March 17, 2023
Tell a story that begins with: "When he read the message..."
When he read the message from his friend, Matthew felt both excited and very nervous. It was nearly eight o'clock a.m and he had just got up. He couldn't believe that he and his friend José had been chosen to take part in the Olympic Games! They have been practising athletics since they were at school, and now they were about to compete professionally. Matthew told it to his family and all of his friends. They helped him a lot as he was struggling with his anxiety the previous days to the tournament. Gradually, he was able to deal with it so he thought he was ready to compete.
On the day of the competition the weather was well and sunny, so they thought it was a good omen. The first to take part in the track and field event was Matthew. José wished him good luck but Matthew wasn't able to listen to him because he was very nervous. Then, the race started. In the beginning, he performed very well but, after some minutes,unfortunately he fell down and hurt his leg gravely. He was fast taken to the infirmary. When he recovered, he saw through the window that it was his friend's turn. Matthew was amazed by José's perfomance. He nearly won the race. In the end, José and Matthew's family came to the infirmary to celebrate Jose's second place with him.
It was nearly eight o'clock a.mA.M. and he had just gotten up.
En inglés, hay que escribir en mayúsculas cuando se dice A.M. y P.M. :)
Se dice "had just got[ten]" up en vez de "had just got up". En los Estados Unidos, a veces se dice "had got" en vez de "had gotten" cuando la gente habla coloquialmente, pero sería mejor escribir "had gotten."
Matthew told it to his family and all of his friends.
They helped him a lot, as he was struggling with his anxiety the days previous days to the tournament.
También podría decir "the days before" :)
Gradually, he was ablelearned to deal with it, so he thought he was ready to compete.
Decir "he learned to" en vez de "he was able to" señala el proceso de aprender.
On the day of the competition, the weather was wellgood and sunny, so they thought it was a good omen.
In the beginning, he performed very well but, after somea few minutes, unfortunately he fell down and hurt his leg gravely.
"Some minutes" es correcto, pero suena más natural decir "a few minutes" :)
He was fastquickly taken to the infirmary.
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¡Su inglés es genial! Pude entender todo lo que quiso decir sin ningún problema. También a mí me gustó su historia :) ¡Buena suerte con sus estudios de inglés!
March 17, 2023
Thank you very much for your corrections and advice!! :DD
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Tell a story that begins with: "When he read the message..." |
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When he read the message from his friend, Matthew felt both excited and very nervous. |
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It was nearly eight o'clock a.m and he had just got up. It was nearly eight o'clock En inglés, hay que escribir en mayúsculas cuando se dice A.M. y P.M. :) Se dice "had just got[ten]" up en vez de "had just got up". En los Estados Unidos, a veces se dice "had got" en vez de "had gotten" cuando la gente habla coloquialmente, pero sería mejor escribir "had gotten." |
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He couldn't believe that he and his friend José had been chosen to take part in the Olympic Games! |
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They have been practising athletics since they were at school, and now they were about to compete professionally. |
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Matthew told it to his family and all of his friends. Matthew told |
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They helped him a lot as he was struggling with his anxiety the previous days to the tournament. They helped him a lot, as he was struggling with his anxiety the days previous También podría decir "the days before" :) |
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Gradually, he was able to deal with it so he thought he was ready to compete. Gradually, he Decir "he learned to" en vez de "he was able to" señala el proceso de aprender. |
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On the day of the competition the weather was well and sunny, so they thought it was a good omen. On the day of the competition, the weather was |
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The first to take part in the track and field event was Matthew. |
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José wished him good luck but Matthew wasn't able to listen to him because he was very nervous. |
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Then, the race started. |
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In the beginning, he performed very well but, after some minutes,unfortunately he fell down and hurt his leg gravely. In the beginning, he performed very well but, after "Some minutes" es correcto, pero suena más natural decir "a few minutes" :) |
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He was fast taken to the infirmary. He was |
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When he recovered, he saw through the window that it was his friend's turn. |
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Matthew was amazed by José's perfomance. |
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He nearly won the race. |
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In the end, José and Matthew's family came to the infirmary to celebrate Jose's second place with him. |
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