Story about Llamb Kkebabs (6) - Disappearance

After theThis entry follows the killing at Kumin Railway Station Killing event, which I mentiondescribed in my last entry numbered 5 of this serial writing.

In many places, we could see Uyghur individuals still residing ion the main streets, selling their lamb skewers for a living.

However, the poor peddlers of the Han people were forced to stay in a secluded situation atpot in a corner far away.

InAt the initial stage, Uyghur peddlers continued theirin this privileged way as in my eyes, they are the higher class in my eyes. Like many other people, I wasam vehemently dissatisfied with theis discriminatory policy.

As time passed, about a year later, I noticed there was always at least one Han ethnic person staying with them, male or femaleperson of Han ethnicity male or female, accompanying them.

I distinctly remember; I once got off to take a break, while on a long-distance bus travelling to another city., I got off to take a break.

In a small town, I was surprised to see a stall for selling lamb kebabs which was managed by Uyghurs, also asisted by a Han person.person of Han ethnicity.

I guessed probably most of andor even all of the Uyghurs who moved outside of their home were monitored by different local governments.

A few years later, maybe around 5 years.,

Aall the Uyghurs disappeared, and nearly all their lamb kebabs stalls and restaurants were gone.

Most of us including me, didn't notice that.is.

Only about two, or three years before the pandemic outbreak in China at the end of 2019, I was warned to care aboutmade aware of the Uyghur issues,. I realized I hadn't seen them in my living city and allthe city I live in or any of the places I had been for many years.

This iwas the second time I found themy had completely disappeared from my eyes, t. The first time was only in Shenzhen in 1997 which I wrote about it before.

After the Kumin Railway Station Killing event, which I mentioned in my last entry numbered 5 of this serial writing.,

In many places, we could see Uyghur individuals still residing in the main streets, selling their lamb skewers for a living.

Combine the two sentences this way.

However, the poor Han peddlers of Han people were forced to stay in a secluded situation at a corner, far away.

In the initial stage, itially, Uyghur peddlers continued theiro have privilege, they and appeared theo be treated like a higher class in my eyes. Like many other people, I was vehemently dissatisfied with the discriminatory policy.

As time passed, about a year later, I noticed there was always at least one Han ethnic Han person staying with them(, male or female.)

The part at the end is not very necessary for the sentence. I would remove it.

I could judge them fromtell by their appearance.

I distinctly remember; I once got off to take a break on a long-distance bus traveling to another cityetting off work to travel by long-distance bus.

A long-distance bus will always go to another city, so you don't need to say that here.

In a small town (on the way), I was surprised to see a stall for selling lamb kebabs managed by Uyghurs, also assisted by a Han person.

I guessed probably most of and even most of, if not all, of the Uyghurs who moved outside of their homes were being monitored by different local governments.

Although, it would be difficult for foreigners to agree with mythis ideas.

Do you mean "foreigners would not agree that monitoring them is acceptable?" If so, change this and the sentence above to "I think that most of, if not all, of the Uyghurs who moved outside of their homes should be monitored by local governments. Although, I think it would be difficult for foreigners to agree with my ideas."

A few years later, maybe around 5 years.,

Aall of the Uyghurs had disappeared, and nearly all their lamb kebabs stalls and restaurants were gone.

combine this and the above sentence

Most of us, including me, didn't notice thatit was happening.

Only about two, or three years before the pandemic outbreak in China, at the end of 2019, I was warned to caretold about the Uyghur issues, and I realized I hadn't seen them in my living city and allcity or any of the places I had beenvisited for many years.

This is the second time I found themthey have completely disappeared fromin front of my eyes, t. The first time was only in Shenzhen in 1997, which I wrote about it before.

After the 2014 Kunmin Railway Station Killing eventg attack, which I mentioned in my last entry numbered 5 of this serial writof this series, there were still many places where we could see Uyghur individuals residing in the main streets, selling their lamb skewers for a living.

Wikipedia suggests this title https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/2014_Kunming_attack The key thing to me here is the usage of "event" after the title of the event feels redundant, though.

In many places, we could see Uyghur individuals still residing in the main streets, selling their lamb skewers for a living.

The first sentence wasn't complete so I combined them.

However, the poor Han peddlers of Han people were forced to stay in a secluded situation at a corner far away.

Assuming here the reader knows Han is an ethnicity, it will depend on your audience.

In the initial stage, itially, Uyghur peddlers continued their privilege, they are the higher class in my eyes. Like many other people, I was vehemently dissatisfied with the discriminatory policy.

There needs to be stages to specify an initial stage.

I could judge themtell from their appearance.

A few years later, maybe around 5 years., all the Uyghurs disappeared and with them nearly all their kebabs stalls and restaurants.¶

Combine to make one sentence using a parenthetical.

Most of us, including me, didn't notice that.

Only aboutIt wasn't until two, or three years before the pandemic outbreak in China at the end of 2019,began that I was warned to care about the Uyghur issues,. It was then that I realized I hadn't seen them in my living city and all city (or any of the other places I had been) for many years.

This is the second time I found them completely disappeared from my eyes, the first time was only in Shenzhen in 1997 which I wrote about it before.

After the Kumin Railway Station Killing event, which I mentioned in my last entry, numbered 5 of this serial writing series.

However, the poor peddlers of the Han people were forced to stay in a secluded situation at a corner far away.

In the initial stage, Uyghur peddlers continued to enjoy their privilege, as if they awere thea higher class in my eyes. Like many other people, I was vehemently dissatisfied with the discriminatory policy.

Saying something is "in my eyes" means that it's the opinion of the writer.

"In my eyes, cats are the cutest"

"Even thought I got in trouble, I didn't do anything wrong in my eyes"

So in this sentence is means that the writer believes that Uyghur are actually a higher class. Because the next sentence mentions dissatisfaction, I don't believe that was the intended usage.

As time passed, about a year later, I noticed that there was always at least one Han ethnic person staying with them, male or female.

The "male or female" ending is vague. Is the Han person male or female, or is the Uyghur person male or female? What information is this intended to convey? Would the reader normally expect such a person to only be male, or only be female?

Some possible alternatives:

there was always at least one Han ethnic person staying with them, whether the peddler was male or female.

there was always at least one Han ethnic person, both males and females, staying with them.

I could judgrecognize them from their appearance.

"Judge" carries a negative feeling that I don't think was intended.

"I judged her for eating too many cookies"

"Don't judge a book by its cover" is a common idiom.

I distinctly remember; I once got off to take a break on a long-distance bus traveling to another city to take a break.

In athe small town, I was surprised to see a stall for selling lamb kebabs managed by Uyghurs, also assisted by a Han person.

I guessed probably most of and, or even all of, the Uyghurs who movedwent outside of their home were monitored by different local governments.

"Moved ... home" gives a feeling over a permanent move. So the sentence originally felt like Uyghurs who had moved were monitored. But I think the meaning is that anyone simply outside of their house is monitored.

Although, it would be difficult for foreigners to agree with my ideas.

This sentence feels a bit out of place. So far there hasn't been an opinion or idea that was stated, so there's nothing for readers to agree with.

Maybe this is actually "Although, it would be difficult for foreigners to understand these feelings."

A few years later, maybe around 5 years.,

This is a sentence fragment, and can be combined with the next sentence

Most of us, including me, didn't notice that.

Only about two, or three years before the pandemic outbreak in China at the end of 2019, I was I warned to care about the Uyghur issues,. I realized I hadn't seen them in my living citythe city where I live and all the places I had been for many years.

This is the second time I found them completely disappeared from my eyes, t. The first time was only in Shenzhen in 1997 which I wrote about it before.

"found them completely disappeared" is probably not grammatically correct, but as a native it sounds fine and is in fact very appropriate usage. Using "disappeared" as a verb like that carries a sense of an outside force causing something to disappear. It's also usually performed by something secretive or unknown.

✔ - He was disappeared by the government
✔ - He was made to disappear by the government
X - The cookies were disappeared by the dog
✔ - The cookies had completely disappeared