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ElmasCapito

April 20, 2025

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Strange dream

I just wrote here yesterday at midnight, but I want to tell you about my dream. First of all, thanks to all of you that has corrected my last post, I really appreciate it. The main is my dream, usually, I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unconscious yelling at you to pay attention. Well, my dream started with my friend and me smoking in my college hallway. We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much(not like a boyfriend). But he suddenly began to cry and asked me for help. I answered him, inquiring about what was happening. What led to this uncontrollable sadness, however, he couldn´t speak to me, or he didn´t want it. I only took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions with a serious facial expression... while the evening was falling down I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness. The doubts in my mind didn´t allow me to enjoy the walk, and a notification came up to cut off my thoughts. My ex-girlfriend posted a story. She with a new army boyfriend. They were kissing each other and showing the love I still expected from her. Those emotions tumbled me and I woke up (or came out?) with a strange feeling. If I were a soldier, would she love me again?
Thanks for reading.

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I just wrote here yesterday at midnight, but I want to tell you all about my dream.

Nitpicky, not really a huge concern

First of all, I give thanks to all of you thatwho hasve corrected my last post,. I really appreciate it.

The maintopic is my dream, u. Usually, I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unsubconscious yelling at you to pay attention.

Well, my dream started with my friend and me smoking in my college hallway.

We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much (not like a boyfriend).

But he suddenly, he began to cry and asked me for help.

again not a huge concern just flows better

I answered him, inquiring about what was happening.

"What led to this uncontrollable sadness, h?". However, he couldn´t speak to me, or he didn´t want ito.

I only took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions with a serious facial expression... while the evening was falling down I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness.

She with aher new army boyfriend.

Those emotions tumbled me and I woke up (or came out?)

Strange dream

I just wrote here yesterday at midnight, but I want to tell you about my dream.

First of all, thanks to all of you that has corrected my last post, I really appreciate it.

The main is my dream, uUsually, I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unconscious brain yelling at you to pay attention.

I don't really know what you mean by "The main is my dream." Sorry.

conscious and unconscious are both adjective, which means they both need a noun (like "brain"). You might also be thinking of "conscience" (slightly different spelling) which is itself a noun, but there is no such thing as an "unconscience."

Well, my dream started with my friend and me smoking in my college hallway.

We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much (not like a boyfriend).

But he suddenly began to cry and asked me for help.

I answered him, inquiring about what was happening.

Nice, I think a lot of native English speakers probably wouldn't use "inquiring," but it's completely correct here.

WI wanted to know what led to this uncontrollable sadness, however, either he couldn´t speak to me, or he didn´t want ito.

"what led to this uncontrollable sadness" feels incomplete in this sentence (I works on it's own as a question, but not as part of a larger sentence), so I added some more context, "I wanted to know."

I only took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions with a serious facial expressione... while the evening was falling downcoming, I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness.

"a serious facial expression" is a little bit wordy, and unnatural (though it's still correct).

"while the evening was falling down" sounds really weird in English. "while the evening was coming" also sounds a little weird, but less so (I wasn't sure exactly what you meant, so I didn't change it to much). Some possible suggestions that sound natural are:

"while it was getting dark,"
"before it got dark,"
"while the sun was setting,"
"before the evening came,"

The doubts in my mind didn´t allow me to enjoy the walk, and a notification came up to cut off my thoughts.

sometimes, the plural of "doubt" is still "doubt," while others it is "doubts." This is one of those instances where the plural of "doubt" is "doubt."

I'm sorry that I don't have anything more than an intuitive understanding of this, so I can't explain more, but I think most of the time, I hear the plural of "doubt" be "doubt."

My ex-girlfriend posted a story.

She's with a new army boyfriend.

They were kissing each other and showing the love I still expected fromhave for her.

"the love I still expected from her" doesn't really make sense in this context. "The love I still have for her" is my best guess as to what you meant.

Those emotions tumbled out of me and I woke up (or came out?)with a strange feeling.

"Those emotions tumbled out of me and came out with a strange feeling." Sounds a little weird.

If I were a soldier, would she love me again?

Thanks for reading.

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Great job! I was able to understand almost everything you said!

As far as the content of your post, I'm sorry you have to go through that. Ex's and break-ups can be hard and unfortunately there is no easy solution for them. I wish you the best of luck, and hope you can move past your Ex.

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ElmasCapito

April 24, 2025

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Thanks. I don´t talk about it, but I guess it still hurts a bit. I think my dream was because I haven´t moved on. I´d like to ask you if you have any suggestions to improve my writing skills.

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Mod_John

April 24, 2025

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Sure, unfortunately there is no quick solution, but if you keep writing on here and trying to improve you'll get better eventually. You could also try to read more in English, if you watch a lot of YouTube, you could watch some American YouTubers and read the comments. Then you'll get a better feeling of how the language is spoken in a casual manner.

Strange dDream

I just wrote here yesterday at midnight, but I want to tell you about my dream.

First of all, thanks to all of you that has corrected my last post, I really appreciate it.

The main is my dream, usually,I usually dream about (???). I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unsubconscious yelling at you to pay attention.

Again, I don't know what you mean here by "main."😅

Well, my dream started with my friend and me smoking in my college hallway.

We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much(not like a boyfriend (in a platonic way).

But he suddenly began to cry and asked me for help.

I answered him, inquirresponded by asking about what was happeniwrong.

What led to this uncontrollable sadness, however, he couldn´'t speak totell me, (or he didn´t want ito).

I onlyjust took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions withbehind a serious facial expression... while theas evening was faelling down I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness.

I think you were trying to say, "as evening fell," which is fine, but it's a little bit poetic. You can also say, "as the sun was setting" or "as it became dusk," which are a little less poetic sounding.

The doubts in my mind didn´'t allow me to enjoy the walk, and a notification came up to cut offpopped up that interrupted my thoughts.

If you're talking about a notification on a phone, then "popped up" sounds most natural here in my opinion.

My ex-girlfriend posted a story.

She withgot a new army boyfriend who was in the army.

They were kissing each other and showing each other the love that I still expected from her.

Note: there's a subtle difference between "expected" and "hoped" here, both of which are translated as "esperaba" in Spanish.

THaving those emotions tumblunsettled/upset/disturbed me and I woke up (or came out?)

Combine with the next phrase.

with a strange feeling.:

Combine with the next phrase.

If I were a soldier, would she love me again?

Thanks for reading.

Feedback

Very good!
If by "main" you mean your best friend, you can just say "best friend." I think this is the most common and neutral way to say this. You might also here "bestie" (but this is usually considered a bit "girly" sounding) or "BFF/bff" (short for "best friend forever," which is more neutral than "bestie" and can be used by guys or girls).

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ElmasCapito

April 24, 2025

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JAJAJA, thanks for your suggestions, I tried to say: "the topic is my dream". I just thought I could use the word "main" .
Do you have any tip to improve my writing skills?

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AllSubNoDub

April 24, 2025

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Ah, ok. Just keep writing and reading!

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ElmasCapito

April 25, 2025

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Man I checked your profile and It didn't allowe me to correct any of your posts. "You can only correct pots in your native language" said the website, but I'm a native sapanish speaker. You should check it.

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AllSubNoDub

April 25, 2025

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I think it's because you have "Mexican Spanish" and I just have "Spanish." That's such a silly rule lol.

Strange dream


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I just wrote here yesterday at midnight, but I want to tell you about my dream.


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I just wrote here yesterday at midnight, but I want to tell you all about my dream.

Nitpicky, not really a huge concern

First of all, thanks to all of you that has corrected my last post, I really appreciate it.


First of all, thanks to all of you that has corrected my last post, I really appreciate it.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

First of all, I give thanks to all of you thatwho hasve corrected my last post,. I really appreciate it.

The main is my dream, usually, I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unconscious yelling at you to pay attention.


The main is my dream, usually,I usually dream about (???). I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unsubconscious yelling at you to pay attention.

Again, I don't know what you mean here by "main."😅

The main is my dream, uUsually, I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unconscious brain yelling at you to pay attention.

I don't really know what you mean by "The main is my dream." Sorry. conscious and unconscious are both adjective, which means they both need a noun (like "brain"). You might also be thinking of "conscience" (slightly different spelling) which is itself a noun, but there is no such thing as an "unconscience."

The maintopic is my dream, u. Usually, I believe everyone has strange dreams, which is your unsubconscious yelling at you to pay attention.

Well, my dream started with my friend and me smoking in my college hallway.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Well, my dream started with my friend and me smoking in my college hallway.

We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much(not like a boyfriend).


We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much(not like a boyfriend (in a platonic way).

We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much (not like a boyfriend).

We have been friends since high school, and I love him so much (not like a boyfriend).

But he suddenly began to cry and asked me for help.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

But he suddenly, he began to cry and asked me for help.

again not a huge concern just flows better

I answered him, inquiring about what was happening.


I answered him, inquirresponded by asking about what was happeniwrong.

I answered him, inquiring about what was happening.

Nice, I think a lot of native English speakers probably wouldn't use "inquiring," but it's completely correct here.

I answered him, inquiring about what was happening.

What led to this uncontrollable sadness, however, he couldn´t speak to me, or he didn´t want it.


What led to this uncontrollable sadness, however, he couldn´'t speak totell me, (or he didn´t want ito).

WI wanted to know what led to this uncontrollable sadness, however, either he couldn´t speak to me, or he didn´t want ito.

"what led to this uncontrollable sadness" feels incomplete in this sentence (I works on it's own as a question, but not as part of a larger sentence), so I added some more context, "I wanted to know."

"What led to this uncontrollable sadness, h?". However, he couldn´t speak to me, or he didn´t want ito.

I only took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions with a serious facial expression... while the evening was falling down I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness.


I onlyjust took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions withbehind a serious facial expression... while theas evening was faelling down I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness.

I think you were trying to say, "as evening fell," which is fine, but it's a little bit poetic. You can also say, "as the sun was setting" or "as it became dusk," which are a little less poetic sounding.

I only took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions with a serious facial expressione... while the evening was falling downcoming, I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness.

"a serious facial expression" is a little bit wordy, and unnatural (though it's still correct). "while the evening was falling down" sounds really weird in English. "while the evening was coming" also sounds a little weird, but less so (I wasn't sure exactly what you meant, so I didn't change it to much). Some possible suggestions that sound natural are: "while it was getting dark," "before it got dark," "while the sun was setting," "before the evening came,"

I only took his hand and went to his classroom where he hid his emotions with a serious facial expression... while the evening was falling down I took a walk through my college, watching my acquaintances and their happiness.

The doubts in my mind didn´t allow me to enjoy the walk, and a notification came up to cut off my thoughts.


The doubts in my mind didn´'t allow me to enjoy the walk, and a notification came up to cut offpopped up that interrupted my thoughts.

If you're talking about a notification on a phone, then "popped up" sounds most natural here in my opinion.

The doubts in my mind didn´t allow me to enjoy the walk, and a notification came up to cut off my thoughts.

sometimes, the plural of "doubt" is still "doubt," while others it is "doubts." This is one of those instances where the plural of "doubt" is "doubt." I'm sorry that I don't have anything more than an intuitive understanding of this, so I can't explain more, but I think most of the time, I hear the plural of "doubt" be "doubt."

My ex-girlfriend posted a story.


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My ex-girlfriend posted a story.

She with a new army boyfriend.


She withgot a new army boyfriend who was in the army.

She's with a new army boyfriend.

She with aher new army boyfriend.

They were kissing each other and showing the love I still expected from her.


They were kissing each other and showing each other the love that I still expected from her.

Note: there's a subtle difference between "expected" and "hoped" here, both of which are translated as "esperaba" in Spanish.

They were kissing each other and showing the love I still expected fromhave for her.

"the love I still expected from her" doesn't really make sense in this context. "The love I still have for her" is my best guess as to what you meant.

Those emotions tumbled me and I woke up (or came out?)


THaving those emotions tumblunsettled/upset/disturbed me and I woke up (or came out?)

Combine with the next phrase.

Those emotions tumbled out of me and I woke up (or came out?)with a strange feeling.

"Those emotions tumbled out of me and came out with a strange feeling." Sounds a little weird.

Those emotions tumbled me and I woke up (or came out?)

with a strange feeling.


with a strange feeling.:

Combine with the next phrase.

If I were a soldier, would she love me again?


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thanks for reading.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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