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Starlings

Every year there is a natural phenomenon in a park in the German city of Wiesbaden. Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts of the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, gather and set off for the south where they spend the German winter.

It is an interesting show with a small disadvantage. It contradicts with the sense of cleanliness of the people who live close to the park. The city has to clean the children playground every day, which is expensive. That's why the city tried to scare away the starlings by playing sound recordings of birds of prey, hanging balloons with bad faces in the trees, and other ways, but that didn't work. Now there is a city employee in the park who sets of firecrackers whenever the starlings prepare to sit in the tops of the chestnut trees.

Why can't people accept a little nature for a few days? I don't understand it.

Dear starlings, I invite you to rest in my garden. Tell me what you want to eat, I will be at your service. You can fertilize my garden as you wish. When I harvest big strawberries next year, I will think of you.


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Every year there is, a natural phenomenon occurs in a park in the German city of Wiesbaden.

When talking about phenomenons, we usually use the verb "occur".

Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts ofall across the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, then gather and set off for the south where they spend the German winter.

The original sentence was good, but I think rephrasing it this way makes it feel more natural.

Starlings

Every year there is a natural phenomenon in a park in the German city of Wiesbaden.

Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts of the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, gather and set off for the south where they spend the German winter.

'set off for the South' sounds like a destination.

The city has to clean the children playground every day, which is expensive.

That's why the city tried to scare away the starlings by playing sound recordings of birds of prey, hanging balloons with badscary faces in the trees, and other ways, but thatose methods didn't work.

Now there is a city employee in the park who sets off firecrackers whenever the starlings preparetry to sit in the tops of the chestnut trees.

I don't understand it.

Not necessary, just a personal preference to sound more natural

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Excellent writeup!

Starlings

Every year there is a natural phenomenon in a park in the German city of Wiesbaden.

Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts of the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, gatherand then gather again and set off for the south, where they spend the German winter.

Your grammar was fine, but the last phrase is slightly confusing. There are several ways to change it. Likewise, the comma is not required, but really helps to separate the ideas and give the reader more breathing room.

It is an interesting showevent, but with a small disadvantagenegative aspect.

"Show" is typically used for something like a play or theater. "Disadvantage" implies some sort of competition here, as if the people are disadvantaged in contrast to others.

It contradicts withruins the sense of cleanliness of the people who live close to the park.

The city has to clean the children playground every day, which is expensive.

That's why the city tried to scare away the starlings by playing sound recordings of birds of prey, hanging balloons with badscary faces in the trees, and other ways, but that didn'none of it worked.

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Overall very well written with few to no mistakes, just style choices and phrasing that appear awkward or unclear to a native speaker. Nice work!

Starlings


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Every year there is a natural phenomenon in a park in the German city of Wiesbaden.


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Every year there is, a natural phenomenon occurs in a park in the German city of Wiesbaden.

When talking about phenomenons, we usually use the verb "occur".

Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts of the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, gather and set off for the south where they spend the German winter.


Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts of the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, gatherand then gather again and set off for the south, where they spend the German winter.

Your grammar was fine, but the last phrase is slightly confusing. There are several ways to change it. Likewise, the comma is not required, but really helps to separate the ideas and give the reader more breathing room.

Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts of the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, gather and set off for the south where they spend the German winter.

'set off for the South' sounds like a destination.

Three thousand starlings arrive from several parts ofall across the country, rest for a few days in the chestnut trees of the park, then gather and set off for the south where they spend the German winter.

The original sentence was good, but I think rephrasing it this way makes it feel more natural.

It is an interesting show with a small disadvantage.


It is an interesting showevent, but with a small disadvantagenegative aspect.

"Show" is typically used for something like a play or theater. "Disadvantage" implies some sort of competition here, as if the people are disadvantaged in contrast to others.

It contradicts with the sense of cleanliness of the people who live close to the park.


It contradicts withruins the sense of cleanliness of the people who live close to the park.

The city has to clean the children playground every day, which is expensive.


The city has to clean the children playground every day, which is expensive.

The city has to clean the children playground every day, which is expensive.

That's why the city tried to scare away the starlings by playing sound recordings of birds of prey, hanging balloons with bad faces in the trees, and other ways, but that didn't work.


That's why the city tried to scare away the starlings by playing sound recordings of birds of prey, hanging balloons with badscary faces in the trees, and other ways, but that didn'none of it worked.

That's why the city tried to scare away the starlings by playing sound recordings of birds of prey, hanging balloons with badscary faces in the trees, and other ways, but thatose methods didn't work.

Now there is a city employee in the park who sets of firecrackers whenever the starlings prepare to sit in the tops of the chestnut trees.


Now there is a city employee in the park who sets off firecrackers whenever the starlings preparetry to sit in the tops of the chestnut trees.

Why can't people accept a little nature for a few days?


I don't understand it.


I don't understand it.

Not necessary, just a personal preference to sound more natural

Dear starlings, I invite you to rest in my garden.


Tell me what you want to eat, I will be at your service.


You can fertilize my garden as you wish.


When I harvest big strawberries next year, I will think of you.


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