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Jack

June 18, 2024

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Slingshot

When I was a child, I loved to play slingshot.

I remember my father once said that he could get a home-made gun for me, but he didn't do that in the end.

At that time, China hadn't controlled guns so strictly as now, so gas guns could be bought in some shops.

However, I was not lucky enough to have a gun. I only had slingshots made by myself.

When I made a slingshot, I'd use y-shaped tree branches, rubber bands and an oval piece of leather.

When I shot birds, my bullets were always gravel. These were the only bullets that I could find on the ground.

Although I didn't shoot down a few birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.

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Slingshot

When I was a child, I loved to play with slingshots.

I remember my father once said that he could get a home-made gun for me, but he didn't do that in the end.

At that time, China hadn't controlled guns so strictly as now, so gas guns could be bought in some shops.

However, I was not lucky enough to have a gun.

I only had slingshots made by myself.

When I made a slingshot, I'd use y-shaped tree branches, rubber bands and an oval piece of leather.

When I shot birds, my bullets were always gravel.

These were the only bullets that I could find on the ground.

Although I didn't shoot down a fewny birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.

Slingshot

When I was a child, I loved to play slingshot.

I remember my father once said that he could get a home-made gun for me, but he didn't do that never ended up doing the endat.

At that time, China hadn't controlled guns so strictly as now, so gas guns could be bought in some shops.

However, I was not lucky enough to have a gun.

I only had slingshots made by myself.

When I made a slingshot, I'd use y-shaped tree branches, rubber bands and an oval piece of leather.

When I shot birds, my bullets were always gravel.

These were the only bullets that I could find on the ground.

Although I didn't shoot down a few birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.

I'm not sure how "I didn't shoot down a few birds" fits in.

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Jack

June 18, 2024

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Never end up doing that.
I didn’t shoot down many birds/ I only shot down a few birds.
Thank you very much.

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JoeTofu

June 18, 2024

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You’re welcome.
And I thought that might be what you meant. :-)

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JoeTofu

June 18, 2024

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Oops, sorry, I replied to the wrong thread.
m(_ _)m

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dubai03nsr

June 18, 2024

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> I didn’t shoot down many birds/ I only shot down a few birds.
Ok I see, that makes sense.

Slingshots

The plural from is more natural as a one-word title, especially since the body of your post describes the (many) slingshots of your childhood, not just one slingshot.

When I was a child, I loved to play with slingshots.

“Slingshot” is not the name of a game or a musical instrument, so you need “play with” instead of just “play.”

I remember my father once said that he could get a home-made gun for me, but he didn't do that in the end.

At that time, China [hadn't controlled | hadn’t started to control | didn’t control] guns so / as strictly as now, so gasair guns could be bought in some shops.

We call them air guns, even though some of them do use a compressed gas such as carbon dioxide.

However, I was not lucky enough to have a gun.

I only had slingshots [made by myself | I made myself | homemade slingshots].

“By myself” emphasizes that nobody helped you make them. This isn’t incorrect, but it would be more natural to simply say you made them yourself (without “by”) or to describe them as “homemade.”

When I made a slingshot, I'd use a y-shaped tree branches, rubber bands and an oval piece of leather.

When I shot birds, my bullets were always gravel.

These were the only bullets that I could find on the ground.

Although I [didn't shoot down a few] birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.

“Didn’t shoot down a few” isn’t incorrect, but it’s a form of double-negative (“not a few”), so it’s ambiguous: “not a few” usually means “not just a few,” i.e., “many,” although it can be literally interpreted as “less than a few.” I understand “didn’t shoot down a few” to mean you shot very many birds, but I’m not sure this is what you intended to say.

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Jack

June 18, 2024

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Thank you Joe Tofu.
I mean not many/only a few. Now I realize the ambiguity of that sentence.

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JoeTofu

June 18, 2024

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You’re welcome.
And I thought that might be what you meant. :-)

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JoeTofu

June 18, 2024

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Oops, sorry, I replied to the wrong thread.
m(_ _)m

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Slingshots

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I remember my father once said that he could get a home-made gun for me, but he didn't do that in the end.


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I remember my father once said that he could get a home-made gun for me, but he didn't do that never ended up doing the endat.

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At that time, China hadn't controlled guns so strictly as now, so gas guns could be bought in some shops.


At that time, China [hadn't controlled | hadn’t started to control | didn’t control] guns so / as strictly as now, so gasair guns could be bought in some shops.

We call them air guns, even though some of them do use a compressed gas such as carbon dioxide.

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However, I was not lucky enough to have a gun.


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I only had slingshots made by myself.


I only had slingshots [made by myself | I made myself | homemade slingshots].

“By myself” emphasizes that nobody helped you make them. This isn’t incorrect, but it would be more natural to simply say you made them yourself (without “by”) or to describe them as “homemade.”

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When I was a child, I loved to play slingshot.


When I was a child, I loved to play with slingshots.

“Slingshot” is not the name of a game or a musical instrument, so you need “play with” instead of just “play.”

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When I was a child, I loved to play with slingshots.

When I made a slingshot, I'd use y-shaped tree branches, rubber bands and an oval piece of leather.


When I made a slingshot, I'd use a y-shaped tree branches, rubber bands and an oval piece of leather.

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When I shot birds, my bullets were always gravel.


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These were the only bullets that I could find on the ground.


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Although I didn't shoot down a few birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.


Although I [didn't shoot down a few] birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.

“Didn’t shoot down a few” isn’t incorrect, but it’s a form of double-negative (“not a few”), so it’s ambiguous: “not a few” usually means “not just a few,” i.e., “many,” although it can be literally interpreted as “less than a few.” I understand “didn’t shoot down a few” to mean you shot very many birds, but I’m not sure this is what you intended to say.

Although I didn't shoot down a few birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.

I'm not sure how "I didn't shoot down a few birds" fits in.

Although I didn't shoot down a fewny birds, slingshots brought a lot of joy to my childhood.

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