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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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From 1966 to 1976, China was in a chaotic period, especially in the first two years. Some different groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they are the best lovers of Mao (the top leader of China), they fought, ran the gauntlet, killing each other. But Chongqing was different from other cities.
Because there were many military factories in the city or around, the radical workers in military factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired with artillery on the streets. Military forces were independent during the period, they had no bias on any side because both sides were faithful to Mao. The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said to me he heard guns shooting; saw artillery firing from both sides of the Yangtze River.
So many young people died at the time, and later, the local government built a tomb to mourn them. My father said they died meaninglessly. This kind of tomb in Chongqing is the biggest one in China. The tomb is still locked and not open to the public till now.

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I think I missed this correction earlier - sorry!

From 1966 to 1976, China was inexperienced a chaotic period, especially infor the first two years.

Some dDifferent groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they are the best lovers ofloved Mao (the top leader of China), the most: they fought, ran the gauntlet, killing each other.

残念!

But Chongqing, however, was different from other cities.

Because there were many military factories in the city or around, it, the radical workers in military factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired witheir artillery on the streets.

わー!

Military forces were independent during theis period, t. They had no bias on anyfor either side because both sides were faithful to Mao.

The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said to me. He told me that he heard guns being shooting; and saw artillery firingbeing fired from both sides of the Yangtze River.

怖いですね。

So many young people died at the time, and later, the local government built a tomb to mourn them.

My father said they died meaninglessly.

This kind of tomb in Chongqing is the biggest one in China.

The tomb is still locked and not open to the public tilleven now.

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悲しそう。もっとChongqingのことを教えてくれてありがとうございました。そして、とてもよく出来ました。

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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ありがとうございました。
この歴史、私たちは絶対に忘れません。

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mari

Dec. 8, 2022

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ありがとうございました。 この歴史、私たちは絶対に忘れません。

賛成しました!

From 1966 to 1976, China was in a chaotic period, especially in the first two years.

Some dDifferent groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they awere the best lovers offaithful to Mao, (the top leader of China), t. They fought, and ran the gauntlet, killing each other.

But Chongqing was different from other cities.

Because there were many military factories in the city or around, the city, radical workers in militarythe factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired with artillery oin the streets.

Military forces were independent during the period, they had no bias on any side because both sides were faithful to Mao.

The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said to. He told me he heard guns shooting; and saw artillery firing from both sides of the Yangtze River.

My father said they died meaninglessly.

This kind of tomb in Chongqing is the biggest one in China.

The tomb is still locked and not open to the public tilleven now.

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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Thanks for your corrections! :-)

From 1966 to 1976, China was in a chaotic period for China, especially in the first two years.

Some different groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they awere the best lovers of Mao (the top leader of China), they fought, ran the gauntlet, killing each other.

Because there were many military factories in the city or around, or around the city, the radical workers in military factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired with artillery on the streets.

Military forces were independent during the period, t. They had no bias ton any side because both sides were faithful to Mao.

The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said. He told me hethat he would heard guns shooting; saw and would see artillery firing from both sides of the Yangtze River.

So many young people died at the time, and later, the local government built a tomb to mourn them.

My father said they died meaninglessly.

You could also say "they died for nothing"

This kind of tomb in Chongqing is the biggest one in China.

The tomb is still locked and not open to the public till now.

"til" is short for "until"

"til" is commonly used when speaking, but you don’t see it very often in writing because its very casual

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Scarlett_Father

Dec. 7, 2022

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Thank you! :-)
I learned that "til" is short for "until" in a very casual way.

The City in which I live (3)


The City in which I lLive (3)

I think I missed this correction earlier - sorry!

From 1966 to 1976, China was in a chaotic period, especially in the first two years.


From 1966 to 1976, China was in a chaotic period for China, especially in the first two years.

From 1966 to 1976, China was in a chaotic period, especially in the first two years.

From 1966 to 1976, China was inexperienced a chaotic period, especially infor the first two years.

Some different groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they are the best lovers of Mao (the top leader of China), they fought, ran the gauntlet, killing each other.


Some different groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they awere the best lovers of Mao (the top leader of China), they fought, ran the gauntlet, killing each other.

Some dDifferent groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they awere the best lovers offaithful to Mao, (the top leader of China), t. They fought, and ran the gauntlet, killing each other.

Some dDifferent groups (not parties) in many cities wanted to show they are the best lovers ofloved Mao (the top leader of China), the most: they fought, ran the gauntlet, killing each other.

残念!

But Chongqing was different from other cities.


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But Chongqing, however, was different from other cities.

Because there were many military factories in the city or around, the radical workers in military factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired with artillery on the streets.


Because there were many military factories in the city or around, or around the city, the radical workers in military factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired with artillery on the streets.

Because there were many military factories in the city or around, the city, radical workers in militarythe factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired with artillery oin the streets.

Because there were many military factories in the city or around, it, the radical workers in military factories drove tanks, took guns, and fired witheir artillery on the streets.

わー!

Military forces were independent during the period, they had no bias on any side because both sides were faithful to Mao.


Military forces were independent during the period, t. They had no bias ton any side because both sides were faithful to Mao.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Military forces were independent during theis period, t. They had no bias on anyfor either side because both sides were faithful to Mao.

The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said to me he heard guns shooting; saw artillery firing from both sides of the Yangtze River.


The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said. He told me hethat he would heard guns shooting; saw and would see artillery firing from both sides of the Yangtze River.

The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said to. He told me he heard guns shooting; and saw artillery firing from both sides of the Yangtze River.

The time was a nightmare for many people including my father, he said to me. He told me that he heard guns being shooting; and saw artillery firingbeing fired from both sides of the Yangtze River.

怖いですね。

So many young people died at the time, and later, the local government built a tomb to mourn them.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This kind of tomb in Chongqing is the biggest one in China.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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The tomb is still locked and not open to the public till now.


The tomb is still locked and not open to the public till now.

"til" is short for "until" "til" is commonly used when speaking, but you don’t see it very often in writing because its very casual

The tomb is still locked and not open to the public tilleven now.

The tomb is still locked and not open to the public tilleven now.

My father said they died meaninglessly.


My father said they died meaninglessly.

You could also say "they died for nothing"

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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