Aug. 1, 2024
The 2024 Summer Olympics
The 2024 Summer Olympics started in Paris last Friday, and its opening ceremony, which took place along the Seine River, surprised me a lot. Firstly, the venue was outside, so people needed to take shelter when it started raining. As the opening ceremonies used to be held in a stadium or large hall so far, so it was unprecedented. Secondly, one of the performances featured Marie Antoinette, who had been killed on the guillotine during the French Revolution. In the show, her decapitated head was singing by the window of the ex-prison. How graphic it was! However, overall, it was amazing other than these two points. I liked the idea of athletes appearing on board the ship. It’s very eye-pleasing. Also, at the end of the ceremony, a ballon went up in the air after having been lit with the Olympic flame. It was very bright in the dark at night. The illuminated Tower Eiffel was also splendid. The city of Paris is one of the most attractive tourist spots, so many people might have visited Paris to see not only the Olympics but also for sightseeing. I also appreciated the beautiful sceneries in the city on TV.
2024年夏季オリンピックが先週金曜日にパリで開幕し、セーヌ川沿いで行われた開会式にはとても驚きました。まず、会場が屋外だったため、雨が降り始めると人々は雨宿りをしなければなりませんでした。これまで開会式はスタジアムや大ホールで行われていたので、前例のないことでした。次に、パフォーマンスの1つに、フランス革命中にギロチンで殺されたマリー・アントワネットが登場しました。ショーでは、彼女の切断された首が、元監獄の窓のそばで歌っていました。なんとも生々しい！しかし、この2点を除けば全体的に素晴らしかったです。選手たちが船に乗って登場するというアイデアは気に入りました。とても目を楽しませてくれます。また、式典の最後には、オリンピックの聖火で点火された風船が空中に上がりました。夜の暗闇の中でとても明るく輝いていました。ライトアップされたエッフェル塔も素晴らしかったです。パリは最も魅力的な観光地の一つなので、オリンピックだけでなく観光も兼ねてパリを訪れた人も多いのではないでしょうか。私もテレビで美しい街の景色を堪能しました。
The 2024 Summer Olympics
The 2024 Summer Olympics started in Paris last Friday, and its opening ceremony, which took place along the Seine River, surprised me a lot.
Firstly, the venue was outside, so people needed to take shelter when it started raining.
AThis was unprecedented as the opening ceremonies used toso far have been held in a stadium or large hall so far, so it was unprecedented.
Secondly, one of the performances featured Marie Antoinette, who had been killed onby the guillotine during the French Revolution.
In the show, her decapitated head was singing by the window of the ex-prison.
How graphic it was!
However, overall, it was amazing other than these two points.
I liked the idea of athletes appearing on board the ship.
It’s very eye-pleasing.
Also, at the end of the ceremony, a balloon went up in the air after having been lit with the Olympic flame.
It was very bright in the dark atof the night.
The illuminated Tower Eiffel Tower was also splendid.
The city of Paris is one of the most attractive tourist spots, so many people might have visited Paris to see not only the Olympics, but also for sightseeing.
I also appreciated the beautiful sceneries iny of the city on TV.
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Aug. 1, 2024
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The 2024 Summer Olympics
The 2024 Summer Olympics startedbegan in Paris last Friday, and its opening ceremony, which took place along the Seine River, surprised me a lot.
'Began' and 'started' are interchangeable, but 'began' is more formal which fits with the tone of the piece.
Firstly, the venue was outside, so people needed to take shelter when it startedbegan raining.
As the opening ceremonies used tohad usually been held in a stadium or large hall so far, so, it was unprecedented.
Secondly, one of the performances featured Marie Antoinette, who had been killed onby the guillotine during the French Revolution.
In the show, her decapitated head was swinging by the window of the ex-prison.
How graphic it was!
I liked the idea of athletes appearing on boarding the ship.
It’s very eye-pleasing.
Also, at the end of the ceremony, a balloon went up in the air after having beenit was lit with the Olympic flame.
It was very bright in the dark at night.
The illuminated Tower Eiffel Tower was also splendid.
The city of Paris is one of the most attractive tourist spots, so many people might have visited Paris to see not only to see the Olympics but also for sightseeing.
I also appreciated the beautiful sceneries inof the city on the TV.
Aug. 1, 2024
添削いただきありがとうございました。
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The city of Paris is one of the most attractive tourist spots, so many people might have visited Paris to see not only the Olympics but also for sightseeing. The city of Paris is one of the most attractive tourist spots, so many people might have visited Paris The city of Paris is one of the most attractive tourist spots, so many people might have visited Paris to see not only the Olympics, but also for sightseeing. |
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Secondly, one of the performances featured Marie Antoinette, who had been killed on the guillotine during the French revolution. |
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The 2024 Summer Olympics started in Paris last Friday, and its opening ceremony, which took place along the Seine River, surprised me a lot. The 2024 Summer Olympics 'Began' and 'started' are interchangeable, but 'began' is more formal which fits with the tone of the piece. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Secondly, one of the performances featured Marie Antoinette, who had been killed on the guillotine during the French Revolution. Secondly, one of the performances featured Marie Antoinette, who had been killed Secondly, one of the performances featured Marie Antoinette, who had been killed |
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