Aug. 9, 2023
TFBOYS Farewell Concert
Few concerts boast a dedicated host, however for the seemingly disparate trio that constitutes the TFBOYS band, such a role proved adequate in alleviating potential awkwardness. When the host, Lan Yi, called on fans to give other audiences around them a hug as a tribute to the band's decade-long journey, Zhou Ziyu experienced a novel sensation—an eruption of collective laughter. "Choosing not to fight with other fans is the best we can do to thank each other".
Zhou Ziyu, a graduate student from Beijing, embarked on a journey to Xi'an for the concert, a symbolic culmination of her youthful days. However, her initial excitement gave way to a stark realization— the band's on-stage dynamic was a far cry from the vibrant image she held at 14-year-old. The trio occupied the stage, their interactions seemingly scripted, and every utterance meticulously premeditated. Despite their hardest attempts to evoke a decade's worth of shared emotions with their devoted fans, the occasional glances towards the teleprompter sent a poignant pang through the hearts of many loyal followers of the band.
Perhaps the sole unexpected and unscripted moment was the collapse of the intricately designed cake meant to commemorate their momentous 10th anniversary. The meticulously orchestrated veneer of detachment among them dissipated in an instant, as the trio of youthful figures found themselves at the center of the stage, erupting into genuine laughter. Wang Yuan adeptly salvaged the situation with a quip, "Youth is inherently a tad imperfect, much like our next song, 'Imperfect Child'." Wang Junkai seamlessly chimed in, "We deliberately did this. The actual cake is safely stored for our private indulgence later." It wasn't until this precise juncture that Zhou Ziyu truly grasped that her idols are still "flesh and blood" individuals.
很少有演唱会，专门设置一个主持人来串场，但这三年“彼此看上去不太熟”的TFBOYS，似乎的确需要这么一个填满尴尬空气的角色。但当主持人蓝羽号召粉丝给身边观众一个拥抱，感谢共同渡过的十年时，周子瑜第一次听到周围爆发出一致爽朗的笑声，“不打起来就算感谢对方了”。
周子瑜还在北京读研，来西安听演唱会纯粹只是给青春画上句号。但她发现这场演唱会与她14岁时期待的并不相同——三个人站在舞台上几乎零互动，所有的台词都是事先准备好的。虽然试图动情讲述这十年与粉丝共度的时光，但他们不时瞟向提词器的眼神，还是戳了不少团粉的心。
充满仪式感的10周年庆祝蛋糕竟然“塌了”，是唯一出人意料、未经设计的时刻。而经过包装的平静外壳随之出现裂缝，三个年轻人站在舞台中央同时大笑起来。王源及时救场，“青春总有些不完美，就像接下来演唱的《不完美小孩》”。一旁的王俊凯也配合互动：“故意的。真的（蛋糕）我们仨回去吃。”直到这个时候，周子瑜才觉得自己的偶像是“有血有肉的真人”。
Few concerts boast a dedicated host, however for the seemingly disparate trio that constitutes the TFBOYS band, such a role proved adequathelpful/valuable/invaluable in alleviating potential awkwardness.
Adequate makes it sound insignificant. Perhaps a word like valuable would've been more appropriate in this context, to express the value of having a dedicated host.
"Choosing not to fight with other fans is the best thing we can do to thank each other".
However, her initial excitement gave way to a stark realization— the band's on-stage dynamic was a far cry from the vibrant image she held at 14/the age of 14/14-years-old.
Year becomes years because it must be in the plural form. Other ways of expressing age in this context include: the age of 14 and 14.
Despite their hardest attempefforts to evoke a decade's worth of shared emotions with their devoted fans, the occasional glances towards the teleprompter sent a poignant pang through the hearts of many loyal followers of the band.
Efforts is likely a more appropriate word in this context.
TFBOYS Farewell Concert
Few concerts boast a dedicated host, however for the seemingly disparate trio that constitutes the TFBOYS band, such a role proved adequatehelpful in alleviating potential awkwardness.
I think "helpful" sound better. "adequate" is more of a judgement on ability.
When the host, Lan Yi, called on fans to give other audience members around them a hug as a tribute to the band's decade-long journey, Zhou Ziyu experienced a novel sensation—an eruption of collective laughter.
"audience members" not "audiences"
"Choosing not to fight with other fans is the best thing we can do to thank each other"."
You need something for "best" to describe "thing" refers back to the "choosing not ...other fans".
Zhou Ziyu, a graduate student from Beijing, embarked on a journey to Xi'an for the concert, a symbolic culmination of her youthful days.
However, her initial excitement gave way to a stark realization—: the band's on-stage dynamic was a far cry from the vibrant image she held at 14- year-s old.
Sentence: explanation or elaboration.
The trio occupied the stage, their interactions seemingly scripted, and every utterance meticulously premeditated.
Despite their hardbest attempts to evoke a decade's worth of shared emotions with their devoted fans, the occasional glances towards the teleprompter sent a poignant pang through the hearts of many loyal followers of the band.
"best" is more suitable than "hardest".
Perhaps the sole unexpected and unscripted moment was the collapse of the intricately designed cake meant to commemorate their momentous 10th anniversary.
The meticulously orchestrated veneer of detachment among them dissipated in an instant, as the trio of youthful figures found themselves at the center of the stage, erupting into genuine laughter.
Wang Yuan adeptly salvaged the situation with a quip, "Youth is inherently a tad imperfect, much like our next song, 'Imperfect Child'."
Wang Junkai seamlessly chimed in, "We deliberately did this.
The actual cake is safely stored for our private indulgence later."
It wasn't until this precise juncture that Zhou Ziyu truly grasped that her idols are still "flesh and blood" individuals.
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Few concerts boast a dedicated host, however for the seemingly disparate trio that constitutes the TFBOYS band, such a role proved adequate in alleviating potential awkwardness. Few concerts boast a dedicated host, however for the seemingly disparate trio that constitutes the TFBOYS band, such a role proved I think "helpful" sound better. "adequate" is more of a judgement on ability. Few concerts boast a dedicated host, however for the seemingly disparate trio that constitutes the TFBOYS band, such a role proved Adequate makes it sound insignificant. Perhaps a word like valuable would've been more appropriate in this context, to express the value of having a dedicated host. |
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When the host, Lan Yi, called on fans to give other audiences around them a hug as a tribute to the band's decade-long journey, Zhou Ziyu experienced a novel sensation—an eruption of collective laughter. When the host, Lan Yi, called on fans to give other audience members around them a hug as a tribute to the band's decade-long journey, Zhou Ziyu experienced a novel sensation—an eruption of collective laughter. "audience members" not "audiences" |
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"Choosing not to fight with other fans is the best we can do to thank each other". "Choosing not to fight with other fans is the best thing we can do to thank each other You need something for "best" to describe "thing" refers back to the "choosing not ...other fans". "Choosing not to fight with other fans is the best thing we can do to thank each other". |
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Zhou Ziyu, a graduate student from Beijing, embarked on a journey to Xi'an for the concert, a symbolic culmination of her youthful days. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, her initial excitement gave way to a stark realization— the band's on-stage dynamic was a far cry from the vibrant image she held at 14-year-old. However Sentence: explanation or elaboration. However, her initial excitement gave way to a stark realization— the band's on-stage dynamic was a far cry from the vibrant image she held at 14/the age of 14/14-years-old Year becomes years because it must be in the plural form. Other ways of expressing age in this context include: the age of 14 and 14. |
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The trio occupied the stage, their interactions seemingly scripted, and every utterance meticulously premeditated. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Despite their hardest attempts to evoke a decade's worth of shared emotions with their devoted fans, the occasional glances towards the teleprompter sent a poignant pang through the hearts of many loyal followers of the band. Despite their "best" is more suitable than "hardest". Despite their hardest Efforts is likely a more appropriate word in this context. |
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Perhaps the sole unexpected and unscripted moment was the collapse of the intricately designed cake meant to commemorate their momentous 10th anniversary. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The meticulously orchestrated veneer of detachment among them dissipated in an instant, as the trio of youthful figures found themselves at the center of the stage, erupting into genuine laughter. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Wang Yuan adeptly salvaged the situation with a quip, "Youth is inherently a tad imperfect, much like our next song, 'Imperfect Child'." This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Wang Junkai seamlessly chimed in, "We deliberately did this. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The actual cake is safely stored for our private indulgence later." This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It wasn't until this precise juncture that Zhou Ziyu truly grasped that her idols are still "flesh and blood" individuals. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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