Oct. 1, 2021
The First Day
I worked 4 hours for a part-time job. I had my hair cut today, finally. I went to the barber's, but it was full of people. I played the drums. I learned Japanese for half an hour. I read three chapters of <yell> by Lu Xun. I really need to stay away from my phone, just then can I concentrate on reading. When I'd run 300 m, it started to rain and the wind was so strong, so I had to stop.
The barber is on his 40s. When I was a kid, he had been being a barber. There was a girl working in his shop, then they fell in love. But the barber's parents were strongly dissatisfied with their relationship, and tried to stop then from getting married beacuse the girl was older than the barber. However, their parents failed. They got married and had a son soon. They have two sons now, the older is 15 years old. I asked him about his parents age and told him the history. The fact is that his mother is just one year older than his father. I was really shocked. Then maybe the reason wasn't their age but the family situation. It was said that the girl's family was very normal even poor, while the barber's family seemed like wealthier. They were both short.
They talked about their first son ZY with me so much. ZY was obsessed with basketball in the last year of middle school, so his studies fell behind. It was the fault of the basket, ZY would have gotten higher scores otherwise. I kept silent because I knew ZY quite well and I disagreed with them, but I didn't wanted to waste my time to destroy their feelings. If people want to have a bubble dream, I should not the one who prick it.
The First Day
I worked 4 hours for aat my part-time job today.
I assume you're saying here that you have a second job outside of teaching, otherwise "I worked part-time for 4 hours today/I worked a half-day today."
I also had my hair cut today, finally.
I went to the barber's, but it was full of people.
I played the drums.
I learnstudied Japanese for half an hour.
I read three chapters of <y"Yell>" by Lu Xun.
If it's a book, we use italics for the title, for short stories, articles, and essays, we use quotation marks. Unfortunately no cool chevrons like in Chinese. 你读的是《呐喊》吗？觉得怎么样？
I really need to stay away from my phone, justonly then can I concentrate on reading.
When I' had run 300 m, it started to rain, and the wind was so strong, so that I had to stop.
The barber is oin his 40s.
When IHe was a kid, he had been being a barberbarber even when I was a kid.
He must have been a fairly young barber!
There was a girl working in his shop, thenand they fell in love.
ButHowever, the barber's parents were strongly dissatisfied with their relationship, and tried to stop then from getting married, beacause the girl was older than the barber.
"But" at the beginning of sentences is largely incorrect.
However, theirhis parents failed.
They got married and had a son soon after.
They have two sons now,; the older one is 15 years old.
I asked him about his parents age and told him the history.
The fact isIt turns out that his mother is just one year older than his father.
I was really shocked.
ThenIn that case, maybe the reason wasn't their age, but the family situation's status.
It was said that the girl's family was very normalaverage, even poor, while the barber's family seemed like wealthier.
They were both short.
They talked about their first son ZY with me so much.
ZY was obsessed with basketball in the last year of middle school, so his studies fell behind.
It was the fault of the baskesport, ZY would have gotten higher scores otherwise.
I like "it was the fault of the basket," it's very poetic.
I kept silent because I knew ZY quite well and I disagreed with themhis parents, but I didn't wanted to waste my time to destroyand hurt their feelings.
"Didn't" already is past tense, so you don't double up by making the verb after it past tense.
If people want to have a bubble dreams, I should not be the one who prick itruins them.
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Nice writing!
Oct. 3, 2021
I read three chapters of <y"Yell>" by Lu Xun.
我初中就看了很多鲁迅的书，现在重新看，依然看不懂~~
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The First Day This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I worked 4 hours for a part-time job. I worked 4 hours I assume you're saying here that you have a second job outside of teaching, otherwise "I worked part-time for 4 hours today/I worked a half-day today." |
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I had my hair cut today, finally. I also had my hair cut today, finally. |
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I went to the barber's, but it was full of people. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I played the drums. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I learned Japanese for half an hour. I |
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I read three chapters of <yell> by Lu Xun. I read three chapters of If it's a book, we use italics for the title, for short stories, articles, and essays, we use quotation marks. Unfortunately no cool chevrons like in Chinese. 你读的是《呐喊》吗？觉得怎么样？ |
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I really need to stay away from my phone, just then can I concentrate on reading. I really need to stay away from my phone, |
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When I'd run 300 m, it started to rain and the wind was so strong, so I had to stop. When I |
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The barber is on his 40s. The barber is |
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When I was a kid, he had been being a barber.
He must have been a fairly young barber! |
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There was a girl working in his shop, then they fell in love. There was a girl working in his shop, |
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But the barber's parents were strongly dissatisfied with their relationship, and tried to stop then from getting married beacuse the girl was older than the barber.
"But" at the beginning of sentences is largely incorrect. |
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However, their parents failed. However, |
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They got married and had a son soon. They got married and had a son soon after. |
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They have two sons now, the older is 15 years old. They have two sons now |
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I asked him about his parents age and told him the history. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The fact is that his mother is just one year older than his father.
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I was really shocked. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Then maybe the reason wasn't their age but the family situation.
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It was said that the girl's family was very normal even poor, while the barber's family seemed like wealthier. It was said that the girl's family was very |
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They were both short. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They talked about their first son ZY with me so much. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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ZY was obsessed with basketball in the last year of middle school, so his studies fell behind. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was the fault of the basket, ZY would have gotten higher scores otherwise. It was the fault of the I like "it was the fault of the basket," it's very poetic. |
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I kept silent because I knew ZY quite well and I disagreed with them, but I didn't wanted to waste my time to destroy their feelings. I kept silent because I knew ZY quite well and I disagreed with "Didn't" already is past tense, so you don't double up by making the verb after it past tense. |
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If people want to have a bubble dream, I should not the one who prick it. If people want to have |
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