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Uyghur people have enjoyed privileged policy for decades. For example, they can have more than one child. Meanwhile, the Han ethnic group suffered from the inhumane one-child policy from the mid-1970s to about 2017. In addition, Uyghurs can gain admission to good universities with a comparatively quite low band score, and other benifits.
According to some news revealed, people in the south of Xinjiang (an autonomous region for Uyghurs) are poorer than the other areas of Xinjiang. Some individules in these areas were against the central government and planned to build an Islamic country. They moved to the inland of China with their lamb kebab stalls, and a few of them even wanted to illegally leave for other countries, some of them for economic reasons and some for politics.
On March 1, 2014. A critical and fateful event occurred in Kunming (the capital city of Yunnan province which borders Laos) Railway Station. Several Uyghurs killed 29 local people and more than a hundred were injured. As before, different media outlets have different and even opposite reports about the tragedy, and I do not discuss more about it here. Anyway, the result was many innocent people died at the station.
No one would imagine what this event would bring to the Uyghurs; they will gradually be completely changed after that, including their kebab stalls across China.
Story about Lamb Kebabs (4) - a Fateful Event
The Uyghur people have enjoyed privileged policy for decades, for example, they can have more than one child.
For example, they can have more than one child.
I would also merge these clauses together.
Meanwhile, the Han ethnic group suffered from the inhumane one-child policy from the mid-1970s to about 2017.
Very minor here, but because you're using a specific year as the end of the range it would seem odd to say "about 2017". It's very vague and could mean somewhere between 2016-2018 but without explicitly stating so. If you want to keep it vague then I'd go with "to mid-2010s".
In addition, Uyghurs can gain admission to good universities with a comparatively quite low band score, and other beniefits.
"quite" seems redundant to me, I would drop it.
According to some news revealed,sources, they report that people in the south ofern Xinjiang (an autonomous region for Uyghurs) are poorer than the other areas of Xinjiang.
Some individules in these areas were against the central government and planned to build an Islamic country.
They moved to the China inland of China with their lamb kebab stalls, and a few of them even wanted to illegally leave for other countries, some of them for economic reasons and some for political reasons.
On March 1, 2014.
Aa critical and fateful event occurred in Kunming (the capital city of Yunnan province which borders Laos) Railway Station.
Combine this with the date which it occured.
As before, different media outlets have different and even opposite reports about the tragedy, and I do not discuss more about it here.
AnywaUnfortunately, the result was many innocent people died at the station.
If you want to sound sympathetic towards the victims I would use a different transition here. "Anyways" could be interpreted as being dismissive.
No one would imagineknows what this event wouldill bring to the Uyghurs; they will gradually be completely changed after that, including their kebab stalls across China.
The use of "would" in the first clause is confusing when the following clause uses "will ... be". If the intention of the first clause is to explain that one is not sure what will happen, then I would write it the way my correction has it.
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Story about Lamb Kebabs (4) - a Fateful Event
The Uyghur people have benjoyed privileged policy for decadesefited for decades from a policy that gives them the privilege of having more than one child.
For example, they can have more than one child.
I have merged this sentence with the previous sentence
Meanwhile, the Han ethnic group suffered from the inhumane one-child policy from the mid-1970s to abroutnd 2017.
In addition, Uyghurs can gain admission to good universities with a comparatively quite low band score, and receive other beniefits.
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Some individuales in these areas were against the central government and planned to build an Islamic country.
They moved to the inland of China with their lamb kebab stalls, and a few of them even wanted to illegally leave for other countries, some of them for economic reasons and some for political reasons.
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Uyghur people have enjoyed privileged policy for decades. The Uyghur people have ben The Uyghur people have enjoyed privileged policy for decades, for example, they can have more than one child. |
For example, they can have more than one child.
I have merged this sentence with the previous sentence For example, they can have more than one child. I would also merge these clauses together. |
Meanwhile, the Han ethnic group suffered from the inhumane one-child policy from the mid-1970s to about 2017. Meanwhile, the Han ethnic group suffered from the inhumane one-child policy from the mid-1970s to a Meanwhile, the Han ethnic group suffered from the inhumane one-child policy from the mid-1970s to Very minor here, but because you're using a specific year as the end of the range it would seem odd to say "about 2017". It's very vague and could mean somewhere between 2016-2018 but without explicitly stating so. If you want to keep it vague then I'd go with "to mid-2010s". |
In addition, Uyghurs can gain admission to good universities with a comparatively quite low band score, and other benifits. In addition, Uyghurs can gain admission to good universities with a comparatively In addition, Uyghurs can gain admission to good universities with a comparatively "quite" seems redundant to me, I would drop it. |
According to some news revealed, people in the south of Xinjiang (an autonomous region for Uyghurs) are poorer than the other areas of Xinjiang. According to According to some news |
Some individules in these areas were against the central government and planned to build an Islamic country. Some individual This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
They moved to the inland of China with their lamb kebab stalls, and a few of them even wanted to illegally leave for other countries, some of them for economic reasons and some for politics. They moved to the inland of China with their lamb kebab stalls, and a few of them even wanted to illegally leave for other countries, some of them for economic reasons and some for political reasons. They moved to the China inland |
On March 1, 2014. On March 1, 2014 |
A critical and fateful event occurred in Kunming (the capital city of Yunnan province which borders Laos) Railway Station.
Combine this with the date which it occured. |
Several Uyghurs killed 29 local people and more than a hundred were injured. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
As before, different media outlets have different and even opposite reports about the tragedy, and I do not discuss more about it here.
This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Anyway, the result was many innocent people died at the station. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
If you want to sound sympathetic towards the victims I would use a different transition here. "Anyways" could be interpreted as being dismissive. |
No one would imagine what this event would bring to the Uyghurs; they will gradually be completely changed after that, including their kebab stalls across China. No one No one The use of "would" in the first clause is confusing when the following clause uses "will ... be". If the intention of the first clause is to explain that one is not sure what will happen, then I would write it the way my correction has it. |
Story about Lamb Kebabs (4) - a Fateful Event This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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