Sept. 16, 2022
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There was a blogger on Douyin, his name is Andy. His father is David, who also just recently created his own Douyin channel.
They are American, and lived in China three different times from the early eighties to the early nineties.
When they were in China, David worked at the Shanxi University as an English teacher, and so did his wife.
At that time, Andy was only a teenager. He kept in touch with his Chinese fellows, so now, he can speak Chinese like native Chinese speakers.
David has posted many videos on Douyin. Most of them were about the cultural differences between Westerners and Asians.
I remember two stories. The first one was: one day, another foreign English teacher told David that one student was not being honest. David asked why? The teacher said, "When I talk to him, he doesn't look at my eyes"
The other story was that one day, his wife was doing an English interaction activity with her students.
Suddenly, his wife found a male student standing beside her for a long time and didn’t move, even a little bit, while others moved around. She asked the boy and the boy said, "Sorry, ma’am, your chair is on my foot."
Story
There wa's a blogger on Douyin, his whose name is Andy.
I think this is supposed to be in present tense since Andy still blogs.
His father is David, who also just recently created his own Douyin channel.
They are American, and lived in China three different times from the early eighties to the early nineties.
When they were in China, David worked at the Shanxi University as an English teacher, and sos did his wife.
At that time, Andy was only a teenager.
He kept in touch with his Chinese fellowriends, so now, he can speak Chinese like native Chinese speakers.
David has posted many videos on Douyin.
Most of them weare about the cultural differences between Westerners and Asians.
I remember two stories.
The first one was this: one day, another foreign English teacher told David that one student was not being honest.
David asked w, "Why?"
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David asked why.
The teacher said, "When I talk to him, he doesn't look atinto my eyes"
The other story was that, one day, his wife was doing an English interactionve activity with her students.
Suddenly, his wife found a male student standing beside her for a long time and didn’without moveing, even a little bit, while others moved around.
She asked the boy and the boy said, "Sorry, ma’am, your chair is on my foot."
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Sept. 16, 2022
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The teacher said, "When I talk to him, he doesn't look atinto my eyes"
Sept. 16, 2022
Thank you very much
Story
There wais a blogger on Douyin, his name is Andy.
Tense needs to be the same through the passage
His father is David, who also just recently created his own Douyin channel.
They are American, andbut lived in China three times from the early eighties to the early nighties.
"and" is not wrong grammatically, but it's unexpected because "They are American" contrasts with them living with China. The reader doesn't expect it from the first clause.
Whilen they were in China, David worked at the Shanxi University as an English teacher, and so did his wife.
At that time, Andy was only a teenager.
He kept in touch with his Chinese fellows, so now, he can speak Chinese like native Chinese speakers.
David has posted many videos on Douyin.
Most of them were about the cultural differences between Westerners and Asians.
I remember two stories.
The first one was: one day, another foreign English teacher told David that one student was not being honest.
"was" feels unnatural here. You could use "is" if you want (is instead of was because you still remember the story, it still exists)
David asked "why?"
Because this has a question mark, it's quoting what David said. If it is describing what David said, you could use "David asked why."
The teacher said, "When I talk to him, he doesn't look at my eyes."
The other story was that one day, his wife was doing an English interaction activity with her students.
Suddenly, his wife found a male student standing beside her for a long time andwho didn’t move, even a little bit, while others moved around.
"and" would be right if it was the wife that wasn't moving. But since the student is not moving, who is necessary to refer to the student.
She asked the boy and the boy said, "Sorry, ma’am, your chair is on my foot."
Feedback
Very good, all minor things.
Sept. 16, 2022
Thank you very much.
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A blogger on Douyin, his name is Andy. |
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His father is David, who also started his own Douyin account recently. |
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They are American, and lived in China three times from early eighties to early nighties. |
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When they were in China, David worked at Shanxi University as an English teacher, as did his wife. |
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At that time, Andy was only a teenager. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He kept in touch with his Chinese fellows, so now, he can speak Chinese like native Chinese speakers. He kept in touch with his Chinese fellows, so now He kept in touch with his Chinese f |
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David posted many videos on Douyin. |
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Most of them are about the cultural differences between Westerners and Asians. |
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I remember two stories. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The first one was: one day, another foreign English teacher told David that one student was not honest. |
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David asked why? David asked "why?" Because this has a question mark, it's quoting what David said. If it is describing what David said, you could use "David asked why." David asked or David asked why. |
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The other story was that one day, his wife was doing an interaction activity with her students. |
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Suddenly, his wife found a male student standing beside her for a long time and never moved a little bit while others moved around. |
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The student said, "Sorry, mama, your chair is on my foot." |
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David have posted many videos on Douyin. |
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Most of them was about the cultural differences between Westerners and Asians. |
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There was a blogger on Douyin, his name is Andy. There Tense needs to be the same through the passage There I think this is supposed to be in present tense since Andy still blogs. |
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His father is David, who also just recently created his own Douyin channel. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They are American, and lived in China three times from the early eighties to the early nighties. They are American, "and" is not wrong grammatically, but it's unexpected because "They are American" contrasts with them living with China. The reader doesn't expect it from the first clause. |
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When they were in China, David worked at the Shanxi University as an English teacher, and so did his wife. While When they were in China, David worked at |
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David has posted many videos on Douyin. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Most of them were about the cultural differences between Westerners and Asians. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Most of them |
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The first one was: one day, another foreign English teacher told David that one student was not being honest. The first one "was" feels unnatural here. You could use "is" if you want (is instead of was because you still remember the story, it still exists) The first one was this: one day, another foreign English teacher told David that one student was not being honest. |
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Suddenly, his wife found a male student standing beside her for a long time and didn’t move, even a little bit, while others moved around. Suddenly, his wife found a male student standing beside her for a long time "and" would be right if it was the wife that wasn't moving. But since the student is not moving, who is necessary to refer to the student. Suddenly, his wife found a male student standing beside her for a long time |
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She asked the boy and the boy said, "Sorry, ma’am, your chair is on my foot." This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They are American, and lived in China three times from the early eighties to the early nineties. |
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