Sept. 3, 2020
Sleepless
l've not slept well for a long time.
I often felt lazy during a daytime and sometimes fell asleep during a meeting.
One day, I suddenly fainted away during a meetings between only two people. Fortunately, the old woman, was my co-worker and explained how documents should be corrected, wouldn't notice it since she was too busy talking.
Even when I was exhausted because of a badminton club practice, I woke up at midnight.
I'd like to introduce a pre-sleep routine that helps me relax right away.
長い間、よく眠れていない。
日中にだるさを感じたり、時には会議中に意識が飛んだりする。
ある日、二人だけの会議で意識が飛んだこともあったが、幸い相手（同じ部署の先輩で文書のチェックについて説明していた）は話すのに忙しく気付いていなかった。
バドミントンの練習でヘトヘトに疲れているときでさえ、夜中に目を覚ましてしまう。
よく眠れるように何かいい入眠儀式があればすぐにでも導入したい。
I often feelt lazy during a daytimethe day (during daytime could work but might sound less natural) and sometimes feall asleep during a meetings.
sounds more natural without past tense, and using "meetings" makes it sound like something that happens sometimes, using "a meeting" makes it sound like it happened once, and also doesn't fit with "sometimes" being in the sentence. maybe try to think of the 's' in "sometimes" and make sure the noun also has an 's'.
One day, I suddenly fainted away during a meetings between only two people.
Even when I was exhausted because of afrom badminton club practice, I woke up at midnight.
"from" sounds more natural, but "because of" would still be easily understood.
l've noI haven't slept well for a long time.
Another way to say it.
Fortunately, the old woman, who was my co-worker and was explaineding how documents should be corrected, wouldidn't notice it since she was too busy talking.
Maybe this is close to what you meant?
I'd like to fintroduced a pre-sleep routine that helps me relax right away.
Introduce is acceptable but not the best option in my view. Usually you introduce something "to" something else. So, it could be "I'd like to introduce a pre-sleep ritual into my routine that would help me relax right away."
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Like usual, very good!
Sleepless
lI've not slept well for a long time.
I often feelt lazy during athe daytime and sometimes feall asleep during a meetings.
I think "lethargic," "sluggish, "or "exhausted" all fit better than "lazy" because lazy is usually used for describing lack of motivation rather than being extremely tired.
One day, I suddenly fainted away during a meetings between only two peopleone on one meeting.
"one on one meeting" is a more concise way to say "a meeting between only two people" and is somewhat common in business contexts.
Fortunately, the old woman, was my co-worker and didn't notice since she was busy explaineding how some documents should be corrected, wouldn't notice it since she was too busy talking.
Even when I was exhausted because of a badminton club practice, I woke up at midnight.
This sentence is correct grammatically. I might use "in the middle of the night" instead of "at midnight" since midnight refers to specifically 12 am while "middle of the night" is more general.
I'd like to introduce a pre-sleep routine that helps me relax right away.
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Good job with your writing! Sorry to hear you're having trouble sleeping. I understand how it feels since throughout most of high school I usually only got around 3-4 hours of sleep per night. I still sometimes have trouble but some things that work for me are using blue light blocking filters (or blue light blocking glasses) on all my electronic devices, keeping the room cold when trying to sleep, and sticking as close as possible to the same bed time nightly. I've tried some techniques to 'fall asleep right away' but they didn't work for me. I hope that you find something that helps you! Let me know if you have any questions about my corrections.
Sept. 5, 2020
It is a little difficult for me to stop playing with a smartphone. But, I'll try your routine!
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l've not slept well for a long time.
Another way to say it. |
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I often felt lazy during a daytime and sometimes fell asleep during a meeting. I often feel I think "lethargic," "sluggish, "or "exhausted" all fit better than "lazy" because lazy is usually used for describing lack of motivation rather than being extremely tired. I often feel sounds more natural without past tense, and using "meetings" makes it sound like something that happens sometimes, using "a meeting" makes it sound like it happened once, and also doesn't fit with "sometimes" being in the sentence. maybe try to think of the 's' in "sometimes" and make sure the noun also has an 's'. |
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One day, I suddenly fainted away during a meetings between only two people. One day, I suddenly fainted "one on one meeting" is a more concise way to say "a meeting between only two people" and is somewhat common in business contexts. One day, I suddenly fainted away during a meeting |
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Fortunately, the old woman, was my co-worker and explained how documents should be corrected, wouldn't notice it since she was too busy talking. Fortunately, the old woman Fortunately, the old woman, who was my co-worker and was explain Maybe this is close to what you meant? |
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Even when I was exhausted because of a badminton club practice, I woke up at midnight. Even when I was exhausted because of a badminton club practice, I woke up at midnight. This sentence is correct grammatically. I might use "in the middle of the night" instead of "at midnight" since midnight refers to specifically 12 am while "middle of the night" is more general. Even when I was exhausted "from" sounds more natural, but "because of" would still be easily understood. |
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I'd like to introduce a pre-sleep routine that helps me relax right away. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I'd like to fin Introduce is acceptable but not the best option in my view. Usually you introduce something "to" something else. So, it could be "I'd like to introduce a pre-sleep ritual into my routine that would help me relax right away." |
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