July 19, 2020
The excitement when we ride a bicycle for the first time
How exciting it is when you manage to ride a bicycle for the first time and how it fades is as many people say. It feels like getting in a world completely different for few weeks. However, that excitement will not last so long. We gradually take it for granted that we can ride a bicycle, and when we cannot use a bicycle for some reason, we realize how useful and convenient it is again.
初めて自転車に乗れたときの新鮮さは多くの人が告白するとおりである。始めの
うちは別世界に生まれ変わってきたのかと思われる。しかし，この驚きは長続きしな
い。やがては当たり前になってしまう。ついには，自転車に乗っていることすら意識
しなくなってしまう。それで，何かの事情で自転車に乗れない生活を強いられると，
自転車の有り難みを改めて認識する
The excitement when weof rideing a bicyclke for the first time
Talking about the action, rather than "we" including the reader.
Also I won't correct it all the way through, but the word "bicycle" is not used that often, and I subconsciously changed it to bike!
How exciting it is when you manage to ride a bicycle for the first time, and how it fades, is as many people say.
It feels like getting in a worldentering a completely different world for few weeks.
Adjective before noun in English :) and e.g. "entering" sounds a lot better here.
However, that excitement will not last sovery long.
We gradually start to take it for granted that we can ride a bicycle, and, when we cannot use a bicycle for some reason, we realize how useful and convenient it is again.
Trick for subordinate clauses/comma sandwiches: the sentence should sound the same without the part in middle of the commas (here, the "when we cannot use a bicycle for some reason" bit).
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Overall excellent :)
However, that excitement will not last so long.
We gradually take it for granted that we can ride a bicycle, and when we cannot use a bicycle for some reason, we realize how useful and convenient it is again.
The excitement when we ride a bicycle for the first time
How exciting it is when you manage toMany people remark on the excitement of rideing a bicycle for the first time and how it fades is as many people say.
I read your explanation at the bottom and I think your focus is on 'excitement' (the noun form of excite) so I rephrased it... I'm not sure what you meant by 'how it fades', because there is no following explanation on "how".
Most native sentences would put the speaker/thinker (e.g. many people in this case) at the front. 'Many people say...' 'Some say..'.
If you want to use it at the back, consider using a comma after the thought or opinion. e.g. How exciting is it is to ride a bicycle for the first time, many people say.
It feels like getting in a world completely different world for few weeks.
I would move 'different' , the adjective, in front of 'world' (noun). If you want to put that behind, i would add a 'that was'. i.e. n a world that was completely different.
However, that excitement will not last so long.
We gradually take it for granted that we can ride a bicycle, and when we cannot use a bicycle for some reason, we realize how useful and convenient it is again.
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Great job! Some unnatural syntax but it was easy to understand.
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The excitement when we ride a bicycle for the first time This sentence has been marked as perfect! The excitement Talking about the action, rather than "we" including the reader. Also I won't correct it all the way through, but the word "bicycle" is not used that often, and I subconsciously changed it to bike! |
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How exciting it is when you manage to ride a bicycle for the first time and how it fades is as many people say.
I read your explanation at the bottom and I think your focus is on 'excitement' (the noun form of excite) so I rephrased it... I'm not sure what you meant by 'how it fades', because there is no following explanation on "how". Most native sentences would put the speaker/thinker (e.g. many people in this case) at the front. 'Many people say...' 'Some say..'. If you want to use it at the back, consider using a comma after the thought or opinion. e.g. How exciting is it is to ride a bicycle for the first time, many people say. How exciting it is when you manage to ride a bicycle for the first time, and how it fades, is as many people say. |
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It feels like getting in a world completely different for few weeks. It feels like getting in a I would move 'different' , the adjective, in front of 'world' (noun). If you want to put that behind, i would add a 'that was'. i.e. n a world that was completely different. It feels like Adjective before noun in English :) and e.g. "entering" sounds a lot better here. |
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However, that excitement will not last so long. However, that excitement will not last This sentence has been marked as perfect! However, that excitement will not last |
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We gradually take it for granted that we can ride a bicycle, and when we cannot use a bicycle for some reason, we realize how useful and convenient it is again. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! We gradually start to take it for granted that we can ride a bicycle Trick for subordinate clauses/comma sandwiches: the sentence should sound the same without the part in middle of the commas (here, the "when we cannot use a bicycle for some reason" bit). |
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