Dec. 13, 2022
The first time visit IKEA in the USA
Today my geek friend and I measured my room and made a list to pick a desk and chair for the study place.
I love visiting IKEA when I was in China, the carteen there has an excellent meatballs, strange but yummy soup, and 1 RMB ice cream! So I was really looking forward to visit IKEA in USA, I think the shop would be bigger and have many special item.
Unfortunately, when we arrived there, half of the food is out of storage (so IKEA’s style!) , so I have no choice but only a kid meal. The lucky thing is that I had the meatballs and also bought one bag to enjoy.
The first time I visited IKEA in the USA
You have to clarify who or what is visiting.
Today my geek friend and I measured my room and made a list to pick a desk and chair for the study place.
I loved visiting IKEA when I was in China, the carnteen there has an excellent meatballs, strange but yummy soup, and 1 RMB ice cream!
using an here indicates there is only one meatball, later you pluralized to meatballs so there is more than one
So I was really looking forward to visiting IKEA in USA, I think the shoptore would be bigger and have many special items.
Unfortunately, when we arrived there, half of the food is out of storagwas not available (so IKEA’s style!) , so I didn't have noa choice but onlyexcept for a kid's meal.
Very awkward sounding.
The lucky thing iwas that I had the meatballs and also bought one bag to enjoy.
'is' is present tense and 'was' is past tense, you need to use past tense here unless you just finished eating the meatballs
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Can't blame you for writing about their meatballs, I love them as well. Good job writing.
Dec. 14, 2022
Thanks tim315, I would pay more attention on tense. And meatballs are soooo great!
Dec. 15, 2022
Thanks tim315, I would pay more attention on tense. And meatballs are soooo great!
Wrong tense here, should be 'will'.
Thanks tim315, I will pay more attention on tense. And meatballs are soooo great!
The first time vMy First Visit to IKEA in the USA
ohhh, this is going to be fun to read!
Today my geek friend and I measured my room and made a list to pick out a desk and chair for the study place.
"Geek friend" sounds kind of mean but I'm older. Maybe you can say, "my technologically advanced friend" instead?
I loved visiting IKEA when I was in China, t. The carteenfeteria there has an excellent meatballs, strange but yummy soup, and 1 RMB ice cream!
Yay! That sounds like IKEAS in the US, too.
So I was really looking forward to visiting IKEA in the USA,. I thinkought the shoptore would be bigger and have many more special items.
Unfortunately, when we arrived there, half of the food is out of storagewas sold out (so IKEA’s style!) , so I haved no choice but onlto buy a kid's meal.
wow! That's terrible! I bet it's because of the Winter Holidays that IKEA is busier and, yes, I agree, selling out their food is definitely IKEA's style.
The lucky thing is that I hadLuckily, I could have the meatballs and then I also bought one bag to enjoy at home.
Yay!
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I'm glad it wasn't all bad. Terrific writing!
Dec. 14, 2022
Today my geek friend and I measured my room and made a list to pick out a desk and chair for the study place.
Wow, thanks! I think the phrase you recommended is more formal and polite to use! For my opinion, since the influence of technology industry’s growth, many young people who dive into the computer are proud of being called geek, I was also one of them. I think it is interesting to look into how economy power twist a word emotional meaning.
Dec. 14, 2022
Thanks Mari, your corrections are detailed and reminds me to pay more attention on my grammar and phrase. Reading your feedback also gives me more perspective to think about how language influence the social environment we live.
Dec. 14, 2022
Wow, thanks! I think the phrase you recommended is more formal and polite to use! For my opinion, since the influence of technology industry’s growth, many young people who dive into the computer are proud of being called geek, I was also one of them. I think it is interesting to look into how economy power twist a word emotional meaning.
Thanks for letting me know that people are proud to be called a geek these days. Maybe I can use it more to describe my friends and, especially, myself. :)
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The first time visit IKEA in the USA
ohhh, this is going to be fun to read! The first time I visited IKEA in the USA You have to clarify who or what is visiting. |
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Today my geek friend and I measured my room and made a list to pick a desk and chair for the study place. Today my geek friend and I measured my room and made a list to pick out a desk and chair for the study place. "Geek friend" sounds kind of mean but I'm older. Maybe you can say, "my technologically advanced friend" instead? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I love visiting IKEA when I was in China, the carteen there has an excellent meatballs, strange but yummy soup, and 1 RMB ice cream! I loved visiting IKEA when I was in China Yay! That sounds like IKEAS in the US, too. I loved visiting IKEA when I was in China, the ca using an here indicates there is only one meatball, later you pluralized to meatballs so there is more than one |
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So I was really looking forward to visit IKEA in USA, I think the shop would be bigger and have many special item. So I was really looking forward to visiting IKEA in the USA So I was really looking forward to visiting IKEA in USA, I think the s |
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Unfortunately, when we arrived there, half of the food is out of storage (so IKEA’s style!) , so I have no choice but only a kid meal. Unfortunately, when we arrived there, half of the food wow! That's terrible! I bet it's because of the Winter Holidays that IKEA is busier and, yes, I agree, selling out their food is definitely IKEA's style. Unfortunately, when we arrived there, half of the food Very awkward sounding. |
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The lucky thing is that I had the meatballs and also bought one bag to enjoy.
Yay! The lucky thing 'is' is present tense and 'was' is past tense, you need to use past tense here unless you just finished eating the meatballs |
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