May 31, 2022
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I was born in Madrid and I have lived in this city all my life. I’m a Real Madrid football team fan, which means that today I’m a really happy person.
Along the years, I have seen my team win many competitions, such as several Spanish leagues, some Spanish cups, two UEFA cups and of course, the most coveted of all football championships, eight Champions Leagues. Until 1998, everybody laughed at Real Madrid winning 6 European Cups, now known as Champions league, in black and white. That meant that Real Madrid had won its European Cups even before colour TV sets had been invented. Real Madrid won the first five European Cup editions, from 1956 to 1960. Six years later, in 1966, Real Madrid won the European Cup again. During those first years of the competition, Real Madrid reigned in Europe thanks to its superb squad and especially to one of the best ever football players, Di Stéfano. In 1998, Real Madrid achieved what many thought would be an unattainable feat for this team, winning the seventh Champions League. After that, Real Madrid won another two Champion leagues in alternative years, 2000 and 2002. That was a huge achievement: Winning three Champions Leagues in five years, something only within reach of the very best teams. It took Real Madrid twelve years to win its tenth Champions League. By then, Cristiano Ronaldo was already playing for Real Madrid. Real Madrid began to be very dependent on such as extraordinarily gifted player. Between 2016 and 2018, Real Madrid won three Champions Leagues in a row and this year, 2022, in fact three days ago, Real Madrid made it again. What an extraordinary football squad!
I have seen Real Madrid win eight Champions Leagues. I have seen amazing players playing for Real Madrid. However, this was the time that I saw Real Madrid playing most as a team. Apart from the goalkeeper, it would be difficult to say which player was better than the rest.
Teamwork
I was born in Madrid, and I have lived in this city all my life.
These are two complete thoughts, so you should use a comma before the conjunction to combine the sentences. If found this pdf that explains this grammar rule: https://www.ius.edu/writing-center/files/fanboys-and-wabbits.pdf
I’m a Real Madrid football team fan, which means that today I’m a really happy person.
The dependent clause ("which means that today I’m a really happy person") comes after the independent clause, so I wouldn't use a comma in this scenario. I found this page that helps explain this rule: https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma-in-complex-sentences/
AlongOver the years, I have seen my team win many competitions, such as several Spanish leagues, some Spanish cups, two UEFA cCups and of course, the most coveted of all football championships, eight Champions Leagues.
Until 1998, everybody laughed at Real Madrid winning 6 European Cups, now known as the Champions lLeague, in black and white.
That meant that Real Madrid had won its European Cups even before colour TV sets had been invented.
Real Madrid won the first five European Cup editions, from 1956 to 1960.
Six years later, in 1966, Real Madrid won the European Cup again.
During those first years of the competition, Real Madrid reigned in Europe thanks to its superb squad and especially to one of the best ever football players, Di Stéfano.
In 1998, Real Madrid achieved what many thought would be an unattainable feat for this team, winning the seventh Champions League.
After that, Real Madrid won another two Champion leagues in alternative years, 2000 and 2002.
That was a huge achievement: Winning three Champions Leagues in five years, something only within reach of the very best teams.
It took Real Madrid twelve years to win its tenth Champions League.
By then, Cristiano Ronaldo was already playing for Real Madrid.
Real Madrid began to be very dependent on such asn extraordinarily gifted player.
Between 2016 and 2018, Real Madrid won three Champions Leagues in a row and. They also won again this year, 2022, in facjust three days ago, Real Madrid made it again.
This part reads a little confusing "in a row and this year, 2022, in fact, three days ago¨. I'm not sure if it's incorrect per say, but I recommend rephrasing it.
What an extraordinary football squad!
I have seen Real Madrid win eight Champions Leagues.
I have seen amazing players playing for Real Madrid.
However, this was the time thatfirst time I saw Real Madrid playing most as a team.
Apart from the goalkeeper, it would be difficult to say which player was better than the rest.
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Overall this is really well written. I wouldn't be able to tell that this wasn't written by a native English speaker if I read it outside of this website.
May 31, 2022
Many thanks Jhase511 for taking the time to read and correct my post, and for making such an encouraging final comment. I really appreciate it.
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I was born in Madrid and I have lived in this city all my life. I was born in Madrid, and I have lived in this city all my life. These are two complete thoughts, so you should use a comma before the conjunction to combine the sentences. If found this pdf that explains this grammar rule: https://www.ius.edu/writing-center/files/fanboys-and-wabbits.pdf |
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I’m a Real Madrid football team fan, which means that today I’m a really happy person. I’m a Real Madrid football team fan The dependent clause ("which means that today I’m a really happy person") comes after the independent clause, so I wouldn't use a comma in this scenario. I found this page that helps explain this rule: https://www.grammarly.com/blog/comma-in-complex-sentences/ |
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Along the years, I have seen my team win many competitions, such as several Spanish leagues, some Spanish cups, two UEFA cups and of course, the most coveted of all football championships, eight Champions Leagues.
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Until 1998, everybody laughed at Real Madrid winning 6 European Cups, now known as Champions league, in black and white. Until 1998, everybody laughed at Real Madrid winning 6 European Cups, now known as the Champions |
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That meant that Real Madrid had won its European Cups even before colour TV sets had been invented. That meant that Real Madrid had won its European Cups even before colour TV |
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Real Madrid won the first five European Cup editions, from 1956 to 1960. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Six years later, in 1966, Real Madrid won the European Cup again. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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During those first years of the competition, Real Madrid reigned in Europe thanks to its superb squad and especially to one of the best ever football players, Di Stéfano. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In 1998, Real Madrid achieved what many thought would be an unattainable feat for this team, winning the seventh Champions League. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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After that, Real Madrid won another two Champion leagues in alternative years, 2000 and 2002. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That was a huge achievement: Winning three Champions Leagues in five years, something only within reach of the very best teams. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It took Real Madrid twelve years to win its tenth Champions League. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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By then, Cristiano Ronaldo was already playing for Real Madrid. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Real Madrid began to be very dependent on such as extraordinarily gifted player. Real Madrid began to be very dependent on such a |
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Between 2016 and 2018, Real Madrid won three Champions Leagues in a row and this year, 2022, in fact three days ago, Real Madrid made it again. Between 2016 and 2018, Real Madrid won three Champions Leagues in a row This part reads a little confusing "in a row and this year, 2022, in fact, three days ago¨. I'm not sure if it's incorrect per say, but I recommend rephrasing it. |
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What an extraordinary football squad! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have seen Real Madrid win eight Champions Leagues. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have seen amazing players playing for Real Madrid. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, this was the time that I saw Real Madrid playing most as a team. However, this was the |
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Apart from the goalkeeper, it would be difficult to say which player was better than the rest. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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