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mikaduki2416

Nov. 15, 2024

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someone in my head

It's been months since the last time I was here. Let me share something on my mind.

What should I do if I have a silly, private thought that I want to share? Do you have anyone nearby that you can have a chat with?
I don't believe I have anyone like that.
It's been stuck in my head and makes it hard to focus on anything.
In short, I think I have a crush that I've never met in person... It's a once-in-a-blue-moon for me.

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sSomeone iIn mMy hHead

This is a topic sentence, so all the first letters of the words (except articles like a/an) are to be written in the capital letter.

What should I do if I have a silly, private thought that I want to share?

Do you have anyone nearby that you can have a chat with?

I don't believe I have anyone like that.

It's been stuck in my head and makes it hard to focus on anything.

In short, I think I have a crush that I've never met in person...

It's a once-in-a-blue-moon for me.

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Wow

It's been months since the last time I was here.

Let me share something that's on my mind.

What should I do if I have a silly, private thought that I want to share?

Do you have anyone nearby that you can have a chat with?

I don't believe I have anyone like that.

It's been stuck in my head and makes it hard to focus on anything.

In short, I think I have a crush on someone that I've never met in person...

It's a once-in-a-blue-moon thing for me.

Or:
This kind of thing never happens to me.

This has never happened to me before.

I've never felt this way before.

I've never developed a crush in this way before.

sSomeone Is in mMy hHead / Someone Is on My Mind

Let me share something that’s on my mind.

What should I do if I have a silly, private thought that I want to share?

It would make more sense to have the “I” here be “you.” Since this question feels related to the next question. Ie “what do you do if… Do you have anyone…”

Once you’ve posed these questions to the reader, you then can introduce that you do not have anyone.

Do you have anyone nearby that you can (have a) chat with?

It's / this idea has / this thought has been stuck in my head and makes it hard to focus on anything.

The “it” here is unclear what it refers back to. Especially if you change the “I” to “you” as recommended.

In short, I think I have a crush thaton someone who I've never met in person...

Generally refer to people with “who/whom” depending on the context. “That” or “which” is for things or animals.

It's a once-in-a-blue-moon feeling / opportunity / romance for me.

“Once-in-a-blue-moon” is a compound adjective, so you need a noun for it to modify.

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mikaduki2416

Nov. 15, 2024

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thanks for the detailed explanation! I appreciate all your comments. it helps a lot. ✨

someone in my head


sSomeone Is in mMy hHead / Someone Is on My Mind

sSomeone iIn mMy hHead

This is a topic sentence, so all the first letters of the words (except articles like a/an) are to be written in the capital letter.

It's been months since the last time I was here.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Let me share something on my mind.


Let me share something that’s on my mind.

Let me share something that's on my mind.

What should I do if I have a silly, private thought that I want to share?


What should I do if I have a silly, private thought that I want to share?

It would make more sense to have the “I” here be “you.” Since this question feels related to the next question. Ie “what do you do if… Do you have anyone…” Once you’ve posed these questions to the reader, you then can introduce that you do not have anyone.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

What should I do if I have a silly, private thought that I want to share?

Do you have anyone nearby that you can have a chat with?


Do you have anyone nearby that you can (have a) chat with?

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I don't believe I have anyone like that.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It's been stuck in my head and makes it hard to focus on anything.


It's / this idea has / this thought has been stuck in my head and makes it hard to focus on anything.

The “it” here is unclear what it refers back to. Especially if you change the “I” to “you” as recommended.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

In short, I think I have a crush that I've never met in person...


In short, I think I have a crush thaton someone who I've never met in person...

Generally refer to people with “who/whom” depending on the context. “That” or “which” is for things or animals.

In short, I think I have a crush on someone that I've never met in person...

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It's a once-in-a-blue-moon for me.


It's a once-in-a-blue-moon feeling / opportunity / romance for me.

“Once-in-a-blue-moon” is a compound adjective, so you need a noun for it to modify.

It's a once-in-a-blue-moon thing for me.

Or: This kind of thing never happens to me. This has never happened to me before. I've never felt this way before. I've never developed a crush in this way before.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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