Jan. 23, 2023
One afternoon, a colleague asked me to go together with him to his room. When we went through the aisle of the first floor in the Worker House, some bad smells let me feel uncomfortable, with the lights were not bright enough, and some dirty water with scraps under my feet.
"The cleaner comes here every three days, no way." He said helplessly.
As soon as I get into his dormitory, I was shocked at the gate for a while. I really don't want to write it out here, I don't want foreigners to see today's article. I saw it, however, was a true scene before me in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big toy factory from Hong Kong.
"Fuc*! Why is your room like this? Are you feeling cold at night? " I spoke out angrily.
The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some worst quilts put under the mats, they all on the ground, no bed, a bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling.
He answered with a wry smile:"We are OK, here are about 10 roommates recently, not too cold at night, we warm each other. Anyway, it's cheap, I know your living condition in Staff House is much better." I will never go into their room again, I was scared by the straw mats, they were not Japanese-style tatami, which was similar to the room in some prisons in my mind.
I grew up in the city, I couldn't imagine this could be a real image in my mind unless show me the picture.
My Life in SZ (4)
One afternoon, a colleague asked me to go together with him to his room.
When we went through the aisledown the corridor of the first floor inof the Worker House, some bad smells letmade me feel uncomfortable, with the lights were not bright enough, and some dirty water with scraps under my feet.
When we went down the corridor of the first floor of the Worker House, some bad smells made me feel uncomfortable, with the lights not bright enough and some dirty water with scraps under my feet.
"The cleaner comes here every three days, no way."
He said helplessly.
As soon as I geot into his dormitory, I was shocked at the gate for a while.
As soon as I got into his dormitory, I was shocked at the gate for awhile.
I really don't want to write it out here, because I don't want foreigners to see today's article.
I really don't want to write it out here because I don't want foreigners to see today's article.
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I saw it, however, and it was a true scene before me in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big toy factory from Hong Kong. I saw it, however, and it was a true scene before me in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big toy factory from Hong Kong.
"Fuc*!
Why is your room like this?
Are you feeling cold at night? "
Are you feeling cold at night?"
I spoke out angrily.
The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some worsted (?) quilts put under the mats, t. They were all on the ground, no bed, and a bare bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling.
The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some worsted (?) quilts put under the mats. They were all on the ground, no bed, and a bare bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling.
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The room was filled with three to five big straw mats with some quilts which were in worse shape put under the mats. They were all on the ground, no bed, and a bare bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling.
He answered with a wry smile:, "We are OK, here arewith about 10 roommates recently,lately. It's not too cold at night, because we warm each other.
He answered with a wry smile, "We are OK here with about 10 roommates lately. It's not too cold at night because we warm each other.
Anyway, it's cheap, and I know your living condition ins at the Staff House isare much better."
Anyway, it's cheap and I know your living conditions at the Staff House are much better."
I will never gowent into their room again,. I was scared by the straw mats, t. They were not Japanese-style tatami, which was but were similar to theose in rooms in some prisons in my mind.
I never went into their room again. I was scared by the straw mats. They were not Japanese-style tatami but were similar to those in rooms in some prisons in my mind.
I grew up in the city, so I couldn't imagine that this could be a real image in my mind unless someone showed me thea picture.
I grew up in the city so I couldn't imagine that this could be a real image in my mind unless someone showed me a picture.
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"Fuc*!
Why is your room like this?
AreDon't you feeling cold at night? "
Don't you feel cold at night?"
I spoke out angrily.
I willould never go into their room again,. I was scared by the straw mats, theywhich were not Japanese-style tatami, which wasbut similar to the room in some prisons in my mindmy mental image of some prison rooms.
I would never go into their room again. I was scared by the straw mats, which were not Japanese-style tatami, but similar to my mental image of some prison rooms.
"I would never go into their room again" means you never went into it again. Using "I would" is a narrative device that draws the reader into the moment (the time) of the story.
"I will" means now (today) you don't plan to go in again.
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I won't mark the other sentences since I agree with gingerbreadwoman's corrections and comments.
One afternoon, a colleague asked me to go together with him to his room.
One afternoon, a colleague asked me to go with him to his room.
When we went through the aislehallway of the first floor in the Worker House, some bad smells letmade me feel uncomfortable, with the lights were not bright enough, and there was some dirty water with scraps under my feet.
When we went through the hallway of the first floor in the Worker House, some bad smells made me feel uncomfortable, the lights were not bright enough, and there was some dirty water with scraps under my feet.
"scraps" is unclear. Scraps of what? Maybe you mean garbage, debris, food, crumbs, something else.
"The cleaner comes here every three days, no way.,"
"The cleaner comes every three days, no way,"
Not sure what you mean to say here, especially with the "no way" at the end. Maybe you mean "There is no way that the cleaner actually comes every three days as he's supposed to" or "The cleaner only comes every three days" or Can you believe that the cleaner only comes every three days?"
Hhe said helplessly.
he said helplessly.
This is part of the previous sentence.
As soon as I geot into his dormitory, I was room, I stood shocked at the gatentrance for a while.
As soon as I got to his dormitory room, I stood shocked at the entrance for a while.
What I saw it, however, was a true scene before me in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big Hong Kong toy factory from Hong Kong.
What I saw, however, was a true scene in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big Hong Kong toy factory.
Are you feeling cold at night? "
Are you feeling cold at night?"
The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some worstbad quilts put under the mats, they were all on the ground, no bed, a bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling.
The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some bad quilts put under the mats, they were all on the ground, no bed, a bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling.
He answered with a wry smile:, "We are OK, there are about 10 roommates recat the momently, not too cold at night, we warm each other.
He answered with a wry smile, "We are OK, there are about 10 roommates at the moment, not too cold at night, we warm each other.
Anyway, it's cheap, I know your living conditions in the Staff House isare much better."
Anyway, it's cheap, I know your living conditions in the Staff House are much better."
"Living conditions" is usually plural.
I will never go into their room again, I was scared by the straw mats, theywhich were not Japanese-style tatami, which wasbut similar to the room in some prisons in my mindmy mental image of some prison rooms.
I will never go into their room again, I was scared by the straw mats, which were not Japanese-style tatami, but similar to my mental image of some prison rooms.
I grew up in the city, I c and wouldn't imagine this could be a real image in my mind unless show me thehave been able to imagine this was true without being shown a picture.
I grew up in the city and wouldn't have been able to imagine this was true without being shown a picture.
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One afternoon, a colleague asked me to go together with him to his room.
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When we went through the aisle of the first floor in the Worker House, some bad smells let me feel uncomfortable, with the lights were not bright enough, and some dirty water with scraps under my feet.
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"The cleaner comes here every three days, no way."
"The cleaner comes Not sure what you mean to say here, especially with the "no way" at the end. Maybe you mean "There is no way that the cleaner actually comes every three days as he's supposed to" or "The cleaner only comes every three days" or Can you believe that the cleaner only comes every three days?" This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He said helplessly.
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As soon as I get into his dormitory, I was shocked at the gate for a while.
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I really don't want to write it out here, I don't want foreigners to see today's article.
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I saw it, however, was a true scene before me in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big toy factory from Hong Kong.
What I saw I saw it, however, and it was a true scene before me in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big toy factory from Hong Kong. I saw it, however, and it was a true scene before me in 1996 in a workers' dormitory in a big toy factory from Hong Kong. |
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Why is your room like this? This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Are you feeling cold at night? "
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I spoke out angrily. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some worst quilts put under the mats, they all on the ground, no bed, a bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling.
The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some
The room was filled with three to five big straw mats, some worsted (?) quilts put under the mats また、 The room was filled with three to five big straw mats with some quilts which were in worse shape put under the mats. They were all on the ground, no bed, and a bare bulb hanging down from the center of the ceiling. |
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He answered with a wry smile:"We are OK, here are about 10 roommates recently, not too cold at night, we warm each other.
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Anyway, it's cheap, I know your living condition in Staff House is much better."
Anyway, it's cheap, I know your living conditions in the Staff House "Living conditions" is usually plural.
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I will never go into their room again, I was scared by the straw mats, they were not Japanese-style tatami, which was similar to the room in some prisons in my mind.
I will never go into their room again, I was scared by the straw mats,
I w "I would never go into their room again" means you never went into it again. Using "I would" is a narrative device that draws the reader into the moment (the time) of the story. "I will" means now (today) you don't plan to go in again.
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I grew up in the city, I couldn't imagine this could be a real image in my mind unless show me the picture.
I grew up in the city
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