Feb. 20, 2021
I am concerned about healthy eating and environment, that’s why five years ago I decided joining a consumer cooperative for my grocery purchases.
Almost every neighborhood in my city has one of this groups of citizens, that work together to make a better world. It’s trendy.
How it works? Periodically I can buy fruit, vegetable and meat directly from small farmers that use ecological procedures to grow them. That is quite considerable benefit for them because there are no brokers.
Obviously, this system is not as cozy as going to a supermarket. Veggies contain soil and sometimes snails. I must clean deeply every single item. In the other hand, this assures me that there’s no phytosanitary product applied. Hundred percent natural food without plastic containers.
I know that this will not improve the alarming status of the planet, but I try to do my small contribution.
I am concerned about healthy eating and the environment, that’s why five years ago I decided to joining a consumer cooperative for my grocery purchases.
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How does it works?
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That is quite a considerable benefit for them because there are no brokers.
Obviously, this system is not as cozy as going to a supermarket.
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I must clean deeply every single item well.
IOn the other hand, this assures me that there’s no phytosanitary product applied.
HIt's a hundred percent natural food without plastic containers.
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In some formal writing settings it's desirable for sentences complete in themselves to be separated by a colon, semicolon or period. In other contexts a comma is fine.
Almost every neighborhood in my city has one of thisese groups of citizens, that work together to make a better world.
'This' or 'these' agrees in number with the noun it accompanies: 'this group', 'these groups'.
Either 'citizens who work together' or 'citizens that work together' is fine. I've taken out the comma because it is unusual to break up a clause in that way: [one] [of these groups] [of citizens that work together].
It’s trendy.
How it works?
'How it works' or 'How does it work?' might read more smoothly.
Periodically I can buy fruit, vegetables and meat directly from small farmers that use ecological procedures to grow them.
'Ecological procedures' is good, but 'sustainable processes' or 'ecologically friendly processes' might read as more natural.
Thatis is quiteof considerable benefit forto them because there are no brokers.
This is fine, but 'quite considerable' is an expression to avoid in formal writing: 'considerable' alone communicates the degree of benefit, so 'quite' is a tautology.
'This is to their benefit' or 'this is of benefit to them'.
Obviously, this system is not as cozy as going to a supermarket.
'Cozy' reads strangely here. 'Convenient'?
Veggies contain soil and sometimes snails.
I must clean deeply every single item.
This is fine, but 'I have to carefully clean', for example, might sound more natural to a native speaker. Frustratingly, although we 'deep clean' we don't 'clean deeply'!
IOn the other hand, this assures me that there’s no phytosanitary product has been applied.
'On the other hand'.
I've rearranged the rest of the sentence to show a construction that seems more natural to me: 'there is no product [that has been] applied' ---> 'no product has been applied'.
HOne hundred percent natural food, without plastic containers.
'One hundred percent' or 'a hundred percent'. You could turn this into a full sentence to make the composition as a whole read more smoothly.
I know that this will not improve the alarming statuse of the planet, but I try to do mymake a small contribution.
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Excellent composition! Truly impressive! Mostly there are only very small points relating to common usage, and these pop up for native speakers also. Please keep writing.
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I am concerned about healthy eating and environment, that’s why five years ago I decided joining a consumer cooperative for my grocery purchases. I am concerned about healthy eating and the environment In some formal writing settings it's desirable for sentences complete in themselves to be separated by a colon, semicolon or period. In other contexts a comma is fine. I am concerned about healthy eating and the environment, that’s why five years ago I decided to join |
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Almost every neighborhood in my city has one of this groups of citizens, that work together to make a better world. Almost every neighborhood in my city has one of th 'This' or 'these' agrees in number with the noun it accompanies: 'this group', 'these groups'. Either 'citizens who work together' or 'citizens that work together' is fine. I've taken out the comma because it is unusual to break up a clause in that way: [one] [of these groups] [of citizens that work together]. Almost every neighborhood in my city has one of th |
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It’s trendy. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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How it works? How it works? 'How it works' or 'How does it work?' might read more smoothly. How does it work |
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Periodically I can buy fruit, vegetable and meat directly from small farmers that use ecological procedures to grow them. Periodically I can buy fruit, vegetables and meat directly from small farmers that use ecological procedures to grow them. 'Ecological procedures' is good, but 'sustainable processes' or 'ecologically friendly processes' might read as more natural. Periodically I can buy fruit, vegetable, and meat directly from small farmers |
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That is quite considerable benefit for them because there are no brokers. Th This is fine, but 'quite considerable' is an expression to avoid in formal writing: 'considerable' alone communicates the degree of benefit, so 'quite' is a tautology. 'This is to their benefit' or 'this is of benefit to them'. That is quite a considerable benefit for them because there are no brokers. |
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Obviously, this system is not as cozy as going to a supermarket. Obviously, this system is not as cozy as going to a supermarket. 'Cozy' reads strangely here. 'Convenient'? Obviously, this system is not as cozy as going to a supermarket. convenient or comfortable could fit here |
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Veggies contain soil and sometimes snails. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I must clean deeply every single item. I must clean deeply every single item. This is fine, but 'I have to carefully clean', for example, might sound more natural to a native speaker. Frustratingly, although we 'deep clean' we don't 'clean deeply'! I must clean |
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In the other hand, this assures me that there’s no phytosanitary product applied.
'On the other hand'. I've rearranged the rest of the sentence to show a construction that seems more natural to me: 'there is no product [that has been] applied' ---> 'no product has been applied'.
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Hundred percent natural food without plastic containers.
'One hundred percent' or 'a hundred percent'. You could turn this into a full sentence to make the composition as a whole read more smoothly.
You could connect this with the previous sentence |
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I know that this will not improve the alarming status of the planet, but I try to do my small contribution. I know that this will not improve the alarming stat I know that this will not drastically improve the alarming status of the planet, but I try to |
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