Soon after I lost sight of the drug dealer somewhere in the crowd, however, there was a pretty blond girl with two bumps on her head, dressed in a red transparent crop top, white bra, and high-west jeans. Soon after I lost sight of the drug dealer somewhere in the crowd, however, there was a pretty blond girl with two bumps on her head dressed in a red transparent crop top, white bra, and high-west jeans.

Soon after I lost sight of the drug dealer somewhere in the crowd, h. However, there was a pretty blond girl with two bumps on her head, dressed in a red transparent crop top, white bra, and high-weaist jeans. Soon after I lost sight of the drug dealer somewhere in the crowd. However, there was a pretty blond girl with two bumps on her head, dressed in a red transparent crop top, white bra, and high-waist jeans.

Separating the sentences here can make it a bit easier to read as the original sentence was quite long.

Soon after I lost sight of the drug dealer. But soon after, somewhere in the crowd, however, there wasI saw a pretty blond girl with two bumps on her head, dressed in a red transparent crop top, a white bra, and high-weaist jeans. I lost sight of the drug dealer. But soon after, somewhere in the crowd, I saw a pretty blond girl with two bumps on her head, dressed in a red transparent crop top, a white bra, and high-waist jeans.

I moved clauses around to add clarity and improve flow. Starting a sentence with "But," as I did, is technically incorrect, but even many English-speaking authors do this on purpose to make their writing more natural.

I liked her movements and style and got the pleasure ofenjoyed watching her. I liked her movements and style and enjoyed watching her.

I liked her movements and style and got the pleasure ofenjoyed watching her. I liked her movements and style and enjoyed watching her.

I enjoyed watching her. I liked her movements and. Her style and got the pleasure of watching her. I enjoyed watching her. I liked her movements. Her style.

Writing shorter sentences in English improves the experience of reading. I also changed the verb tense for consistency.

Initially, I thought that there wasn't enough room and that is why he was danceding close to me. Initially, I thought that there wasn't enough room and that is why he was dancing close to me.

Initially, I thought that there wasn't enough room and that is. That must be why he danced so close to me. Initially, I thought that there wasn't enough room. That must be why he danced so close to me.

I moved forward, and he followed me, I was steppinged back and so did he. I moved forward, and he followed me, I stepped back and so did he.

I moved forward, and he followed me,. I was stepping back and so did he. I moved forward, and he followed me. I was stepping back and so did he.

I moved forward, and he followed me, I was. I steppinged back and so did he. I moved forward, and he followed. I stepped back and so did he.

I came closer to my friend just in case that guy tried to pick me up. I thought, maybe if he had noticed that I was with someone he wouldn't have been so clingy. I came closer to my friend just in case that guy tried to pick me up. I thought, maybe if he had noticed that I was with someone he wouldn't have been so clingy.

I camewent closer to my friend just in case that guy tried to pick me up. I thought, maybe if he had noticed that I was with someone he wouldn't have beenbe so clingy. I went closer to my friend just in case that guy tried to pick me up. I thought, maybe if he noticed that I was with someone he wouldn't be so clingy.

I came closer to my friend just in case that guy tried to pick me up. I thought, to myself that maybe if he had noticed that I was with someone, he wouldn't have been so clingy. I came closer to my friend just in case that guy tried to pick me up. I thought to myself that maybe if he had noticed that I was with someone, he wouldn't have been so clingy.

It worked, for some time he disappeared and appeared again when I decided to take a break atby the wall. It worked, for some time he disappeared and appeared again when I decided to take a break by the wall.

It worked, for some time, he disappeared and appeared again when I decided to take a break atnear the wall. It worked for some time, he disappeared and appeared again when I decided to take a break near the wall.

It worked, for some time he disappeared and appeared again w. He disappeared for a while. When I decided to take a break at the wall, he showed up again. It worked. He disappeared for a while. When I decided to take a break at the wall, he showed up again.

It sounds a little awkward to put a lot of sequential events in one sentence.

I was flattered but it's not how I planned to finish mythe night. I was flattered but it's not how I planned to finish the night.

I was flattered but it's nothat wasn't how I planned to finishend my night. I was flattered but that wasn't how I planned to end my night.

I got home around 5 a.m. Low With low-level construction, and always opened windows, the Cypriots started their days at 7- or 8 a.m. aAnd even earplugs won't save you from waking up. I got home around 5 a.m. With low-level construction and always opened windows, the Cypriots start their days at 7 or 8 a.m. And even earplugs won't save you from waking up.

I got home around 5 a.m. Low Loud construction, always opened windows,... Cypriots started their days at 7-8 a.m. and even earplugs won't save you from waking up. I got home around 5 a.m. Loud construction, always opened windows... Cypriots started their days at 7-8 a.m. and even earplugs won't save you from waking up.

I got home around 5 a.m. Low construction, always opened windows, I heard the low hum of construction through the windows, which I always kept open. Cypriots started their days at 7-–8 a.m. and eEven earplugs won't save you from waking up. I got home around 5 a.m. I heard the low hum of construction through the windows, which I always kept open. Cypriots started their days at 7–8 a.m. Even earplugs won't save you from waking up.

I added a predicate to make a sentence more complete.

My morning had started at 10ten. My morning started at ten.

My morning had started at 10. My morning started at 10.

I was about to make a fancy breakfast and not a toast with cheese again. I was about to make a fancy breakfast and not toast with cheese again.

I was about to make a fancy breakfast and not ajust toast with cheese again. I was about to make a fancy breakfast and not just toast with cheese again.

I was about to make a fancy breakfast and, not a toast with cheese again. I was about to make a fancy breakfast, not toast with cheese again.

However, after a littlsome chit-chat with my coworkers, I agreed to show them a beautiful place on the Island. However, after some chit-chat with my coworkers, I agreed to show them a beautiful place on the Island.

When using 'however' here, it makes me wonder - did your chit-chat with your coworkers stop you from making your breakfast? If so, maybe adding "...on the Island, instead of making breakfast." can make it more clear.

However, aAfter a little chit-chat with coworkers, I agreed to show them a beautiful place on the Iisland. After a little chit-chat with coworkers, I agreed to show them a beautiful place on the island.

I wouldn't put "however" unless it seems like this sentence contradicts the previous sentence.

I had Chocolate and coffee, like I am in my 20s, and here I am sleepy, with a little hangover, in the car riding to the sea caves. I had Chocolate and coffee, like I am in my 20s, and here I am sleepy, with a little hangover, in the car riding to the sea caves.

CWith chocolate and coffee like I amwas in my 20s and, here I amwas sleepy, with and a little haungover, in thea car riding to the sea caves. With chocolate and coffee like I was in my 20s, here I was sleepy and a little hungover, in a car riding to the sea caves.

CI went with chocolate and coffee, like I amwas in my 20s and hgain. Here I am s. Sleepy, with a slittleght hangover, in thea car ridingon my way to the sea caves. I went with chocolate and coffee, like I was in my 20s again. Here I am. Sleepy, with a slight hangover, in a car on my way to the sea caves.

Well, she had brought a dog so my day became brighter. Well, she brought a dog so my day became brighter.

Well, she hadmy coworker brought a dog so my day became brighter. Well, my coworker brought a dog so my day became brighter.

Well,At least she had brought aher dog so my day became brighter. That brightened my day. At least she brought her dog. That brightened my day.