Nov. 28, 2020
Thanksgiving event in Animal Crossing
I haven't played Animal Crossing for a while because I had played it almost every day for six months, so there was nothing to do in my island lately. Last week, the thanksgiving event was available as an update, so I joined the the event today. I needed to give some ingredients to a new character Franklin. He cooked four meals for my villagers and me. It was a bit hard to get some ingredients. I swam in the sea to caught some seacreatures. I gave up finding a crab. I had a lot of fun. I lost of track of the time. Finally, I get some new furniture from Franklin. It was so cute.
半年間ほぼ毎日あつ森をしていたので、島でやることがなくなってしまい、最近は全然プレイしていませんでした。でも、先週サンクスギビングデーのイベントアップデートがあったので、今日はそのイベントに参加しました。ニューキャラクターのフランクリンにいくつかの食材を渡す必要がありました。彼はどうぶつたちと私のために4つの料理を作ってくれました。 食材を手に入れるのは少し大変でした。 私は海で泳いでいくつかの海の生き物を捕まえましたが、カニを見つけるのはあきらめました。 時間を忘れて楽しめました。 そしてついに、フランクリンから新しい家具を入手しました。とてもかわいいです。
Thanksgiving event in Animal Crossing
I haven't played Animal Crossing for a while because I had played it almost every day for six months, so there was nothing to do in my island lately.
Last week, the thanksgiving event was available as an update, so I joined the the event today.
I needed to give some ingredients to a new character called Franklin.
I swam in the sea to caughttch some sea creatures.
I gave up trying to finding a crab.
I had a lot of fun.
I lost of track of the time.
Finally, I geot some new furniture from Franklin.
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I liked the Thanksgiving Animal Crossing event a lot too :)
Nov. 28, 2020
Thank you for the corrections! Yeah, some villagers were cooking in their houses. It's so adorable. :D
Thanksgiving eEvent ion Animal Crossing
In English, the nouns, verbs, pronouns, adjectives, adverbs, etc., are all capitalized in titles.
I haven't played Animal Crossing for a while because I had played it almost every day for six months, so there was nothing to do ion my island lately.
“I had” is often written as “I’d”.
I’m not sure if “in” is correct here because “in” sounds more natural to me.
Last week, the tThanksgiving event was available as an update, soand I joined the the event today.
A good rule of thumb for commas is to place them where you take a breath. There are some other grammar rules and such, but you can place them where you want to take a breath for emphasis.
I needed to give some ingredients to a new character, Franklin.
He cooked four meals for my villagers and me.
It was a bit hard to get some of the ingredients.
I swam in the sea to caughttch some sea creatures.
I gave up trying to finding a crab.
If you wanted to say that you caught the crab, then you would say, “I ended up finding a crab”.
I had a lot of fun.
I lost of track of the time.
Finally, I geot some new furniture from Franklin.
It was so cute.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections!
Nov. 28, 2020
Thank you for the corrections. I leaned a lot. :D
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Thanksgiving event in Animal Crossing This sentence has been marked as perfect! Thanksgiving In English, the nouns, verbs, pronouns, adjectives, adverbs, etc., are all capitalized in titles. |
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I haven't played Animal Crossing for a while because I had played it almost every day for six months, so there was nothing to do in my island lately. I haven't played Animal Crossing for a while because I had played it almost every day for six months, so there was nothing to do “I had” is often written as “I’d”. I’m not sure if “in” is correct here because “in” sounds more natural to me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Last week, the thanksgiving event was available as an update, so I joined the the event today. Last week A good rule of thumb for commas is to place them where you take a breath. There are some other grammar rules and such, but you can place them where you want to take a breath for emphasis. Last week, the thanksgiving event was available as an update, so I joined the |
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I needed to give some ingredients to Franklin. |
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He cooked four meals for my villagers and me. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I gave up finding a crab. I gave up trying to finding a crab. If you wanted to say that you caught the crab, then you would say, “I ended up finding a crab”. I gave up trying to find |
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It was a bit hard to get some ingredients. It was a bit hard to get some of the ingredients. |
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I had a lot of fun. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was so cute. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I needed to give some ingredients to a new character Franklin. I needed to give some ingredients to a new character, Franklin. I needed to give some ingredients to a new character called Franklin. |
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