June 6, 2024
Six entry
Last saturday I went to the park with my family. Was a sunny day and everyone were very happy. We carry basket with food to make a picnic. We eat sandwiches, fruits and drink juice. After eat, we play soccer and we fly a kite. My brothers and I ran across the grass and we play with others childrens who were in the park.
There were many people enjoying the good weather. Some walked your dogs, others rode bicycles and some simply relax in the grass. To end of day, we were tired but happy. Was a day very funny and everyone want come back to the park soon.
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Last sSaturday I went to the park with my family.
WIt was a sunny day and everyone wereas very happy.
We carryied a basket with food to makhave a picnic.
We eate sandwiches, and fruits and driank juice.
After eating, we played soccer and we flyflew a kite.
My brothers and I ran across the grass and we played with others childrens who were in the park.
'who were' can be removed
There were many people enjoying the good weather.
Some walked youtheir dogs, others rode bicycles, and some simply relaxed in the grass.
ToAt the end of the day, we were tired but happy.
Was a dayIt was a very funny day, and everyone wants to come back to the park soon.
Sixth entry
Last sSaturday, I went to the park with my family.
WIt was a sunny day and everyone wereas very happy.
We carrytook a basket with food to makhave a picnic.
We eate sandwiches, fruits and driank juice.
After eat,ing, we played soccer and we flyew a kite.
My brothers and I ran across the grass and we played with others childrens who were in the park.
There were many people enjoying the good weather.
Some walked youere walking their dogs, others rodewere riding bicycles and some were simply relax ing on the grass.
ToAt the end of day, we were tired but happy.
WIt was a day very funnfun day and everyone wants to come back to the park soon.
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This is a good text but as it was all in the past, make sure you use the past tense in all the sentences.
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After eat, we play soccer and we fly a kite. After eat After eating, we played soccer and |
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My brothers and I ran across the grass and we play with others childrens who were in the park. My brothers and I ran across the grass and we played with other My brothers and I ran across the grass and 'who were' can be removed |
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There were many people enjoying the good weather. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Some walked your dogs, others rode bicycles and some simply relax in the grass. Some w Some walked |
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To end of day, we were tired but happy.
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Was a day very funny and everyone want come back to the park soon.
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Last saturday I went to the park with my family. Last Last |
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Was a sunny day and everyone were very happy.
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We carry basket with food to make a picnic. We We carr |
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We eat sandwiches, fruits and drink juice. We We |
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