can stop himself to detail some obscure parts of the story, but in a movie the director has a time limit, therefore has to neglect some parts of the book or downright skip some parts of the plot |
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Now, back to the story, everything begins when Artur wakes up just to realize that the earth is going to end in a couple of minutes. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Now, back to the story |
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Fortunately for him, his friend rescues him just in time and upon this they begin an odyssey throughout the time-space fabric, going to different periods of time and to diverse points in the universe. Fortunately for him, his friend rescues him just in time and "Diverse" is used only to describe when something has many distinct types, usually for concepts/genres or people. ("A diverse music taste." or "A diverse population.") "Point" is highly specific, like putting your finger on something. I assume the locations are big, so "place" is the better word. Fortunately for him, his friend rescues him just in time and |
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This aspect of the novel is quite enjoyable because the author seems to be quite versed in physics and what is more, all the scientific resources he uses to back up his narrative make sense or at least have some base on scientific discoveries, which contributes to creating the illusion that even though the story is pure fantasy it may well have some base on reality. This aspect of the novel is quite enjoyable because the author seems to be quite well-versed in physics |
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As for the morale of the story, I’d describe the book as eye-opening because when the reader opens the books he is in the same situation than Artur, a normal human who is convinced that the world that he sees around is everything that exists, and who doesn’t question what is socially understood by reality. As for the moral I don't know if you mean moral - a moral is a lesson learned. You could say it's the "point" of the story or even change that first portion to, "To describe the story in one word, I'd say it's eye-opening." That's a common expression in English. "By reality" means that reality is the one understanding. "As reality" makes reality a part of this comparison. Also - just a note - "he" for an unknown third person is becoming increasingly formal in English. It's more conversational to use "they" for an unknown person, and more and more grammar resources are accepting it as correct. (In other words, you might consider saying, "when the reader opens the books they are in the same situation as Artur.") As for the moral |
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However, when the journey begins, the reader goes hand in hand with Artur discovering a completely new universe and multiverse, full of novelties to soon realize that humans are not the center of the universe and that there's more to this than meets the eye. However, when the journey begins, the reader goes hand in hand with Artur discovering a completely new universe and multiverse |
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Actually, I’ve only read the first three parts out of six.
"Actually" is used to contradict what was said before. "In fact" is used to add to what was said. We already know you didn't read the whole book yet, so you're adding to what you said. |
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All of these topics in the pages of a book work perfectly because the author can stop himself to detail some obscure parts of the story, but in a movie the director has a time limit, therefore has to neglect some parts of the book or downright cut some parts of the plot. All of these topics in the pages of a book work perfectly because the author can stop himself to detail some obscure parts of the story Notice you had your independent clause ("All...perfectly"), and then a dependent clause ("because..story."). That's where a sentence usually stops or else it becomes a run-on. Adjectives are downright ("That's downright crazy!"), verbs are outright ("He asked him outright."). |
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Thus, in many cases, the story has to be shortened too much and the audience ends up confused and not understanding a thing, which was the case with this movie. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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