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Oct. 17, 2020

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Sweet potato ginger sweet soup

What is your favor dessert in winter?

Thanks to my friend asking me this question.

Actually, maybe you can name more than dozen.

But this is definitely one to go for in the winter months.

Made using those two ingredients (Sweet potato and ginger) sometimes with red jujube too.

This dessert is able to be nourishing for entire body, restores warmth and helps clear toxins.

While providing a good dose of beta-carotene.

Is very simple to cook at home.

Please do try it this winter and you will thank me for that.

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What is your favorite dessert in winter?

MIt is made using thoese two ingredients (Sweet potato and ginger) and sometimes with red jujube too.

This dessert is able to be nourishing for the entire body, restores warmth and helps to clear toxins.

Wwhile providing a good dose of beta-carotene.

This sentence needs to be part of the previous sentence if you want to use the word "while." This is because your sentence "Providing a good dose of beta-carotene" is a dependent clause.
Or you could say "It also provides a good dose of beta-carotene."

Please do try it this winter, and you will thank me for thait.

Two independent clauses always need a comma with and or a ; or a :
For instance, you can write "please do try it this winter; you will thank me for it"

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Well written!

Sweet potato ginger sweet soup

What is your favor dessert in winter?

Thanks to my friend for asking me this question.

Actually, mMaybe you can name more than a dozen.

The word "actually"at the beginning of this sentence feels a little unatural to me even though you are using it correctly. A better wording might be "You may actually be able to name a dozen"

But this is definitely one to go for in the winter months.

Made using thoese two ingredients (Sweet potato and ginger)
and
sometimes with red jujubes too.

This dessert is able to be nourishing for the entire body, restores warmth and helps to clear toxins.

While providing a good dose of beta-carotene.

It is very simple to cook at home.

Feedback

Well written!

What is your favor dessert in winter?


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What is your favorite dessert in winter?

Thanks to my friend asking me this question.


Thanks to my friend for asking me this question.

Actually, maybe you can name more than dozen.


Actually, mMaybe you can name more than a dozen.

The word "actually"at the beginning of this sentence feels a little unatural to me even though you are using it correctly. A better wording might be "You may actually be able to name a dozen"

But this is definitely one to go for in the winter months.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Made using those two ingredients (Sweet potato and ginger) sometimes with red jujube too.


Made using thoese two ingredients (Sweet potato and ginger)
and
sometimes with red jujubes too.

MIt is made using thoese two ingredients (Sweet potato and ginger) and sometimes with red jujube too.

This dessert is able to be nourishing for entire body, restores warmth and helps clear toxins.


This dessert is able to be nourishing for the entire body, restores warmth and helps to clear toxins.

This dessert is able to be nourishing for the entire body, restores warmth and helps to clear toxins.

While providing a good dose of beta-carotene.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Wwhile providing a good dose of beta-carotene.

This sentence needs to be part of the previous sentence if you want to use the word "while." This is because your sentence "Providing a good dose of beta-carotene" is a dependent clause. Or you could say "It also provides a good dose of beta-carotene."

Is very simple to cook at home.


It is very simple to cook at home.

Please do try it this winter and you will thank me for that.


Please do try it this winter, and you will thank me for thait.

Two independent clauses always need a comma with and or a ; or a : For instance, you can write "please do try it this winter; you will thank me for it"

Sweet potato ginger sweet soup


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