June 26, 2021
Teenage drinking in Japan
Though Japan is the first country to establish a law that banned teenage drinking, most Japanese teenagers have an experience to drink before turning to 20. That is because the government's loose regulations and alcohol vending machines.
In Japan, though teenage drinking is prohibited by law, even though a teenager drink, they will not be banned, instead a adult who sells alcohol to them will be fined. The law actually does not have any deterrent to drinking underage. A law that impose punishment to minors is needed to improve the situation.
Also, alcohol vending machine is a problem. Unlike in vandalism-prone the U.S., vending machines go a long way toward increasing the sales of those commodities in Japan. They stands here and there all around the cities in Japan. Those machines do not require any age-verification, and only thing they require is money. How can the situation improve? It is necessary to retrieve all the alcohol vending machines or make them to require age-verification when they sell alcohol.
Teenage drinking in Japan
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Though Japan is the first country to establish a law that banned teenage drinking, most Japanese teenagers have an experience to drink before turning to 20. Though Japan is the first country to establish a law that banned teenage drinking, most Japanese teenagers have In English you "turn" an age not "turn to" |
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That is because the government's loose regulations and alcohol vending machines. Th |
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In Japan, though teenage drinking is prohibited by law, even though a teenager drink, they will not be banned, instead a adult who sells alcohol to them will be fined.
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The law actually does not have any deterrent to drinking underage. The law actually does not have any deterrent to |
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A law that impose punishment to minors is needed to improve the situation. A law that imposes punishment Impose is followed by the preposition "on" not "to" |
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Also, alcohol vending machine is a problem. Also, alcohol vending machine |
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Unlike in vandalism-prone the U.S., vending machines go a long way toward increasing the sales of those commodities in Japan. Unlike in the vandalism-prone |
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They stands here and there all around the cities in Japan. They |
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Those machines do not require any age-verification, and only thing they require is money. Those machines do not require any age-verification |
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How can the situation improve? How can the situation be improved? |
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It is necessary to retrieve all the alcohol vending machines or make them to require age-verification when they sell alcohol. It |
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