Writing prompt
Describe tu personalidad.🌙 My Personality
Open to any feedback
I'm someone who follows her feelings. Sometimes I think with my heart more than my head, but I wouldn't change that because I'm grateful that I can understand and take care of the people I love. It's difficult for me to open up emotionally, but when I do it, I give it my all.
I like routines and peaceful spaces because they make me feel like I have my own shelter. However, I need to do something different from time to time, as a little impulse that remind myself that I'm still alive. I'm a homebody who is sensitive to environments, and I value peace.
I feel motivated to learn and grow, but relationships are more important to me. My husband, family, and loved ones come first. I get frustrated easily when things go wrong, but I give myself time to get things in order.
I want others to see me that I'm somebody friendly, funny, intelligent, and that I really love them. When I love someone, I naturally want to take care of them. đź’›
🌙 Mi personalidad
Soy una persona muy guiada por lo que siente. A veces pienso demasiado con el corazĂłn, pero no lo cambiarĂa, porque gracias a eso puedo entender y cuidar a las personas que amo. Me cuesta abrirme emocionalmente, aunque cuando lo hago, entrego todo de mĂ.
Me gusta la rutina y los espacios tranquilos, sentir que tengo mi propio refugio. Sin embargo, de vez en cuando necesito hacer algo distinto, como un pequeño impulso que me recuerda que estoy viva. Soy hogareña, sensible al ambiente y valoro mucho la paz.
Me motiva aprender y crecer, pero sobre todo me importan los vĂnculos. Mi pareja, mi familia y las personas que quiero siempre van primero. Cuando algo sale mal, me frustro fácilmente, aunque despuĂ©s dejo que el tiempo acomode las cosas.
Quisiera que los demás notaran que soy alguien amigable, divertida, inteligente y que los quiero de verdad. Cuando quiero a alguien, me nace cuidarlo. 💛
I'm someone who follows hertheir feelings.
It's difficult for me to open up emotionally, but when I do it, I give it my all.
No change suggested
"it" sounds extra here. I think "...but when I do.." sounds better. No one would really notice either way, though.
However, I need to do something different from time to time, as a little impulsejolt that remind myself that I'm still alive.
Jolt more natural here, but most people would say "as a reminder that I'm still alive".
I'm a homebody who is sensitive to environmentsmy environment, and I value peace.
"Sensitive to environments" is understood but it sounds off.
I want others to see me that I'm somebody friendly, funny, intelligent, and that I really love them.
I'm someone who follows hertheir feelings.
However, I need to do something different from time to time, as a little impulse thatnudge to remind myself that I'm still alive.
Impulse maybe isn't the best word. Impulse is something you can hardly control (i.e. impulsive scrolling on tiktok). Maybe "nudge" or "reminder" would be better. Though "reminder" risks being repetitive because you later use the verb "to remind".
I'm a homebody who is sensitive to environments, andso I value peace.
Makes more sense with "so" instead of "and".
I want others to see me that I'mas somebody who's friendly, funny, intelligent, and that Iwho really loveloves them.
Overall feedback
Very few mistakes, good job. My advice is to try and connect the sentences a bit more. Maybe give examples to tie these different facts about you together. It feels a bit like you're listing things out about you without connecting them. Good luck!
Hello! Thank you for your time and corrections! I hadn't noticed that, but upon rereading, yes, it's looks like a list, hahaha.
However, I need to do something different from time to time, as a little impulse thatto remind myself that I'm still alive.
You have to change 'that' to 'to' because in this sentence, you explained why you do something different. You can use 'that', but you need to change 'myself' to 'me' = that reminds me that I'm still alive.
I want others to see me that I'm somebody friendly, funny, intelligent, and that I really love them.
Remove 'me' because it means you want others to literally 'see you'. You can still leave 'somebody' in the sentence, but removing 'somebody' makes the sentence shorter and less wordy.
Overall feedback
Wow, after reading about your personality, I truly realise you are a strong and loving person! Keep it up!
Hello! Thank you very much for your time and reading too. Your corrections are very useful to me. And thank you too for your words :D
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