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alexwong2164

Oct. 2, 2021

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That’s what I get for more training

So, I start this daily physical training like 2 months ago.

At the time all I thinking I will become a god with a perfect body shape.

But the truth…

I did able to loss few pounds but I still look (really) fat.

And my body didn’t look attractive at all.

One very bitter experience I didn’t tell anyone.

During my training time I always find more then one person who is older than me.

Older means full of white hairs, shorter than me…

But way much stronger than me in everything!

I got beaten by an older person!

I hate that so much.

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That’s what I get for more training

I'm not sure exactly what you want to express here - we say "that's what someone gets for X" when we want to express that a bad thing happening to the person was deserved. Someone crashes his car, you say "well, that's what he gets for driving like a lunatic".

So, I started this daily physical training like 2 months ago.

At the time all II was thinking I willould become a god with a perfect body shape.

You'd use "will" if you were directly quoting your thoughts or speech. I thought "I will become a god". Otherwise, the tense changes. I'm not sure what "all" is meant to mean here.

But the truth…

I didwas able to losse a few pounds but I still look (really) fat.

And my body didoesn’t look attractive at all.

One very bitter experience I didn’t tell anyone.

During my training time I always findsee more thean one person who is older than me.

We might say "I can always find more than one person", but probably not just "find" here. Difficult to explain why. Alternatives to "more than one person": "at least one person", "multiple people".

Older means a head full of white hairs, shorter than me…

Sounds a bit odd to just say full of white hairs without specifying a part. As if they're stuffed with hair, like a toy animal.

But way much stronger than me in everything!

Or "much stronger", but not "way much stronger".

I got beaten by an older person!

I hate that so much.

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Older people have had more time to practice and see results :) you'll get there!

That’s what I get for more training


That’s what I get for more training

I'm not sure exactly what you want to express here - we say "that's what someone gets for X" when we want to express that a bad thing happening to the person was deserved. Someone crashes his car, you say "well, that's what he gets for driving like a lunatic".

So, I start this daily physical training like 2 months ago.


So, I started this daily physical training like 2 months ago.

At the time all I thinking I will become a god with a perfect body shape.


At the time all II was thinking I willould become a god with a perfect body shape.

You'd use "will" if you were directly quoting your thoughts or speech. I thought "I will become a god". Otherwise, the tense changes. I'm not sure what "all" is meant to mean here.

But the truth…


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I did able to loss few pounds but I still look (really) fat.


I didwas able to losse a few pounds but I still look (really) fat.

And my body didn’t look attractive at all.


And my body didoesn’t look attractive at all.

One very bitter experience I didn’t tell anyone.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

During my training time I always find more then one person who is older than me.


During my training time I always findsee more thean one person who is older than me.

We might say "I can always find more than one person", but probably not just "find" here. Difficult to explain why. Alternatives to "more than one person": "at least one person", "multiple people".

Older means full of white hairs, shorter than me…


Older means a head full of white hairs, shorter than me…

Sounds a bit odd to just say full of white hairs without specifying a part. As if they're stuffed with hair, like a toy animal.

But way much stronger than me in everything!


But way much stronger than me in everything!

Or "much stronger", but not "way much stronger".

I got beaten by an older person!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I hate that so much.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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