Sept. 12, 2024
Tendon & Achilles Tendon Rupture
Recently, at least two members on LangCorrect wrote about the Japanese anime "Haikyu!!" regarding volleyball. One of them mentioned that they started playing volleyball again after a long break, which reminded me of Achilles tendon ruptures.
In fact, two (completely different people from the previous "two") of my colleagues experienced Achilles tendon ruptures and had to undergo surgery while playing volleyball after a long hiatus. They were in their 30s and 40s when it happened.
I think it’s very dangerous to play intense sports after a long break, due to the lack of exercise and the effects of aging. Achilles tendons are not soft or elastic enough to absorb the stress from impact shocks.
In conclusion, I'd prefer tendon (天丼 or Japanese shrimp tempura bowl) over an Achilles tendon rupture!
The former is very delicious, and I'd like to recommend you to eat it.
Whereas, I won't recommend you to experience the latter. It's very painful and bothersome.
Hahaha.
天丼とアキレス腱断裂
最近、LangCorrectのメンバーの少なくとも２人がバレーボールに関する日本のアニメ「ハイキュー!!」について書いていました。そのうちの1人が長いブランクを経て再びバレーボールを始めたと書いていたので、とっさにアキレス腱断裂が頭をよぎりました。
実際、私の同僚の２人が、「昔取った杵柄」ってことで長い間のブランクの後にバレーボールをして、「年寄の冷や水」でアキレス腱を断裂し、手術を受けるハメになりました。彼らがそれを経験したのは30歳代と40歳代の時です。
運動不足や加齢の影響で、長期間のブランクを経て激しいスポーツをするのは非常に危険だと思います。
アキレス腱は、もはや衝撃のストレスを吸収するのに十分な柔軟性や弾力性がありません。
結論としては、僕はアキレス腱断裂よりも天丼のほうが好きです！
天丼はとても美味しいから、ぜひとも一度食べていただきたいと思います。
一方でアキレス腱断裂は、できれば経験してほしくありません。とても痛くて厄介ですから。
（笑）
Tendon & Achilles Tendon Rupture
Recently, at least two members on LangCorrect wrote about the Japanese anime "Haikyu!!"
regarding volleyball.
One of them mentioned that they started playing volleyball again after a long break, which reminded me of Achilles tendon ruptures.
In fact, two (completely different people from the previous "two") of my colleagues experienced Achilles tendon ruptures and had to undergo surgery while playing volleyball after a long hiatus.
They were in their 30s and 40s when it happened.
I think it’s very dangerous to play intense sports after a long break, due to the lack of exercise and the effects of aging.
Achilles tendons are not soft or elastic enough to absorb the stress from impact shockimpact from such strenuous movements.
In conclusion, I'd prefer tendon (天丼 or Japanese shrimp tempura bowl) over an Achilles tendon rupture!
ダシャレ？（笑笑）
The former is very delicious, and I'd like to recommend you to eattry it.
Besides sounding unnatural, "eat it" seems rather forceful
Whereas, I won't recommend you to experience the latter.
It's very painful and bothersome.
Hahaha.
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Good entry as always! I can see some massive improvements in your writing
Tendon & Achilles Tendon Rupture
Recently, at least two members on LangCorrect wrote about the Japanese sports anime, "Haikyu!!"," which is about volleyball.
regarding volleyball.
I combined this phrase with the previous sentence.
One of them mentioned that they started playing volleyball again after a long break, which reminded me of Achilles tendon ruptures.
In fact, two (completely different people from the previous "two") of myof my other colleagues experienced Achilles tendon ruptures and had to undergo surgery while playing volleyball after a long hiatus.
They were in their 30s and 40thirties and forties when it happened.
This is just another way to state your sentence. Your sentence is fine.
I think it’s very dangerous to play intense sports after a long break, due to the lack of exercise and the effects of aging.
Achilles tendons are not soft or elastic enough to absorb the stress from impact shocks.
In conclusion, I'd prefer tendon (天丼 or Japanese shrimp tempura bowl) over an Achilles tendon rupture!
The former is very delicious, and I'd like to recommend you to eat it.
Whereas, I wdon't recommend you to experience the latter at all.
It's very painful and bothersome.
Hahaha.
I don't think this is a laughing matter.
Sept. 12, 2024
You write English well.
Tendon & Achilles Tendon Rupture
Recently, at least two members on LangCorrect wrote about the Japanese anime "Haikyu!!"
regarding volleyball.
One of them mentioned that they started playing volleyball again after a long break, which reminded me of Achilles tendon ruptures.
In fact, two (completely different people from those previous "two"ly mentioned) of my colleagues experienced Achilles tendon ruptures and had to undergo surgery while playing volleyball after a long hiatus.
They were in their 30s and 40s when it happened.
I think it’s very dangerous to play intense sports after a long break, due to the lack of exercise and the effects of aging.
Achilles tendons are not soft or elastic enough to absorb the stress from impact shocks.
In conclusion, I'd prefer tendon (天丼 or Japanese shrimp tempura bowl) over an Achilles tendon rupture!
The former is very delicious, and I'd like to recommend for you to eat it.
Whereas, I won't recommend you to experience the latter.
It's very painful and bothersome.
Hahaha.
Tendon & Achilles Tendon Rupture
Recently, at least two members on LangCorrect wrote about the Japanese anime "Haikyu!!"
regarding volleyball.
One of them mentioned that they started playing volleyball again after a long break, which reminded me of Achilles tendon ruptures.
In fact, two (completely different people from the previous "two") of my colleagues experienced Achilles tendon ruptures and had to undergo surgery while playing volleyball after a long hiatus.
They were in their 30s and 40s when it happened.
I think it’s very dangerous to play intense sports after a long break, due to the lack of exercise and the effects of aging.
Achilles tendons are not soft or elastic enough to absorb the stress from impact shocks.
In conclusion, I'd prefer tendon (天丼 or Japanese shrimp tempura bowl) over an Achilles tendon rupture!
ナイスジョークです！
The former is very delicious, and I'd like to recommend you to eat it.
Whereas, I won't recommend you to experience the latter.
This grammar is correct, but it would sound more smooth and natural to say:
"As for the latter, I wouldn't recommend it."
It's very painful and bothersome.
Hahaha.
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Your English in this entry is very good!!
Sept. 12, 2024
添削とコメント、ありがとうございました！
Tendon & Achilles Tendon Rupture
Recently, at least two members on LangCorrect wrote about the Japanese anime "Haikyu!!",
I would recommend that you add a comma to connect the last part of the sentence, and to help with the 'flow' of it.
regardingwhich is about volleyball.
"Regarding" is typically used in more formal situations, such as in a work email, and just doesn't quite sound right here. "About" simply feels more natural. "Which is" helps to connect it to the rest of the previous statement.
One of them mentioned that they started playing volleyball again after a long break, which reminded me of Achilles tendon ruptures.
In fact, two (completely different people from the previous "two") of my colleagues experienced Achilles tendon ruptures and had to undergo surgery whiledue to playing volleyball after a long hiatus.
Using "while" implies that the surgery occurred while they played volleyball.
They were in their 30s and 40s when it happened.
I think it’s very dangerous to play intense sports after a long break, due to the lack of exercise and the effects of aging.
Achilles tendons are not soft or elastic enough to absorb the stress from impact shocks.
In conclusion, I'd prefer tendon (天丼 or Japanese shrimp tempura bowl) over an Achilles tendon rupture!
The former is very delicious, and I'd like to recommend that you to eat it.
We usually recommend that someone does X, as opposed to recommend to X.
Whereas, I won't recommend that you to experience the latter.
Same as above. You could also change "won't" to "don't" if you want to more strongly reinforce the unpleasantness of the experience.
It's very painful and bothersome.
Hahaha.
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Overall, good job, just a few little things! You have a good vocabulary.
Sept. 12, 2024
Thank you!
Undergoing surgery in the midst of playing valleyball seems so funny, weird, and dangerous! Hahaha
Tendon & Achilles Tendon Ruptures
Since you are not talking about a single/specific rupture, the plural form should be used
Recently, at least two members on LangCorrect wrote about the Japanese anime "Haikyu!!"
regardingwhich is about volleyball.
We don't use the word "regarding" when talking about the topic of a show.
One of them mentioned that they started playing volleyball again after a long break, which reminded me of Achilles tendon ruptures.
In fact, two of my colleagues (completely different people from the previous "two") of my colleagues experienced Achilles tendon ruptures and had to undergo surgery whileas a consequence of playing volleyball after a long hiatus.
They were in their 30s and 40s when it happened.
I think it’s very dangerous to play intense sports after a long break, due to the lack of exercise and the effects of aging.
Achilles tendons are not soft or elastic enough to absorb the stress from impact shocks.
In conclusion, I'd prefer a ten-don (天丼 or Japanese shrimp tempura bowl) over an Achilles tendon rupture!
This is funny. Very well done.. this is a sophisticated pun.
The former is very delicious, and I'd like to recommend you to eatry it.
We typically use "try" as the verb when talking about eating/drinking new things.
For example, go to YouTube and search "trying new foods" and you will find many, many videos with that title.
Whereas, I wdon't recommend that you to experience the latter.
It's very painful and bothersome.
"bothersome" is sort of like "annoying" and maybe isn't the best word choice for something as serious as a ruptured tendon.
I was thinking "debilitating" as a better word choice.
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This was written to such a high standard. Your English is very impressive.
Sept. 12, 2024
添削と御説明とコメント、どうもありがとうございました。
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regarding volleyball.
We don't use the word "regarding" when talking about the topic of a show.
"Regarding" is typically used in more formal situations, such as in a work email, and just doesn't quite sound right here. "About" simply feels more natural. "Which is" helps to connect it to the rest of the previous statement. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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