June 29, 2025
Society's Effect on Individuals
Effect of Society over individuals , not staying only limited to visible rules and bans, shaping individuals tihnking world, deepens internalized value judgements and norms even most of the time we are not aware of.
Especially, the speed forced by modern city life , the life style focused on produvtivity and competition makes person move away from touch with his own self , most of tihe time turn person into performance being who forgot who he is .
This transformation , not only stay with reducing individuals emotional, mental and even physical awareness, at the same time makes it invisible of basci human needs like meaining and internal peace .
Therefore, indivudual reknow and getting closer to himself , not only personal healing process at the same time plays an critical role in rebuilding of socıeatal structure.
Toplumun birey üzerindeki etkisi, sadece görünür kurallar ve yasaklarla sınırlı kalmayıp, bireyin düşünce dünyasını şekillendiren, çoğu zaman farkında bile olmadan içselleştirdiği değer yargıları ve normlarla da derinleşir.
Özellikle modern kent yaşamının dayattığı hız, verimlilik ve rekabet odaklı yaşam biçimi, insanı kendi benliğiyle temas etmekten uzaklaştırırken, onu çoğunlukla kim olduğunu unutmuş bir “performans varlığı”na dönüştürür.
Bu dönüşüm, kişinin duygusal, zihinsel ve hatta bedensel farkındalığını azaltmakla kalmaz; aynı zamanda aidiyet, anlam ve iç huzur gibi temel insani ihtiyaçları da görünmez kılar.
Dolayısıyla, bireyin kendini yeniden tanıması ve özüne yaklaşması, sadece kişisel bir iyileşme süreci değil, aynı zamanda toplumsal yapının yeniden inşasında da kritik bir rol oynar.
Effect of Society over individuals , not staying only limited to visible rules and bans, shaping individuals' tihinking world, deepens internalized value judgements and norms even if most of the time we are not aware of it.
Especially, the speed forced by modern city life , the life style focused on produvctivity and competition , makes a person move away fromout of touch with histheir own self ,. And most of tihe time, turns a person into a performanceing being who forgot who the is y are.
I recommend changing "his" to "their" because the "person" you mentioned earlier in the sentence was not given a gender.
This transformation , not only stay withkeep reducing individuals' emotional, mental, and even physical awareness, at the same time makes it invisible of bascic human needs like meaining and internal peace .
Therefore, for an indivuidual reto once again know and getting closer to hithemself , notves, and not have only a personal healing process at the same time plays an critical role in the rebuilding of socıeaietal structure.
Society's Effect on Individuals
Effect of Society over individuals , not staying only limited to visible rules and bans, shaping individuals tihinking world, deepens internalized value judgements and norms even most of the time we are not aware of.
The effect of society over individuals is not only limited to visible rules and bans, but also shapes individuals' mindsets and deepens their internalized value judgments and norms, most of the time in ways that we are not aware of.
Especially, the speed forced by modern city life , the life style focused on produvctivity and competition makes personople move away from being in touch with his own self , most of tihe time turns the person into performance being who forgot who he is .
Especially the speed forced by modern city life, the lifestyle focused on productivity and competition, makes people move away from being in touch with themselves; most of the time this turns the person into a performative being who forgets who he is.
This transformation , not only stay with reducing individuals emotional, mental and even physical awareness, at the same time makes it invisible of bascic human needs like meaining and internal peace .
This transformation not only reduces individuals' emotional, mental, and even physical awareness; it also {reduces/eliminates/minimizes} basic human needs like meaning and internal peace.
(Note: "Not only..." is often followed by "... also...")
Therefore, indivuidual reknow and getting closer to himself , not only personal healing process at the same time plays an critical role in rebuilding of socıeaietal structure.
Therefore, people should reconnect and get closer to themselves. This personal healing process plays a critical role in the rebuilding of societal structure.
(Note: I think I'm not understanding the exact relationship between "reknow and getting closer to himself" and "personal healing process", so I apologize if my suggestion doesn't have the exact meaning you are trying to express.)
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Lots of interesting ideas in this essay! I can see that you are experimenting with complex sentence structures. Overall your meaning is understandable, but some parts are a little confusing.
I definitely agree that many people are not very reflective. They think about external situations, and spend their time getting distracted by the world around them. It's so easy to scroll through your phone when you're bored, but sometimes we need quiet and boredom in order to maintain inner peace.
June 30, 2025
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Effect of Society over individuals , not staying only limited to visible rules and bans, shaping individuals tihnking world, deepens internalized value judgements and norms even most of the time we are not aware of. Effect of Society over individuals , not staying only limited to visible rules and bans, shaping individuals t The effect of society over individuals is not only limited to visible rules and bans, but also shapes individuals' mindsets and deepens their internalized value judgments and norms, most of the time in ways that we are not aware of. Effect of Society over individuals |
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Especially, the speed forced by modern city life , the life style focused on produvtivity and competition makes person move away from touch with his own self , most of tihe time turn person into performance being who forgot who he is . Especially, the speed forced by modern city life , the life style focused on produ Especially the speed forced by modern city life, the lifestyle focused on productivity and competition, makes people move away from being in touch with themselves; most of the time this turns the person into a performative being who forgets who he is. Especially I recommend changing "his" to "their" because the "person" you mentioned earlier in the sentence was not given a gender. |
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This transformation , not only stay with reducing individuals emotional, mental and even physical awareness, at the same time makes it invisible of basci human needs like meaining and internal peace . This transformation , not only stay with reducing individuals emotional, mental and even physical awareness, at the same time makes it invisible of bas This transformation not only reduces individuals' emotional, mental, and even physical awareness; it also {reduces/eliminates/minimizes} basic human needs like meaning and internal peace. (Note: "Not only..." is often followed by "... also...") This transformation |
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