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Recently, a netizen released a short video. It is very short, but it made many people cry. In the video, a dirty old man took out two yuan from his pocket, bought a bottle of liquor, and then left with happy smiles. The man who shot the video said that the old man had just unloaded 10 tons of cement, and you can probably see that from the cloth on his body. The old man stood in front of the counter, several times, he took out two bank notes from his deep trouser pocket-he wanted to buy a bottle of liquor. When the waiter took out a small bottle of liquor for him, the old man smiled happily, while the netizens were in tears. Some people say that they have seen that it’s not easy to be old men at the bottom in the countryside, some say that they have seen simplicity and hard work, and others say that they have seen their fathers.

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The old man stood in front of the counter, several times, h. He took out two bank notes from his deep trouser pocket-he wanted to buypocket and then put them back. He repeated this several times and then he bought a bottle of liquor.

In a previous sentence, you wrote that he left the liquor store with a smile, but now he is back? This is rather confusing. Try to tell your story in a chronological manner. If you still want to describe what is happening in the store, then don't write that he already left. Also, you are repeating the story. We already know that he bought liquor with the bank notes.

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When the waiter took out a small bottle of liquor for him, the old man smiled happily, while the netizens were in tears.ch made the viewers cry.

Again, we already knew that the old man was happy. Also, why would the viewers cry from seeing someone buying alcohol?

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Some peopleviewers sayid that they have seenis video reminded them that it’s not easy to be old men at the bottom in the countryside, some say that they have seen, impoverished and live in the countryside. While others say that the old man represented simplicity and hard work, and others. Some even sayid that they have seen old man reminds them of their own fathers.

Sometime it is difficult to decide whether a noun should be plural or singular. You chose to use "fathers", because if multiple people are talking about their father, then there must be more than one father, so your logic is spot on. However, an English speaking person would interpret that each of these viewers have multiple fathers, such as a biological father, a step-father, a father-in-law, etc. If each person only has one father, then you must use the singular word.

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Some people say that they have seen thatPeople commended him as it’s not easy to befor old men at the bottom inof the countryside, s. Some say that they have seen simplicityviewers see his humbleness and hard work, andwhile others say that they have seenee their fathers in him.

simplicity 一般不用来形容人。叫一个人simple是在叫他傻哈哈哈

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The man who shot the video saiexplained that the old man had just unloaded 10 tons of cement, and which you can probably see thatinfer from thehis cloth on his bodyes.

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Recently, a netizen released a short video.


Recently, a netizen released a short video that made people cry. Recently, a netizen released a short video that made people cry.

Recently, a netizensomeone released a short video online, which made many people cry. Recently, someone released a short video online, which made many people cry.

I notice that you use the word "netizen" a lot. It is not a word we use very often, because these days, we are all netizens. t

It is very short, but it made many people cry.


It is very short, but it made many people cry.

It is very short, but it made many people cry.

I combined the two sentences.

In the video, a dirty old man took out two yuan from his pocket, bought a bottle of liquor, and then left with happy smiles.


In the video, a dirty old man took out two yuan from his pocket, bought a bottle of liquor, and then left with a happy smiles. In the video, a dirty old man took out two yuan from his pocket, bought a bottle of liquor, and left with a happy smile.

In the video, a dirtysheveled old man took out two yuans from his pocket, bought a bottle of liquor, and then left with a happy smiles. In the video, a disheveled old man took out two yuans from his pocket, bought a bottle of liquor, and then left with a happy smile.

The phrase "a dirty old man" in English means that this man is a pervert (someone is that sexually deviant). I think what you meant to say is that this man has not bathed or showered, correct? Try to remember calling someone a dirty old man is a great insult. Also, smile is usually singular when used as a noun.

The man who shot the video said that the old man had just unloaded 10 tons of cement, and you can probably see that from the cloth on his body.


The man who shot the video saiexplained that the old man had just unloaded 10 tons of cement, and which you can probably see thatinfer from thehis cloth on his bodyes. The man who shot the video explained that the old man had just unloaded 10 tons of cement which you can infer from his clothes.

The man who shot the video said that the old man had just unloaded 10 tons of cement, and you can probably see that. This is not surprising judging from thehis cloth on his bodyes. The man who shot the video said that the old man had just unloaded 10 tons of cement. This is not surprising judging from his clothes.

"Cloth" means a single sheet of material or fabric. "Clothes" means what you wear to cover your body.

The old man stood in front of the counter, several times, he took out two bank notes from his deep trouser pocket-he wanted to buy a bottle of liquor.


The old man stood in front of the counter, several times, he and took out two bank notes from his deep trouser pocket-he wanted to buy a bottle of liquors-indicating that he wanted to buy some alcohol. The old man stood in front of the counter and took out two bank notes from his deep trouser pockets-indicating that he wanted to buy some alcohol.

用liquor的地方很多,其实没错!反复用同样的词只是读起来有点别扭。

The old man stood in front of the counter, several times, h. He took out two bank notes from his deep trouser pocket-he wanted to buypocket and then put them back. He repeated this several times and then he bought a bottle of liquor. The old man stood in front of the counter. He took out two bank notes from his pocket and then put them back. He repeated this several times and then he bought a bottle of liquor.

In a previous sentence, you wrote that he left the liquor store with a smile, but now he is back? This is rather confusing. Try to tell your story in a chronological manner. If you still want to describe what is happening in the store, then don't write that he already left. Also, you are repeating the story. We already know that he bought liquor with the bank notes.

When the waiter took out a small bottle of liquor for him, the old man smiled happily, while the netizens were in tears.


When the waiter took out a small bottle of liquor for him, the old man smiled happily, whileleaving the netizens were in tears. When the waiter took out a small bottle of liquor for him, the old man smiled happily, leaving the netizens in tears.

When the waiter took out a small bottle of liquor for him, the old man smiled happily, while the netizens were in tears.ch made the viewers cry. When the waiter took out a small bottle for him, the old man smiled happily, which made the viewers cry.

Again, we already knew that the old man was happy. Also, why would the viewers cry from seeing someone buying alcohol?

Some people say that they have seen that it’s not easy to be old men at the bottom in the countryside, some say that they have seen simplicity and hard work, and others say that they have seen their fathers.


Some people say that they have seen thatPeople commended him as it’s not easy to befor old men at the bottom inof the countryside, s. Some say that they have seen simplicityviewers see his humbleness and hard work, andwhile others say that they have seenee their fathers in him. People commended him as it’s not easy for old men at the bottom of the countryside. Some viewers see his humbleness and hard work, while others see their fathers in him.

simplicity 一般不用来形容人。叫一个人simple是在叫他傻哈哈哈

Some peopleviewers sayid that they have seenis video reminded them that it’s not easy to be old men at the bottom in the countryside, some say that they have seen, impoverished and live in the countryside. While others say that the old man represented simplicity and hard work, and others. Some even sayid that they have seen old man reminds them of their own fathers. Some viewers said that this video reminded them that it’s not easy to be old, impoverished and live in the countryside. While others say that the old man represented simplicity and hard work. Some even said that the old man reminds them of their own father.

Sometime it is difficult to decide whether a noun should be plural or singular. You chose to use "fathers", because if multiple people are talking about their father, then there must be more than one father, so your logic is spot on. However, an English speaking person would interpret that each of these viewers have multiple fathers, such as a biological father, a step-father, a father-in-law, etc. If each person only has one father, then you must use the singular word.

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