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The End of the Book "Divergent" (Spoiled)

Yesterday, I just finished the first book of the series Divergent. I started to read it 2 months ago, and read 1 chapter a day.
I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and enjoy the reading at the same time.
When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated, I didn't understand everything.
But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understant more and more, until understand almost everything.
I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuon between when I started the book and when I finished it.

The story was really cool. So many things happened and the characters were really well developped.
I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tve same time. It was difficult to understand her feelings!
When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like that. At the beginning, it's like an utopian, but it quickly turned into a dystopian. At the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.
During her journey and her initiation test like they called it, she met Tobias (he's often called "Four" because he only had 4 fears when he did the exam with the fear landscape) and she fell in love. They're really cute together and it was funny to see the hiden part of Tobias's character, because he often looks tough whereas he's so kind with Tris.

To conclude, I really loved the story, but just think that the end should have been better, because so much happened in a really short time. I just received today the two next books, so I will start this evening to read them!

I hope you enjoyed reading my text! Please tell me what you thought of my English!

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The End of the Book "Divergent" (Spoiled)

Yesterday, I just finished the first book of the series Divergent.

I started to read it 2 months ago, and read 1 chapter a day.

I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and enjoy the reading at the same time.

When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated, I didn't understand everything.

But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understantd more and more, until understand almost everything.

I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuion between when I started the book and when I finished it.

The story was really cool.

So many things happened and the characters were really well developped.

I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvhe same time.

It was difficult to understand her feelings!

When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like that.

At the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found it weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.

During her journey and her initiation test like they called it, she met Tobias (he's often called "Four" because he only had 4 fears when he did the exam with the fear landscape) and she fell in love.

They're really cute together and it was funny to see the hidden part of Tobias's character, because he often looks tough whereas he's so kind with Tris.

To conclude, I really loved the story, but just think that the end should have been better, because so much happened in a really short time.

I just received today the twohe next two books today, so I will start this evening to read them!

I hope you enjoyed reading my text!

Please tell me what you thought of my English!

The End of the Book "Divergent" (Spoiled)

We usually write "Spoiler Alert," rather than "Spoiled," but "Spoiled" does communicate the message in a gramatically correct way.

Yesterday, I just finished the first book of the series Divergent.

We can use "just" to mean something that happened yesterday, but we wouldn't say yesterday. We would only ever mention the time if it happened very recently, i.e., a few seconds. Examples:
"I just found this a few seconds ago"

A: "I just finished the book" B: "When" A: "Yesterday"

I started to read it 2 months ago, and read 1 chapter a day.

I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and enjoying the reading at the same time.

You could also just use the non -ing forms, but it must be consistent.

When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated,; I didn't understand everything.

"I didn't understand everything" is an independent clause, which warrants a semi-colon.

But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understantd more and more, until I understanood almost everything.

I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuion between when I started the book and when I finished it.

I think that was just a typo.

The story was really cool.

So many things happened; and the characters were really well developped.

I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvhe same time.

It was difficult to understand her feelings!

When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like thatthe way it did.

Since you haven't discussed the ending yet, we wouldn't use "like that."

At the beginning, it's like an utopian, but it quickly turned into a dystopian.

At the end, both of Tris's parents died, and I found weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death weird.

Where you put "weird" was ok, but less natural.

During her journey and her initiation test like, as they called it, she met Tobias (hHe's often called "Four" because he only had 4 fears when he did the exam with the fear landscape.) and she fell in love.

They're really cute together and it was funny to see the hiden part of Tobias's character, because he often looks tough whereas he's so kind with Tris.

To conclude, I really loved the story, but just think that the end should have been better, because so much happened in a really short time.

I justToday, I received today the two nexthe next two books, so I will start this evening to read themo read them this evening!

I hope you enjoyed reading my text!

Please tell me what you thought of my English!

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Your skills are astounding. You are articulate and easy to comprehend. If you keep reading and writing like this, your writing style will continue to improve!

I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and can enjoy the reading at the same time.

When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated,. I didn't understand everything.

But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understantd more and more, until I understanood almost everything.

I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuion between when I started the book and when I finished it.

So many things happened and the characters were really well developped.

I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvhe same time.

When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like that.

Could say - I didn't think the end would be like that - I didn't see the ending coming

At the beginning, it's like an utopian, but it quickly turned into a dystopian.

AtIn the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found it weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.

I just received today the two next books, so I will start this evening I'll starto reading them!

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Great English, enjoy the books!

The End of the Book "Divergent" (Spoiled)


The End of the Book "Divergent" (Spoiled)

We usually write "Spoiler Alert," rather than "Spoiled," but "Spoiled" does communicate the message in a gramatically correct way.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Yesterday, I just finished the first book of the series Divergent.


Yesterday, I just finished the first book of the series Divergent.

We can use "just" to mean something that happened yesterday, but we wouldn't say yesterday. We would only ever mention the time if it happened very recently, i.e., a few seconds. Examples: "I just found this a few seconds ago" A: "I just finished the book" B: "When" A: "Yesterday"

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I started to read it 2 months ago, and read 1 chapter a day.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and enjoy the reading at the same time.


I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and can enjoy the reading at the same time.

I decided to read it in English so that I'm improving my English and enjoying the reading at the same time.

You could also just use the non -ing forms, but it must be consistent.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated, I didn't understand everything.


When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated,. I didn't understand everything.

When I started to read it, it was a bit complicated,; I didn't understand everything.

"I didn't understand everything" is an independent clause, which warrants a semi-colon.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understant more and more, until understand almost everything.


But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understantd more and more, until I understanood almost everything.

But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understantd more and more, until I understanood almost everything.

But I think, with the habit of the author's writting style, I started to understantd more and more, until understand almost everything.

I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuon between when I started the book and when I finished it.


I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuion between when I started the book and when I finished it.

I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuion between when I started the book and when I finished it.

I think that was just a typo.

I really felt a big difference in my comprehensuion between when I started the book and when I finished it.

I hope you enjoyed reading my text!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Please tell me what you thought of my English!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The story was really cool.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

So many things happened and the characters were really well developped.


So many things happened and the characters were really well developped.

So many things happened; and the characters were really well developped.

So many things happened and the characters were really well developped.

I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tve same time.


I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvhe same time.

I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvhe same time.

I loved Tris because she was brave and mysterious at tvhe same time.

It was difficult to understand her feelings!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like that.


When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like that.

Could say - I didn't think the end would be like that - I didn't see the ending coming

When I started to read it, I didn't think the end would look like thatthe way it did.

Since you haven't discussed the ending yet, we wouldn't use "like that."

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

At the beginning, it's like an utopian, but it quickly turned into a dystopian.


At the beginning, it's like an utopian, but it quickly turned into a dystopian.

At the beginning, it's like an utopian, but it quickly turned into a dystopian.

During her journey and her initiation test like they called it, she met Tobias (he's often called "Four" because he only had 4 fears when he did the exam with the fear landscape) and she fell in love.


During her journey and her initiation test like, as they called it, she met Tobias (hHe's often called "Four" because he only had 4 fears when he did the exam with the fear landscape.) and she fell in love.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

They're really cute together and it was funny to see the hiden part of Tobias's character, because he often looks tough whereas he's so kind with Tris.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

They're really cute together and it was funny to see the hidden part of Tobias's character, because he often looks tough whereas he's so kind with Tris.

To conclude, I really loved the story, but just think that the end should have been better, because so much happened in a really short time.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I just received today the two next books, so I will start this evening to read them!


I just received today the two next books, so I will start this evening I'll starto reading them!

I justToday, I received today the two nexthe next two books, so I will start this evening to read themo read them this evening!

I just received today the twohe next two books today, so I will start this evening to read them!

At the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.


AtIn the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found it weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.

At the end, both of Tris's parents died, and I found weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death weird.

Where you put "weird" was ok, but less natural.

At the end, both Tris's parents died, and I found it weird the fact that Tris didn't look that sad after their death.

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