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shiera

Jan. 11, 2020

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After work, I met a friend for the first time in half a year and we chilled at a cafe. She said she'd started to learn sign language. She was upset and said that there are so many things to learn the same as learning another language that she can't memorize them.
I remembered a man who was a fake sign language interpreter at the memorial service for Nelson Mandela, former South African president, in 2013. The friend didn't know that funny incident, so I showed a Youtube video of his.
The man fakes as if he were a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speeches, and music is playing according to his hands' movement. That was so funny that the friend and I couldn't stop laughing.
I encouraged her to learn sign language more easily since there's a man who fakes sign language openly in public in the world.
She was laughing holding her stomach. Probably the encouragement from me was a great success.
Whe you have a hard time, please see this Youtube video.

https://youtu.be/Xe9268LzhsA


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仕事帰りに友人と半年ぶりに会い、お茶しました。友人は手話を習いだしたそうです。話す言葉同様、覚えることがたくさあり、覚えきれないと嘆いていました。
私は2013年のマンデラ元大統領の追悼式でウソの手話通訳をしている男性のことを思い出しました。友人はこの男性の珍事件を知らないというのでYoutubeで見せてあげました。
各著名人がスピーチしている隣でまるでベテラン手話通訳士のように演じています。ウソの手話をしている男性の手の動きに併せて音楽が流れてますが、あまりにもおかしくて友人も私も爆笑でした。
公でこんなに堂々と嘘の手話をしている人もいるのだから、もっと気楽に勉強しても大丈夫、と友人を励ましました。友人はお腹を抱えて笑ってました。多分、励まし大成功です。
辛いときはこのYoutubeを見てみてください!

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After work, I met a friend for the first time in half a year and we chilled at a cafe.

She said she'd started to learn sign language.

She was upset and said that there are so many things to learn the same as learning another language and that she can't memorize them.

I remembered a man who was a fake sign language interpreter at the memorial service for Nelson Mandela, former South African president, in 2013.

The friend didn't know of that funny incident, so I showed her a Youtube video of his.

The man fakes as if he werebeing a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speecheaks, and music is playing according to his hands' movements.

ThaIt was so funny that the friend and I couldn't stop laughing.

I encouraged her to learn sign language more easily since there's a man who fakes sign language openly in public in the world.

She was laughing and holding her stomach.

Probably the encouragement from me was a great successful.

When you have a hard time, please seewatch this Youtube video.

https://youtu.

be/Xe9268LzhsA

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shiera

Jan. 13, 2020

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Thank you

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After work, I met a friend for the first time in half a year, and we chilled at a cafe.

Generally, you want to put a comma before conjunctions like "and" and "but" if they are introducing an independent clause (i.e. something that could stand as a sentence on its own).

She said she'd started to learn sign language.

She was upset and said that there are so many things to learn the same as learning another languagejust like learning another language, there are so many things to learn that she can't memorize them.

The way I understand it, "the same as learning another language" is describing "there are so many things to learn […] that she can't memorize them," so you shouldn't put in between the two parts.

I remembered a man who was a fake sign language interpreter at the memorial service for Nelson Mandela, former South African president, in 2013.

The friend didn't know about that funny incident, so I showed a YoutTube video of hism.

We generally say "know about" when we're talking about topics in general, like "know about photosynthesis" or "know about chemistry." "A YouTube video of his" suggests that he uploaded the video, but that's not the case.

The man fakes the motions as if he were a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speecheaks, and music is playing according to his hands' movement.

There has to be an object that goes with "fake" as a verb; i.e. you must fake something.

That was so funny that the friend and I couldn't stop laughing.

I encouraged her to continue learning sign language more easily since there's a man who fakesand told her that she could do it, when there's a man who openly fakes knowledge of sign language openly in public in the world.

This is just my guess for what you mean, since I don't really read Japanese.

She was laughing so much she was holding her stomach.

Probably tThe encouragement from me was probably a great success.

Probably sounds more natural after the verb.

When you have a hard time, please see this Youtube video.

This is correct, but you have a typo. :)

https://youtu.

be/Xe9268LzhsA

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Great story! I'm glad that you were able to encourage your friend, if you're writing about something that really happened.

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shiera

Jan. 11, 2020

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thanks

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Bees

Jan. 11, 2020

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That was so funny that the friend and I couldn't stop laughing.

Wouldn't "my friend and I" sound better? I think "the friend" would sound okay maybe if it were something like "the friend I was with."

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profitendieu

Jan. 11, 2020

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Wouldn't "my friend and I" sound better? I think "the friend" would sound okay maybe if it were something like "the friend I was with."

Oops, I missed this part (especially since it's more a style issue). You're right: either "my friend" or "that friend" or "the friend whom I was with" would sound more appropriate here and in some of the other sentences.

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After work, I met a friend for the first time in half a year, and we chilled at a cafe.

She said she'd started to learn sign language.

She was upset and said that there awere so many things to learn the same as learning another language that she can't memorize themat she couldn't memorize them, just like when one learns a foreign language.

The phrase "the same as learning another language" needs fit into the sentence a little differently. The other words I changed are less important but I think they sound more natural.

I remembered a man who was a fake sign language interpreter at the memorial service for Nelson Mandela, former South African president, in 2013.

The friend didn't know that funny incident, so I showed a Youtube video of this.

The man fakes as if he were a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speecheaks, and music is playing according to his hands' movement.

ThaIt was so funny that themy friend and I couldn't stop laughing.

I encouraged her to continue learning sign language more easily since there's a mansince there are people who fakes sign language openly in public in the world.

I am not sure what you mean by "learn more easily" so I'm not sure I preserved the meaning of the sentence. If you write "in public" you don't need to write "openly."

She was laughing holding her stomach.

ProbablyI think the encouragement from me was a great success.

Your original sentence is correct but sounds a little unnatural. You might also consider replacing "was a great success" with "worked."

Whe you have a hard time, please see this Youtube video.

https://youtu.

be/Xe9268LzhsA

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Very clever writing and an interesting topic!

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shiera

Jan. 11, 2020

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Thank you for the correction! Did you read my Japanese sentences when you were correcting? I can't write English sentences which make sense. That's why I always add Japanese sentences. Doesn't it help correctors?

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After work, I met a friend for the first time in half a year and we chilled at a cafe.


After work, I met a friend for the first time in half a year, and we chilled at a cafe.

After work, I met a friend for the first time in half a year, and we chilled at a cafe.

Generally, you want to put a comma before conjunctions like "and" and "but" if they are introducing an independent clause (i.e. something that could stand as a sentence on its own).

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She said she'd started to learn sign language.


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She was upset and said that there are so many things to learn the same as learning another language that she can't memorize them.


She was upset and said that there awere so many things to learn the same as learning another language that she can't memorize themat she couldn't memorize them, just like when one learns a foreign language.

The phrase "the same as learning another language" needs fit into the sentence a little differently. The other words I changed are less important but I think they sound more natural.

She was upset and said that there are so many things to learn the same as learning another languagejust like learning another language, there are so many things to learn that she can't memorize them.

The way I understand it, "the same as learning another language" is describing "there are so many things to learn […] that she can't memorize them," so you shouldn't put in between the two parts.

She was upset and said that there are so many things to learn the same as learning another language and that she can't memorize them.

I remembered a man who was a fake sign language interpreter at the memorial service for Nelson Mandela, former South African president, in 2013.


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The friend didn't know that funny incident, so I showed a Youtube video of his.


The friend didn't know that funny incident, so I showed a Youtube video of this.

The friend didn't know about that funny incident, so I showed a YoutTube video of hism.

We generally say "know about" when we're talking about topics in general, like "know about photosynthesis" or "know about chemistry." "A YouTube video of his" suggests that he uploaded the video, but that's not the case.

The friend didn't know of that funny incident, so I showed her a Youtube video of his.

The man fakes as if he were a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speeches, and music is playing according to his hands' movement.


The man fakes as if he were a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speecheaks, and music is playing according to his hands' movement.

The man fakes the motions as if he were a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speecheaks, and music is playing according to his hands' movement.

There has to be an object that goes with "fake" as a verb; i.e. you must fake something.

The man fakes as if he werebeing a veteran sign language interpreter next to each famous person who speecheaks, and music is playing according to his hands' movements.

That was so funny that the friend and I couldn't stop laughing.


ThaIt was so funny that themy friend and I couldn't stop laughing.

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ThaIt was so funny that the friend and I couldn't stop laughing.

I encouraged her to learn sign language more easily since there's a man who fakes sign language openly in public in the world.


I encouraged her to continue learning sign language more easily since there's a mansince there are people who fakes sign language openly in public in the world.

I am not sure what you mean by "learn more easily" so I'm not sure I preserved the meaning of the sentence. If you write "in public" you don't need to write "openly."

I encouraged her to continue learning sign language more easily since there's a man who fakesand told her that she could do it, when there's a man who openly fakes knowledge of sign language openly in public in the world.

This is just my guess for what you mean, since I don't really read Japanese.

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She was laughing holding her stomach.


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She was laughing so much she was holding her stomach.

She was laughing and holding her stomach.

Probably the encouragement from me was a great success.


ProbablyI think the encouragement from me was a great success.

Your original sentence is correct but sounds a little unnatural. You might also consider replacing "was a great success" with "worked."

Probably tThe encouragement from me was probably a great success.

Probably sounds more natural after the verb.

Probably the encouragement from me was a great successful.

Whe you have a hard time, please see this Youtube video.


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When you have a hard time, please see this Youtube video.

This is correct, but you have a typo. :)

When you have a hard time, please seewatch this Youtube video.

https://youtu.


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