Jan. 19, 2020
Summary
I am posting a summary of an article I read a few days ago.
Mucus
Mucus is our body's hero according to the author.
Mucus is best known for stringy slime dripping from noses and vicious goop hacked up by sickening airways. But it’s so much more than that. Mucus coats the surfaces of intestines, eyes, mouth, nasal cavity, and ears, playing important physiological roles. It hydrates, cleans, supports good microorganisms, and repels invaders.
Most of these functions come from mucins. Mucins give mucus its gel-like qualities. Mucins come in two types: secreted mucins and exuded mucins.
In airways, having too much mucus might cause harm under certain conditions: asthma, cystic fibrosis, and chronic obstructive pulmonary disease.
However, in the intestine, having too much mucus is not a problem. Having too much would be better rather than too little.
Thank you very much for reading.
Mucus is best known foras the stringy slime drippingthat drips from noses and vicious goopthe viscous goop that is hacked up by sickeninginfected airways.
Because you wrote "that drips from" I think it is best to say "that is hacked up" so that the sentence structure/pattern is consistent. (This is called parallel structure, by the way.)
"Infected airways" sounds more natural to me than "sick airways."
In airways, hHaving too much mucus might causbe harm underful when coupled with certain conditions:, such as asthma, cystic fibrosis, and chronic obstructive pulmonary disease.
However, in the intestine, having too much mucus in the intestine is not a problem.
This sounds more natural to me.
HIn fact, having too much would be better rather thanis better than having too little.
I think adding "In fact" makes the sentences connect/flow better.
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Very nice job as always. I just made a few suggestions.
Jan. 20, 2020
Thank you so much for teaching me about parallel structure. I will look into that later! こちらこそいつもありがとうございます！
Summary
I am posting a summary of an article I read a few days ago.
Mucus
Mucus is our body's greatest hero according to the author.
I would say there are other "heroes" in the human body, but if the author or you aren't of the same opinion, you can leave it out.
Mucus is best known for being the stringy slime drippingthat drips from noses and vicithe viscous goop hacked/coughed up by sickening airways.
sickening = disgusting. While that also works in this context, I do believe you intend to refer to the airways of sick people.
But it’s so much more than that.
Mucus coats the surfaces of the intestines, eyes, mouth, nasal cavity, and ears, thus playing an important physiological roles.
It hydrates, cle and cleans organs, supports good microorganisms, and repels invaders.
How you have said it suggests that the mucus hydrates, cleans, and supports good microorganisms.
Most of these functions come fromare thanks to mucins.
or "Most of these traits derive/come from mucins"
Mucins give mucus its gel-like qualitiesy.
Quality and qualities work, but I think "quality" fits better here because your entry is not about gel.
Mucins come in two types: secreted mucins and exuded mucins.
In airways, hHaving too much mucus might causbecome harm under certain conditionsful when coupled with certain conditions that affect the airway: asthma, cystic fibrosis, and chronic obstructive pulmonary disease.
Just more natural phrasing
However, in the intestine, having too much mucus is not a problem.
Having too much would be better rather thanis better than having too little.
Thank you very much for reading.
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Well done! Just some edits to make it sound more natural and clear
Jan. 20, 2020
Thank you so much for the corrections!
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Mucus is our body's hero according to the author. Mucus is our body's greatest hero according to the author. I would say there are other "heroes" in the human body, but if the author or you aren't of the same opinion, you can leave it out. |
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Mucus is best known for stringy slime dripping from noses and vicious goop hacked up by sickening airways. Mucus is best known for being the stringy slime sickening = disgusting. While that also works in this context, I do believe you intend to refer to the airways of sick people. Mucus is best known Because you wrote "that drips from" I think it is best to say "that is hacked up" so that the sentence structure/pattern is consistent. (This is called parallel structure, by the way.) "Infected airways" sounds more natural to me than "sick airways." |
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But it’s so much more than that. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Mucus coats the surfaces of intestines, eyes, mouth, nasal cavity, and ears, playing important physiological roles. Mucus coats the surfaces of the intestines, eyes, mouth, nasal cavity, and ears, thus playing an important physiological role |
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It hydrates, cleans, supports good microorganisms, and repels invaders. It hydrates How you have said it suggests that the mucus hydrates, cleans, and supports good microorganisms. |
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Most of these functions come from mucins. Most of these functions or "Most of these traits derive/come from mucins" |
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Mucins give mucus its gel-like qualities. Mucins give mucus its gel-like qualit Quality and qualities work, but I think "quality" fits better here because your entry is not about gel. |
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Mucins come in two types: secreted mucins and exuded mucins. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In airways, having too much mucus might cause harm under certain conditions: asthma, cystic fibrosis, and chronic obstructive pulmonary disease.
Just more natural phrasing
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However, in the intestine, having too much mucus is not a problem. This sentence has been marked as perfect! However, This sounds more natural to me. |
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Having too much would be better rather than too little. Having too much
I think adding "In fact" makes the sentences connect/flow better. |
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Thank you very much for reading. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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