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kiwy

Dec. 10, 2021

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In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a girl student of mine. Then I questioned the girl about it, and I known several students including three girls involved in it. I reported it to the director and their parents. I was very disappointed with them.

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In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a girlfemale student of mine.

Generally, "boy" and "girl" should not be used as adjectives outside of situations where you want to indicate that something is intended for boys/girls (or men/women).

Then I questioned the girl about it, and I knownit turned out that there were several students, including three girls, involved in it.

If you want to say that you knew the students concerned, you could add "whom I knew" after "several students."

I reported it to the director and their parentsir parents and the director.

"Principal" or "headmaster/headmistress" may be better than "director."
Since the antecedent to "their" is "several students" or "three girls," it seems more appropriate to put it first.

I was very disappointed with them.

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kiwy

Dec. 11, 2021

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In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a girl student of mine.


In the afternoon, the dormitory keeper told me that she had found a box of cigarettes from a girlfemale student of mine.

Generally, "boy" and "girl" should not be used as adjectives outside of situations where you want to indicate that something is intended for boys/girls (or men/women).

Then I questioned the girl about it, and I known several students including three girls involved in it.


Then I questioned the girl about it, and I knownit turned out that there were several students, including three girls, involved in it.

If you want to say that you knew the students concerned, you could add "whom I knew" after "several students."

I reported it to the director and their parents.


I reported it to the director and their parentsir parents and the director.

"Principal" or "headmaster/headmistress" may be better than "director." Since the antecedent to "their" is "several students" or "three girls," it seems more appropriate to put it first.

I was very disappointed with them.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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