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The black shadow began to take the shape of a person. When Anna and Nayak saw the figure, they were shocked—it was the witch Layla.
Upon seeing her, Nayak quickly said to Anna, "Run from this place, or else you will die!"
Layla smirked and replied, "Oh, really? Do you think I’ll let her run away so easily?"
She immediately attacked Anna, who fought back fiercely. Nayak joined in, helping Anna to kill Layla, but they failed—Layla was far more powerful than both of them. During the battle, everyone was injured, yet Layla suffered a serious wound. Even so, her power was still overwhelming.
Suddenly, another black shadow appeared between them. It was Layla’s mother, Kamli—also a witch. When she saw her daughter’s injury, her eyes burned with fury. "I will finish you all!" she shouted.
Kamli vanished in an instant, then reappeared behind Anna, hurling a sword at her. In a split second, Nayak moved behind Anna to protect her, and the sword pierced his chest. He screamed in pain.
Nayak tried to heal himself with magic, but it failed. Gathering the last of his strength, he used all his magic to create a shifting portal. "Go through the portal, Anna," he urged, "so you can escape this place."
"I can’t do this!" Anna cried. "How can I leave you here, injured? I’m sorry, sir."
"You must," Nayak insisted. "If you stay, the witches will kill you and use your blood in their ritual. That will make them immortal, and the whole world will suffer under their rule. No one will be able to stop them."
Finally, Anna agreed. She stepped into the portal. The two witches tried to destroy it with their magic, but their power had no effect.
Story of Ratnag p: Part- 11
Be more natural in English to structure the title like this with a colon.
Nayak joined in, helping Anna to try kill Layla, but they failed—Layla was far more powerful than both of them.
- Saying 'helping Anna to kill Layla' is contradictory because after you write they failed. Added 'try' so it fits with you writing that they failed afterwards
During the battle, everyone was injured, yetreceived injuries, and Layla suffered a serious wound.
- yet in this context is the same as writing 'however' which doesn't quite fit with the fact that you said just before that 'everyone was injured'. Adding the joining word 'and' makes more sense as it allows you to add more information to describe the situation specifically that Layla received a serious wound
Even so, her power was still overwhelming.
- No need to have 'still' here.
Suddenly, another black shadow appeared between them.
Kamli vanished in an instant, then reappeared behind Anna, hurling a sword at her.
Nayak tried to heal himself with magic, but ithe failed.
- it should be he here because he was the one doing the magic
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During the battle, everyone was injured, yet Layla suffered a serious wound. During the battle, everyone - yet in this context is the same as writing 'however' which doesn't quite fit with the fact that you said just before that 'everyone was injured'. Adding the joining word 'and' makes more sense as it allows you to add more information to describe the situation specifically that Layla received a serious wound |
Even so, her power was still overwhelming. Even so, her power was - No need to have 'still' here. |
Suddenly, another black shadow appeared between them. Suddenly, another black shadow appeared between them. |
It was Layla’s mother, Kamli—also a witch. |
When she saw her daughter’s injury, her eyes burned with fury. |
"I will finish you all!" |
she shouted. |
Kamli vanished in an instant, then reappeared behind Anna, hurling a sword at her. Kamli vanished in an instant, then reappeared behind Anna, hurling a sword at her. |
In a split second, Nayak moved behind Anna to protect her, and the sword pierced his chest. |
He screamed in pain. |
Nayak tried to heal himself with magic, but it failed. Nayak tried to heal himself with magic, but - it should be he here because he was the one doing the magic |
Gathering the last of his strength, he used all his magic to create a shifting portal. |
"Go through the portal, Anna," he urged, "so you can escape this place." |
"I can’t do this!" |
Anna cried. |
"How can I leave you here, injured? |
I’m sorry, sir." |
"You must," Nayak insisted. |
"If you stay, the witches will kill you and use your blood in their ritual. |
That will make them immortal, and the whole world will suffer under their rule. |
No one will be able to stop them." |
Finally, Anna agreed. |
She stepped into the portal. |
The two witches tried to destroy it with their magic, but their power had no effect. |
Story of Ratnag part-11 Story of Ratnag Be more natural in English to structure the title like this with a colon. |
The black shadow began to take the shape of a person. |
When Anna and Nayak saw the figure, they were shocked—it was the witch Layla. |
Upon seeing her, Nayak quickly said to Anna, "Run from this place, or else you will die!" |
Layla smirked and replied, "Oh, really? |
Do you think I’ll let her run away so easily?" |
She immediately attacked Anna, who fought back fiercely. |
Nayak joined in, helping Anna to kill Layla, but they failed—Layla was far more powerful than both of them. Nayak joined in, helping Anna to try kill Layla, but they failed—Layla was far more powerful than both of them. - Saying 'helping Anna to kill Layla' is contradictory because after you write they failed. Added 'try' so it fits with you writing that they failed afterwards |
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