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jfartogra

July 15, 2022

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The Bauhaus school

I guess that people who love or, at least, are interested in arts or history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus". I have been living in Germany for the last (almost) nine years and I know from first hand that the term is also well known here, but not only due to the aforementioned reason. First and foremost, there is in Germany a chain of stores called with the same name. It is specialized in bricolage and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.

Maybe there is a connection. Let's see. The Bauhaus was an art school that originated the artistic movement with the same name. This school, founded by the German architect and designer Walter Gropius, was born in Weimar, Germany, at the beginning of the twentieth century (1919). Weimar did not remain as the headquarters for a long time. In 1925 the school was closed down. Some time afterwards it was reopened in Dessau after several cities had shown interest in being the future location. It wouldn't be the final destination. The school would be moved to Berlin in 1932 before being definitely closed only a year later by the Nazi regime under the accusation of "degenerate art"

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The Bauhaus sSchool

I guess that people who love, or, are at least, are interested in arts or history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus".

I have been living in Germany for the last eight (almost) nine) years and I know, from first -hand experience, that the term is also well known herein Germany, but not only just due to the aforementioned reason.

Grammar, cohesiveness (I’m being picky)

First and foremost, there isexists, in Germany, a chain of stores called with the samesharing a similar name.

It isThey specializedse in bricolage and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.

Maybe there is a connection.

Let' us see.

Formal needed

The Bauhaus wais an art school that originated the artistic movement with the same namefrom the Bauhaus art movement.

This school, founded by the German architect and designer Walter Gropius, was borncreated in Weimar, Germany, at the beginning of the twentieth century (1919).

Buildings are created. People are born.

However, Weimar did not remain as theits headquarters for a long time.

In 1925 the school was closed down.

Some time afterwards, it was reopened in Dessau after several cities had shown interest in being theits future location.

ItHowever, this, too, wouldn' not be the final destinits only location.

The school would be moved to Berlin in 1932 before being definitely closed only a year later by the Nazi regime under the accusation of "degenerate art"

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Very good, I think you should practice perfecting formal writing (no conjunctions) in order to take your English to the next level.

The Bauhaus school

I guess that people who love or, at least, are interested in the arts or history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus".

I ha've been living in Germany for the last (almost) nine years and I know from first hand that the term is also well known here, but not only due to the aforementioned reason.

Your sentence is correct but in the US we more often write and say it this way.

First and foremost, there is in Germany's a chain of stores called with the same name in Germany.

It is specializeds in bricolage and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.

Maybe there is a connection.

Let's see.

The Bauhaus was an art school that originwhich created the artistic movement with the same name.

This school, founded by the German architect and designer Walter Gropius, was born in Weimar, Germany, at the beginning of the twentieth century (1919).

Weimar did not remain ast the headquarters for a long time.

In 1925 the school was closed down.

Some time afterwards it was reopened in Dessau after several cities had shown interest in being the future location.

It wouldn't be the final destination.

The school would be moved to Berlin in 1932 before being definitefinally closeding only a year later bywhen the Nazi regime under the accusation ofaccused it of creating "degenerate art."

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Good job!

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jfartogra

July 15, 2022

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Thanks a lot for your corrections Mari

The Bauhaus sSchool

For titles, we usually capitalize most words with some exceptions (e.g. of, the, and or if they are not the first words in the title).

I guess thaMost people who love or, at least, are interested in arts orand history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus"."

What you originally had this sentence was mostly accurate. The way I changed it is cleaner and more natural sounding.

I have been living in Germany for the last (almost) nine years, and I know from first hand that the term is also well known here, but not only due to the aforementioned reason.

Great job on this long and more complex sentence! I just added and removed a comma and made it a little more natural.

First and foremost, there is in Germany, there is a chain of stores called with the same name.

It is specializeds in bricolage, and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.

Maybe there is a connection.

Let's see.

The Bauhaus was an art school that originated the artistic movement with the same name.

This school, founded by the German architect and designer Walter Gropius, was born in Weimar, Germany, at the beginning of the twentieth century (1919).

Weimar did not remain as theits headquarters for a long time.

In 1925, the school was closed down.

added a comma after 1925

Some time afterwards, it was reopened in Dessau after several cities had shown interest in being the future location.

added a comma after the word afterwards

It wouldn't be the final destination.

The school would later be moved to Berlin in 1932 before being definitively closed only a year later by the Nazi regime under the accusation of being "degenerate art."

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Great job! The changes I made were mostly for small punctuation errors as well as some stylistic changes to make your writing sound a bit more natural. Interesting topic as well!

Watch out for the use of the two words definitely and definitively. These two words can be tricky to get right given their similar spellings and meanings.

Definitely is used more as an emphasis in everyday speech.

Example Sentences:
"Do you want to go shopping with me?" "Definitely! That sounds great!"
"I'll definitely be on time tomorrow. I promise. I was late today because my car broke down."

Definitively is more concrete, more "formal sounding" and conveys some final conclusion or event that brings the subject of the sentence, in this case the Bauhaus art school, to its end. Synonyms for this word can help it make more sense such as permanently or for good (informal).

Short Example Sentences:
The school was closed definitively.
The school was closed permanently.
The school was closed for good.

Hope that helps!

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jfartogra

July 15, 2022

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Thanks a lot. Your explanations are great and crystal clear to me! :-)

The Bauhaus school


The Bauhaus sSchool

For titles, we usually capitalize most words with some exceptions (e.g. of, the, and or if they are not the first words in the title).

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The Bauhaus sSchool

I guess that people who love or, at least, are interested in arts or history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus".


I guess thaMost people who love or, at least, are interested in arts orand history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus"."

What you originally had this sentence was mostly accurate. The way I changed it is cleaner and more natural sounding.

I guess that people who love or, at least, are interested in the arts or history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus".

I guess that people who love, or, are at least, are interested in arts or history have already heard of the term "Bauhaus".

I have been living in Germany for the last (almost) nine years and I know from first hand that the term is also well known here, but not only due to the aforementioned reason.


I have been living in Germany for the last (almost) nine years, and I know from first hand that the term is also well known here, but not only due to the aforementioned reason.

Great job on this long and more complex sentence! I just added and removed a comma and made it a little more natural.

I ha've been living in Germany for the last (almost) nine years and I know from first hand that the term is also well known here, but not only due to the aforementioned reason.

Your sentence is correct but in the US we more often write and say it this way.

I have been living in Germany for the last eight (almost) nine) years and I know, from first -hand experience, that the term is also well known herein Germany, but not only just due to the aforementioned reason.

Grammar, cohesiveness (I’m being picky)

First and foremost, there is in Germany a chain of stores called with the same name.


First and foremost, there is in Germany, there is a chain of stores called with the same name.

First and foremost, there is in Germany's a chain of stores called with the same name in Germany.

First and foremost, there isexists, in Germany, a chain of stores called with the samesharing a similar name.

It is specialized in bricolage and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.


It is specializeds in bricolage, and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.

It is specializeds in bricolage and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.

It isThey specializedse in bricolage and several handymen I know are very fond of its products.

Maybe there is a connection.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Let's see.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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Let' us see.

Formal needed

The Bauhaus was an art school that originated the artistic movement with the same name.


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The Bauhaus was an art school that originwhich created the artistic movement with the same name.

The Bauhaus wais an art school that originated the artistic movement with the same namefrom the Bauhaus art movement.

This school, founded by the German architect and designer Walter Gropius, was born in Weimar, Germany, at the beginning of the twentieth century (1919).


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This school, founded by the German architect and designer Walter Gropius, was borncreated in Weimar, Germany, at the beginning of the twentieth century (1919).

Buildings are created. People are born.

Weimar did not remain as the headquarters for a long time.


Weimar did not remain as theits headquarters for a long time.

Weimar did not remain ast the headquarters for a long time.

However, Weimar did not remain as theits headquarters for a long time.

In 1925 the school was closed down.


In 1925, the school was closed down.

added a comma after 1925

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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Some time afterwards it was reopened in Dessau after several cities had shown interest in being the future location.


Some time afterwards, it was reopened in Dessau after several cities had shown interest in being the future location.

added a comma after the word afterwards

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Some time afterwards, it was reopened in Dessau after several cities had shown interest in being theits future location.

It wouldn't be the final destination.


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ItHowever, this, too, wouldn' not be the final destinits only location.

The school would be moved to Berlin in 1932 before being definitely closed only a year later by the Nazi regime under the accusation of "degenerate art"


The school would later be moved to Berlin in 1932 before being definitively closed only a year later by the Nazi regime under the accusation of being "degenerate art."

The school would be moved to Berlin in 1932 before being definitefinally closeding only a year later bywhen the Nazi regime under the accusation ofaccused it of creating "degenerate art."

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