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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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The City in which I Live (4)

Four seasons a year in my hometown is distinctive. The flowers bloom in Spring, hot in Summer, yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and light snow in the mountains nearby in Winter.
Chongqing is one of the main three furnace cities along the Yangtze River. Many local elders and kids would usually go to some comparison high sea-level mountain areas in Summer. Some peasants who live in the mountains smile and exciting in every Summer, especially when the city is into scorching hot weather in some years. The price of their house for tenants is doubled or even tripled according to the weather forecast.
There is a famous circle latitude located in the north 30 of the equator, any creatures around the latitude are living better and more active than in the other places on earth. You can search for more details explanations if you are interested.
Chongqing is situated on this important latitude. The geographic location of China also has more privileges than all the other countries.
But as we know god is fair to everyone, he would not give everything which is the best for you.

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The City in which I Live (4)

Four seasons a year in my hometown isIn my hometown, the four seasons are distinctive.

This sounds more natural in the US.

The flowers bloom in Spring, the sun shines hot in Summer, yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and light snowsnow lightly falls in the mountains nearby in Winter.

I modified the sentence for parallel sentence construction.

Chongqing is one of the main three furnace cities along the Yangtze River.

Many local elders and kids wouldsenior citizens and children usually go to some comparisonatively high sea-level mountain areas in Summer.

"Elders" can mean senior states people, too, so I used, "senior citizens" to make it clear.l

Some peasantsThose who live in the mountains smile and exciting inare very excited every Summer, especially when the city is intoexperiencing scorching hot weather in some years.

"Peasants" is a word we don't use very much any more in the US.

The price ofto rent their house for tenants is doubled or even tripled according to the weather forecast.

There is a famous circle of latitude located in the north 30 of the equator, a. Any creatures around the latitude are livinglive better and are more active than in the other places on eEarth.

You can search for more detailsed explanations if you are interested.

Chongqing is situated on this important latitude.

The geographic location of China also has more privileges than all the other countries.

But as we know, god is fair to everyone, . They/he/she would not give everything which is the best for you.

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Good work! I'd never heard of the North 30 Circle of Latitude before so thank you for telling us!

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 8, 2022

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Thank you!
I guess the vocabulary of "peasants" is more like a prejudiced word now.

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mari

Dec. 8, 2022

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Thank you! I guess the vocabulary of "peasants" is more like a prejudiced word now.

Yes, you understand it correctly.

The City in which I Llive (4)

FourEach seasons a of the year in, my hometown is distinctive.looks different.

The flowers bloom in Spring, it’s hot in Summer, the yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and there is light snow in the mountains nearby in Winter.

Chongqing is one of the main three furnace cities along the Yangtze River.

Many local elders and kids would usually go to some comparison high sea-levelthe mountain areas in Summer.

Some years, the peasants who live in the mountains smile and are exciting in everyed in Summer, especially when the city is intoexperiencing scorching hot weather in some years.

The price ofrent for their houses for tenantholiday makers is doubled or even tripled accordepending to on the weather forecast.

There is a famous circle latitude located in the north 30 degrees of the equator, any creatures around theat latitude are livinge better and are more active than in theany other places on earth.

You can search for a more detailsed explanations if you are interested.

Chongqing is situated oin this important latitude.

The geographic location of China also has more privileprovides more benefits/ advantages than all the other countries.

But as we know gGod is fair to everyone, he would not give everything which is the best for you.

This sentence is unclear. Did you want to say he would not give everything good to only some people? Or he gives everyone something that is good?

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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But as we know gGod is fair to everyone, he would not give everything which is the best for you.

Sorry for being unclear, I wanted to say that God would not give everything good to only some people.

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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Thanks for your correction!
Sorry for being unclear in the last sentence, I wanted to say that God would not give everything good to only some people.

The City in which I Live (4)

Four seasons a year in my hometown isare distinctive.

To sound more natural, you could try 'My hometown has four distinctive seasons.'

The flowers bloom in Spring, it's hot in Summer, yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and light snow in thefalls on the nearby mountains nearby in Winter.

I tried to make the structure of each sentence in the list similar so that it flows better.

Chongqing is one of the main three main furnace cities along the Yangtze River.

Many local elders and kids would usually go to some comparisonsimilarly high sea- level mountain areas in Summer.

No hyphen is needed for 'sea level.'

Some peasants who live in the mountains smile and are exciting ined every Summer, especially when the city is into scorching hot weather in some years.

I think this is what you meant?

The price of their house for tenants is doubled or even tripled according to the weather forecast.

This is a bit awkward. I would consider moving the last part of your sentence to the beginning.

There is a famous circle latitude located in the north 30 of the equator,; any creatures around the latitude are living better and more active than in the other places on earth.

Two complete clauses separated by a comma is a comma splice.

You can search for more detailsed explanations if you are interested.

Chongqing is situated on this important latitude.

The geographic location of China also has more privileges than all the other countries.

But as we know god is fair to everyone, and he would not give everything which is the best for you.

I feel like 'god' should be capitalized, but I'm unsure. I think it might depend on which one you're referring to.

In this case, I fixed the comma splice by adding a conjunction after the comma.

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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Thank you very much!
It's interesting there are some differences between God and god, I will search for them.

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motte

Dec. 8, 2022

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Thank you very much! It's interesting there are some differences between God and god, I will search for them.

the only set rule in english is that proper nouns, beginnings of sentences, and the letter I(i) should be capitalised. and getting people to agree on those is very difficult lol

when i was in school, we were told "mom" was all lower-case when it was referring the the feminine parental figure. and when you wanted to talk about your mom, using Mom in place of her name, it would be capitalised, because it was a proper noun then. but that was in 2nd grade. i don't even know why *I* can remember that.

following that rule, god is god - all lowercase - when it refers to a supernatural being of religious worship. greek gods are just gods, and jesus is a god, and female gods are called goddesses, and so on. but when using it as a name, like with Mom, it becomes capitalised.

the issue with God/god specifically comes i think from rules regarding english in the 17th-18th centuries. we used to capitalise like... everything. proper nouns and any "important common noun" were capitalised. and this is around the time when books were widespread, and obviously the most popular of those books for english-speakers was the bible, and obviously, in the bible, God would be considered important enough to capitalise. even He was capitalised (not a noun, just a pronoun) simply because it referenced God.

so nowadays, to most religious people, to not capitalise God (especially when you're talking about The God Himself) is seen as rude - like you don't think he's important enough. but that varies by person naturally. technically, according to modern english rules, the word "god" is in the same category as the word "mom." doesn't mean every person thinks about those 2 the same way though lol

languages are weird huh?

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 8, 2022

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Thank you!
Yes, there are no fixed rules for a language. It is changing and developing all the time, but are all for better communication, understanding, and thinking.

The City in which I Live (4)


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Four seasons in a year in my hometown is distinctive.


The flowers bloom in Spring, hot in Summer, yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and light snow in the mountains nearby in Winter.


The flowers bloom in Spring, it's hot in Summer, yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and light snow in thefalls on the nearby mountains nearby in Winter.

I tried to make the structure of each sentence in the list similar so that it flows better.

The flowers bloom in Spring, it’s hot in Summer, the yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and there is light snow in the mountains nearby in Winter.

The flowers bloom in Spring, the sun shines hot in Summer, yellow leaves drop in Autumn, and light snowsnow lightly falls in the mountains nearby in Winter.

I modified the sentence for parallel sentence construction.

Chongqing is one of the main three furnace cities along the Yangtze River.


Chongqing is one of the main three main furnace cities along the Yangtze River.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Many local elders and kids would usually go to some comparison high sea-level mountain areas in Summer.


Many local elders and kids would usually go to some comparisonsimilarly high sea- level mountain areas in Summer.

No hyphen is needed for 'sea level.'

Many local elders and kids would usually go to some comparison high sea-levelthe mountain areas in Summer.

Many local elders and kids wouldsenior citizens and children usually go to some comparisonatively high sea-level mountain areas in Summer.

"Elders" can mean senior states people, too, so I used, "senior citizens" to make it clear.l

Some peasants who live in the mountains smile and exciting in every Summer, especially when the city is into scorching hot weather in some years.


Some peasants who live in the mountains smile and are exciting ined every Summer, especially when the city is into scorching hot weather in some years.

I think this is what you meant?

Some years, the peasants who live in the mountains smile and are exciting in everyed in Summer, especially when the city is intoexperiencing scorching hot weather in some years.

Some peasantsThose who live in the mountains smile and exciting inare very excited every Summer, especially when the city is intoexperiencing scorching hot weather in some years.

"Peasants" is a word we don't use very much any more in the US.

The price of their house for tenants is doubled or even tripled according to the weather forecast.


The price of their house for tenants is doubled or even tripled according to the weather forecast.

This is a bit awkward. I would consider moving the last part of your sentence to the beginning.

The price ofrent for their houses for tenantholiday makers is doubled or even tripled accordepending to on the weather forecast.

The price ofto rent their house for tenants is doubled or even tripled according to the weather forecast.

There is a famous circle latitude located in the north 30 of the equator, any creatures around the latitude are living better and more active than in the other places on earth.


There is a famous circle latitude located in the north 30 of the equator,; any creatures around the latitude are living better and more active than in the other places on earth.

Two complete clauses separated by a comma is a comma splice.

There is a famous circle latitude located in the north 30 degrees of the equator, any creatures around theat latitude are livinge better and are more active than in theany other places on earth.

There is a famous circle of latitude located in the north 30 of the equator, a. Any creatures around the latitude are livinglive better and are more active than in the other places on eEarth.

You can search for more details explanations if you are interested.


You can search for more detailsed explanations if you are interested.

You can search for a more detailsed explanations if you are interested.

You can search for more detailsed explanations if you are interested.

Chongqing is situated on this important latitude.


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Chongqing is situated oin this important latitude.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The geographic location of China also has more privileges than all the other countries.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The geographic location of China also has more privileprovides more benefits/ advantages than all the other countries.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

But as we know god is fair to everyone, he can not give you everything best for you.


Four seasons a year in my hometown is distinctive.


Four seasons a year in my hometown isare distinctive.

To sound more natural, you could try 'My hometown has four distinctive seasons.'

FourEach seasons a of the year in, my hometown is distinctive.looks different.

Four seasons a year in my hometown isIn my hometown, the four seasons are distinctive.

This sounds more natural in the US.

But as we know god is fair to everyone, he would not give everything which is the best for you.


But as we know god is fair to everyone, and he would not give everything which is the best for you.

I feel like 'god' should be capitalized, but I'm unsure. I think it might depend on which one you're referring to. In this case, I fixed the comma splice by adding a conjunction after the comma.

But as we know gGod is fair to everyone, he would not give everything which is the best for you.

This sentence is unclear. Did you want to say he would not give everything good to only some people? Or he gives everyone something that is good?

But as we know, god is fair to everyone, . They/he/she would not give everything which is the best for you.

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