Story of Ratnag part-14

Kindred Spirit

Aug. 12, 2025

Story of Ratnag part-14

Then suddenly, a person appeared in front of Anna, Bikram, and Naveena. When they recognized the person, they were shocked because it was Layla’s mother, Kamli.
Kamli said, “Now we will be immortal and powerful by serving your blood to our goddess!”
Suddenly, a bright light came towards Kamli and turned into a person. When Naveena saw the person, she exclaimed excitedly, “That’s Mr. Binayak!”
“You really are Mr. Binayak!” said Bikram and Anna. They knew him well and were excited and relieved. On the other hand, Kamli was frightened because Binayak was the most powerful saint of Radang.
Binayak said, “Don’t worry, I will protect you from this witch.”
Suddenly, Kamli started attacking Binayak, but Binayak blocked the attack using his power. Then Kamli used her power to create a big arrow and shot it towards Bikram. Binayak quickly used his power, disappeared from his place, and suddenly appeared behind Kamli. He started attacking her with his sword.
Kamli was ready to fight back using her long nails, but the sword was not ordinary—it was magical. It cut through Kamli’s nails, injuring her. Kamli, now angry, disappeared and suddenly appeared behind Anna, throwing a fireball towards her. But just as it was about to hit, a protective shield appeared around Anna, saving her.
At the same time, Binayak used his power to create a bow and arrow. With it, he attacked Kamli again. She was not ready for the strike and got injured. Due to her injury, she couldn’t fight properly, so she screamed and called her daughter, Layla.

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Then suddenly, a person appeared in front of Anna, Bikram, and Naveena.

When they recognized the person, they were shocked because it was Layla’s mother, Kamli.

Kamli said, “Now we will be immortal and powerful by serving your blood to our goddess!” Suddenly, a bright light came towards Kamli and turned into a person.

When Naveena saw the person, she exclaimed excitedly, “That’s Mr. Binayak!” “You really are Mr. Binayak!” said Bikram and Anna.

They knew him well and were excited and relieved.

On the other hand, Kamli was frightened because Binayak was the most powerful saint of Radang.

Binayak said, “Don’t worry, I will protect you from this witch.” Suddenly, Kamli started attacking Binayak, but Binayak blocked the attack using his power.

Then Kamli used her power to create a big arrow and shot it towards Bikram.

Binayak quickly used his power, disappeared ~~from his place~~, and suddenly appeared behind Kamli.

"From his place" is redundant here.

He started attacking her with his sword.

Kamli was ready to fight back using her long nails, but the sword was not ordinary—it was magical.

It cut through Kamli’s nails, injuring her.

Kamli, now angry, disappeared and suddenly appeared behind Anna, throwing a fireball towards her.

But just as it was about to hit, a protective shield appeared around Anna, saving her.

At the same time, Binayak used his power to create a bow and arrow.

With it, he attacked Kamli again.

She was not ready for the strike and got injured.

Due to her injury, she couldn’t fight properly, so she screamed and called her daughter, Layla.

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The grammar is all on point, so great job! From a storytelling standpoint, the sentences can be more engaging, but that is of course no easy feat. I believe that as you continue to learn more grammar structures, your storytelling skills will also improve. Good luck!

He started attacking her with his sword.