Feb. 16, 2025
The following was an actual event.
About 10 years ago, ex assembly member A (Anonymous) said to have embezzled taxpayer money under the pretext of one-day business trip over 197 times.
Unusual spending was evident, including purchases at locations not included in the business trip itinerary.
He was allegedly having misused a large portion of the approximately 150,000 dollars in political activity funds for personal use, which is pretty frugal compared to the US though.
１０年ほど前、A元議員(匿名)は日帰り出張の名目で１９７回出張を繰り返し公的資金を横領したと言われています。
出張ルートにない場所の物品購入歴があり、不自然な支出が目立っており発覚しました。
政務活動費の約１５００００ドルの大部分を不正使用し、私的流用していたとみられています。ーその額はアメリカに比べたら慎ましいものですが。
The following was an actual event.
About 10 years ago, ex assembly member A (Anonymous) said to have embezzled taxpayer money under the pretext of one-day business trip over 197 times.
Unusual spending was evident, including purchases at locations not included in the business trip itinerary.
He was allegedly having misused a large portion of the approximately 150,000 dollars in political activity funds for personal use, which is pretty frugal compared to the US though.
Feb. 18, 2025
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About 10 years ago, ex assembly member A (Anonymous) was said to have embezzled taxpayer money under the pretext of a one-day business trip over 197 times.
said -> was said: "A" probably didn't say that he embezzled taxpayer money (that would be self admission of guilt). "was said" = "rumored"
He was said to have died a few years ago ◎
He said to have died a few years ago X
one-day business trip -> a one-day business trip: Missing article
UThere was unusual spending was evident, including purchases at locations not included in the business trip itinerary.
Unusual spending was evident -> There was unusual spending: More natural way to say it
He was allegedly having misused a large portion of the approximately 150,000 dollars in political activity funds for personal use, whichthough that is pretty frugal compared to the US thoughUS politicians.
He was allegedly having misused -> He allegedly misused: tense and form
which is pretty frugal compared to the US though. -> though that is pretty frugal compared to US politicians: "though" goes to the front. We have to mention "US politicians" and not just "US" for specificity.
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Great English! And you're definitely right about the US politicians part
Feb. 17, 2025
Thank you ^^
The following was an actual event.
About 10 years ago, ex -assembly member A (Anonymous) is said to have embezzled taxpayer money under the pretext of one-day business trips over 197 times.
Unusual spending was evident, including purchases at locations not included in the business trip itinerary.
He was allegedly having misused a large portion of the approximately 150,000 dollars in political activity funds for personal use, which is pretty frugal compared to the US though.
When reading I thought that the 'though' surprised me--it feels unnecessary, but I'm struggling to explain why. If you want to use 'though', a better way would be something like "though that is pretty frugal compared to the US."
The following was an actual event.
About 10 years ago, an anonymous ex -assembly member A (Anonymous)was said to have embezzled taxpayer money under the pretext of one-day business trip over 197 times.
Here, since you don't refer to the name "A" elsewhere in the passage, it flows cleaner for the reader if you use that as an adjective to describe the phrase.
Another option for this: "a former assemblyman"
He was allegedly having misused a large portion of the approximately 150,000 dollars in political activity funds for personal use, which is pretty frugal compared to the US though.
Here, I am a little concerned that your reader might not be clear on if you are referring to the size of the campaign funds or the corruption.
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An interesting case!
Feb. 16, 2025
Indeed. Thank you^^
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About 10 years ago, ex assembly member A (Anonymous) said to have embezzled taxpayer money under the pretext of one-day business trip over 197 times. About 10 years ago, an anonymous ex Here, since you don't refer to the name "A" elsewhere in the passage, it flows cleaner for the reader if you use that as an adjective to describe the phrase. Another option for this: "a former assemblyman" About 10 years ago, ex About 10 years ago, ex assembly member A (Anonymous) was said to have embezzled taxpayer money under the pretext of a one-day business trip over 197 times. said -> was said: "A" probably didn't say that he embezzled taxpayer money (that would be self admission of guilt). "was said" = "rumored" He was said to have died a few years ago ◎ He said to have died a few years ago X one-day business trip -> a one-day business trip: Missing article This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Unusual spending was evident, including purchases at locations not included in the business trip itinerary. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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He was allegedly having misused a large portion of the approximately 150,000 dollars in political activity funds for personal use, which is pretty frugal compared to the US though. He Here, I am a little concerned that your reader might not be clear on if you are referring to the size of the campaign funds or the corruption. He When reading I thought that the 'though' surprised me--it feels unnecessary, but I'm struggling to explain why. If you want to use 'though', a better way would be something like "though that is pretty frugal compared to the US." He He was allegedly having misused -> He allegedly misused: tense and form which is pretty frugal compared to the US though. -> though that is pretty frugal compared to US politicians: "though" goes to the front. We have to mention "US politicians" and not just "US" for specificity. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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