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Sept. 2, 2020

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Someone urinated in front of my house (need your suggestion)

[ I know I type too long. you don't need to make corrections if you want. Here, I need a suggestion from everyone to teach me how to deal with that. thank you]
Today, it is a worse day for me. Someone urinated in front of my house. Since I drove back home and opened the Garage Door, I can smell an unpleasant smell. And after I parked my car and took a look. There is a dislike pee, at the corner which closes my garage door, to flow through my garage door into my indoor sewerage. I checked my security camera. I was angry that the camera doesn't record the jerk who urinated.
I called the consumers' service of Arlo, which is the brand of the camera. I provided screenshots as evidence and pointed out all the details. The only thing they reply to me is an apology. Additionally, the service just suggested I adjust the Motion Sensitivity of the camera. To save the battery, I set the Motion Sensitivity of the camera to 80, which belongs to high I think. By the way, my camera is perfect. The camera can directly shoot the corner where the jerk urinated. And the distance between the corner and the camera just had 13fts. I am not blaming the service people. In fact, they had a good service for me, and the words were softer. But be honest, the camera sucks. Don't buy an Arlo camera, they are worthless.
After the call with Arlo's service, I called 911. But that is unpleasant talking about 2mins. My language is not good. But I'm sure my emotions and words aren't aggressive. I tried to be nice to describe my situation to the police in the call during that time. I know I don't have a record. So I called 911 to ask how I can deal with that next time.
But the police attitude made me feel uncomfortable. He sounds like he doesn't have any patience and with an unpleasant voice to ask me the question. The conclusion I got is, I can't do anything. And it seems my call is wasting his time, that is what kind of feel he had given me. Woo ~ this is my first time calling 911 to seek help. I had gotten this kind of treatment from American police. FFFFFF.
I entirely understand why the Chinese always ironically said "American style freedom". Even then I dislike the Chinese Communist Party ( CCP) for building an intertwined security network, Sky Eye, but after this experience, I root for the CCP's astute decision. At least, I think the Sky Eye enables me to help me catch the jerk. In American, it costs 500 dollars to buy a camera and reward nothing. And the Chinese police won't treat me like that.
Finally, I don't very angry about the jerk for now. The point I write this experience down to show how I am so disappointed with American police and the quality of the Arlo camera.

Corrections

Someone urinated in front of my house (need your suggestion)

[ I know I type tood a longt.

yYou don't need to make corrections if you don't want to.

Alternatively: "You don't need to make corrections."

Here, I need a suggestions from everyone to teach meabout how to deal with thatis.

thank you]

Today, it is a worsterrible day for me.

"Worse" would only used in comparison to another day, so it doesn't make sense here.

Someone urinated in front of my house.

SEver since I drove back home and opened the Ggarage Ddoor, I canould smell an unpleasant smell.

"Since" on its own indicates you are giving a reason for something, but you want "Ever since" because it means after a certain time period (in this case after you drove back home).

And after I parked my car andI took a look.

There is a dislike pee, aAt the corner which closesere my garage door, to closes, there was pee flowing through my garage door and into my indoor sewerage.

I am not confident in this correction because I am not entirely sure what you are trying to say.

I checked my security camera.

I was angry that the camera doesidn't record the jerk who urinated.

I called the consuArlo's customers' service of Arlo, which is the brand of the camera.

"consumers' service" makes sense but usually in English we refer to it as "customer service"

I provided screenshots as evidence and pointed out all the details.

The only thing they reply to me iied with was an apology.

Additionally, the service justy suggested I adjust the Mmotion Ssensitivity of the camera.

To save the battery, I set the Mmotion Ssensitivity of the camera to 80, which belongs toI think is a high I thsettinkg.

By the way, my camera is perfect.

The camera can directly shootfilm the corner where the jerk urinated.

And tThe distance between the corner and the camera just had 13ftswas only 13 feet.

I am not blaming the customer service people.

In fact, they had agave me good service for me, and their words were softerkind.

But to be honest, the camera sucks.

Don't buy an Arlo camera, as they are worthless.

After the callalking with Arlo's customer service, I called 911.

But that iIt was unpleasant talking aboutwith the police for 2 minutes.

My correction is if the call was unpleasant. If you meant talking about the call after the fact then it would be "It is unpleasant talking about those 2 minutes."

My languagespoken English is not good.

This way is more specific, since "language" by itself is very vague even if I know what you mean.

But I'm sure my emotions and words aweren't aggressive.

"weren't" fits better since it is within the context of the call with the police.

I tried to be nice toand describe my situation to the police in the call during that time.

"in the call during that time." is unnecessary since you have already written that you were on a call with the police.

I know I don't have any recorded evidence.

I think you are trying to refer to not having any video evidence of the perpetrator. The reason this could be confusing is that often in regards to speaking to the police people might say: "I know I don't have a criminal record." (they have not committed any crimes). I don't think this is what you mean but it might be misunderstood this way.

So I called 911 to ask how I can deal with thatis next time.

But the police officer's attitude made me feel uncomfortable.

He sounds like he doesn't have any patience and with an unpleasant voice to ask me the questioned impatient and asked me questions in an unpleasant voice.

The conclusion I got is,was: I can't do anything.

And iIt seems my call iwas wasting his time, that is what is the kind of feeling he had given megave off.

Woo ~ this iwas my first time calling 911 to seek help.

I couldn't believe I had gotten this kind of treatment from American police.

This sentence is somewhat confusing on its own. In context, I think you are expressing surprise at this treatment by the police. However, this sentence on its own is read as showing you had gotten this kind of treatment before.

FFFFFF.

I entirely understand why the Chinese always ironically said: "American style freedom".

Even thenough I disliked the Chinese Communist Party ( CCP) for building an intertwined security network, Sky Eye, but after this experience, I root for the CCP's astute decision.

I might also rewrite it as: "In the past, I disliked the Chinese Communist Party (CCP) for building an intertwined security network, Sky Eye. But after this experience, I root for the CCP's astute decision."

At least, I think the Sky Eye would enables me to help me catch the jerk.

In American, it costs 500 dollars to buy a camera andfor no reward nothing.

And tThe Chinese police wouldn't treat me like that.

Finally, I don't feel very angry about the jerk for now.

The point I wriote this experience down to show how I am somy disappointedment with American police and the quality of the Arlo camera.

Feedback

Sorry to hear you had such a rough day and bad experience with the police. American Police vary wildly depending on what town you live in and are also (I presume) less centralized/streamlined than China's system. Police in America also have systemic issues regarding race, so I would guess the officer likely wrote you off because of your English. Personally I don't like the omnipresent nature of China's security network, but I agree it probably would have a higher chance of catching this person. Every policy comes with its pros and cons. I hope you have a better day tomorrow.

In regards to my corrections, I did my best, but your entry was quite long so I might have made some mistakes.

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SanHang

Sept. 2, 2020

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thank your corrections. I was not expecting someone will make the correction because the article is pretty long and words are negative. And the topic may be unpleasant. It is hard to expect someone who will help me fix the sentence one by one. But you did. THANK YOU :D

I understand the polices, in the current time, suffer much press from protests and impeachment of Violent law enforcement. But it is not an excuse, making a bad attitude with their taxpayer. I pay the tax on time, but the reward is this kind of treatment. that is totally unfair. I just ask questions. Won't take much time. The police take a lesson to me: American police is sucks and undependable."
Over the afternoon, I just think that if I don't have an accent and speaking English, the situation will be changed.

finally, THANK THANK THANK YOUR CORRECTIONS OFTENLY. IT IS VERY HELPFUL.

But the police attitude made me feel uncomfortable.


But the police officer's attitude made me feel uncomfortable.

Someone urinated in front of my house (need your suggestion)


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

[ I know I type too long.


[ I know I type tood a longt.

you don't need to make corrections if you want.


yYou don't need to make corrections if you don't want to.

Alternatively: "You don't need to make corrections."

Here, I need a suggestion from everyone to teach me how to deal with that.


Here, I need a suggestions from everyone to teach meabout how to deal with thatis.

thank you]


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Today, it is a worse day for me.


Today, it is a worsterrible day for me.

"Worse" would only used in comparison to another day, so it doesn't make sense here.

Someone urinated in front of my house.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Since I drove back home and opened the Garage Door, I can smell an unpleasant smell.


SEver since I drove back home and opened the Ggarage Ddoor, I canould smell an unpleasant smell.

"Since" on its own indicates you are giving a reason for something, but you want "Ever since" because it means after a certain time period (in this case after you drove back home).

And after I parked my car and took a look.


And after I parked my car andI took a look.

There is a dislike pee, at the corner which closes my garage door, to flow through my garage door into my indoor sewerage.


There is a dislike pee, aAt the corner which closesere my garage door, to closes, there was pee flowing through my garage door and into my indoor sewerage.

I am not confident in this correction because I am not entirely sure what you are trying to say.

I checked my security camera.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I was angry that the camera doesn't record the jerk who urinated.


I was angry that the camera doesidn't record the jerk who urinated.

I called the consumers' service of Arlo, which is the brand of the camera.


I called the consuArlo's customers' service of Arlo, which is the brand of the camera.

"consumers' service" makes sense but usually in English we refer to it as "customer service"

I provided screenshots as evidence and pointed out all the details.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The only thing they reply to me is an apology.


The only thing they reply to me iied with was an apology.

Additionally, the service just suggested I adjust the Motion Sensitivity of the camera.


Additionally, the service justy suggested I adjust the Mmotion Ssensitivity of the camera.

To save the battery, I set the Motion Sensitivity of the camera to 80, which belongs to high I think.


To save the battery, I set the Mmotion Ssensitivity of the camera to 80, which belongs toI think is a high I thsettinkg.

By the way, my camera is perfect.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The camera can directly shoot the corner where the jerk urinated.


The camera can directly shootfilm the corner where the jerk urinated.

And the distance between the corner and the camera just had 13fts.


And tThe distance between the corner and the camera just had 13ftswas only 13 feet.

I am not blaming the service people.


I am not blaming the customer service people.

In fact, they had a good service for me, and the words were softer.


In fact, they had agave me good service for me, and their words were softerkind.

But be honest, the camera sucks.


But to be honest, the camera sucks.

Don't buy an Arlo camera, they are worthless.


Don't buy an Arlo camera, as they are worthless.

After the call with Arlo's service, I called 911.


After the callalking with Arlo's customer service, I called 911.

But that is unpleasant talking about 2mins.


But that iIt was unpleasant talking aboutwith the police for 2 minutes.

My correction is if the call was unpleasant. If you meant talking about the call after the fact then it would be "It is unpleasant talking about those 2 minutes."

My language is not good.


My languagespoken English is not good.

This way is more specific, since "language" by itself is very vague even if I know what you mean.

But I'm sure my emotions and words aren't aggressive.


But I'm sure my emotions and words aweren't aggressive.

"weren't" fits better since it is within the context of the call with the police.

I tried to be nice to describe my situation to the police in the call during that time.


I tried to be nice toand describe my situation to the police in the call during that time.

"in the call during that time." is unnecessary since you have already written that you were on a call with the police.

I know I don't have a record.


I know I don't have any recorded evidence.

I think you are trying to refer to not having any video evidence of the perpetrator. The reason this could be confusing is that often in regards to speaking to the police people might say: "I know I don't have a criminal record." (they have not committed any crimes). I don't think this is what you mean but it might be misunderstood this way.

So I called 911 to ask how I can deal with that next time.


So I called 911 to ask how I can deal with thatis next time.

He sounds like he doesn't have any patience and with an unpleasant voice to ask me the question.


He sounds like he doesn't have any patience and with an unpleasant voice to ask me the questioned impatient and asked me questions in an unpleasant voice.

The conclusion I got is, I can't do anything.


The conclusion I got is,was: I can't do anything.

And it seems my call is wasting his time, that is what kind of feel he had given me.


And iIt seems my call iwas wasting his time, that is what is the kind of feeling he had given megave off.

Woo ~ this is my first time calling 911 to seek help.


Woo ~ this iwas my first time calling 911 to seek help.

I had gotten this kind of treatment from American police.


I couldn't believe I had gotten this kind of treatment from American police.

This sentence is somewhat confusing on its own. In context, I think you are expressing surprise at this treatment by the police. However, this sentence on its own is read as showing you had gotten this kind of treatment before.

FFFFFF.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I entirely understand why the Chinese always ironically said "American style freedom".


I entirely understand why the Chinese always ironically said: "American style freedom".

Even then I dislike the Chinese Communist Party ( CCP) for building an intertwined security network, Sky Eye, but after this experience, I root for the CCP's astute decision.


Even thenough I disliked the Chinese Communist Party ( CCP) for building an intertwined security network, Sky Eye, but after this experience, I root for the CCP's astute decision.

I might also rewrite it as: "In the past, I disliked the Chinese Communist Party (CCP) for building an intertwined security network, Sky Eye. But after this experience, I root for the CCP's astute decision."

At least, I think the Sky Eye enables me to help me catch the jerk.


At least, I think the Sky Eye would enables me to help me catch the jerk.

In American, it costs 500 dollars to buy a camera and reward nothing.


In American, it costs 500 dollars to buy a camera andfor no reward nothing.

And the Chinese police won't treat me like that.


And tThe Chinese police wouldn't treat me like that.

Finally, I don't very angry about the jerk for now.


Finally, I don't feel very angry about the jerk for now.

The point I write this experience down to show how I am so disappointed with American police and the quality of the Arlo camera.


The point I wriote this experience down to show how I am somy disappointedment with American police and the quality of the Arlo camera.

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