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meanbowler

July 21, 2020

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Some parts of my cover letter!

Therefore, I am taking this opportunity to submit my application to be part of DLR.
With the combination of my engineering education and research experience, in addition to my work experience, I believe that I have the necessary prerequisites to work at the Institute of Transportation Systems.

After high school, I got a scholarship to obtain my bachelor’s degree in Civil Engineering from Jaipur, India. During my bachelor's, my thesis was about the strengthening of flexible road pavements, in which we used the Benkelman Beam Test to measure the rebound deflection of pavement under a standard wheel load.

( These are some parts of my letter and it would be really nice if you checked their grammar. Thanks!)

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Therefore, I am taking this opportunity to submit my application to be a part of DLR.

After high school, I got a scholarship to obtain my bachelor’s degree in Civil Engineering fromin Jaipur, India.

"From" would be used if you're referring to the specific university you got your degree from.

During my bachelor's, mMy thesis was about the strengthening of flexible road pavements, in which we used the Benkelman Beam Test to measure the rebound deflection of pavement under a standard wheel load.

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meanbowler

July 22, 2020

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A million thanks for the correction and stay safe!

Therefore, I am taking this opportunity to submit my application to be a part of DLR.

With the combination of my engineering education and, research experience, in addition to myand work experience, I believe that I have the necessary prerequisites to work at the Institute of Transportation Systems.

I think the in addition to came off slightly awkward, but not incorrect.

Verify you have the name of the institution right, I can't check that. :)

After high school, I gotrecieved a scholarship to obtain my bachelor’s degree in Civil Engineering from Jaipur, India.

Got is correct, it just comes across as slightly informal/uneducated.

During my bachelor's, my thesis was about the strengthening of flexible road pavements, in which we used the Benkelman Beam Test to measure the rebound deflection of pavement under a standard wheel load.

I don't have the technical knowledge to know if it should be
flexible road pavements
or
flexible road pavement

( These are some parts of my letter and it would be really nice if you checked their grammar. Thanks!)

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meanbowler

July 22, 2020

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Thanks a lot for the correction! be safe!

Some parts of my cover letter!


Therefore, I am taking this opportunity to submit my application to be part of DLR.


Therefore, I am taking this opportunity to submit my application to be a part of DLR.

Therefore, I am taking this opportunity to submit my application to be a part of DLR.

With the combination of my engineering education and research experience, in addition to my work experience, I believe that I have the necessary prerequisites to work at the Institute of Transportation Systems.


With the combination of my engineering education and, research experience, in addition to myand work experience, I believe that I have the necessary prerequisites to work at the Institute of Transportation Systems.

I think the in addition to came off slightly awkward, but not incorrect. Verify you have the name of the institution right, I can't check that. :)

After high school, I got a scholarship to obtain my bachelor’s degree in Civil Engineering from Jaipur, India.


After high school, I gotrecieved a scholarship to obtain my bachelor’s degree in Civil Engineering from Jaipur, India.

Got is correct, it just comes across as slightly informal/uneducated.

After high school, I got a scholarship to obtain my bachelor’s degree in Civil Engineering fromin Jaipur, India.

"From" would be used if you're referring to the specific university you got your degree from.

During my bachelor's, my thesis was about the strengthening of flexible road pavements, in which we used the Benkelman Beam Test to measure the rebound deflection of pavement under a standard wheel load.


During my bachelor's, my thesis was about the strengthening of flexible road pavements, in which we used the Benkelman Beam Test to measure the rebound deflection of pavement under a standard wheel load.

I don't have the technical knowledge to know if it should be flexible road pavements or flexible road pavement

During my bachelor's, mMy thesis was about the strengthening of flexible road pavements, in which we used the Benkelman Beam Test to measure the rebound deflection of pavement under a standard wheel load.

( These are some parts of my letter and it would be really nice if you checked their grammar. Thanks!)


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