Nov. 25, 2022
Should the voting age be lowered?
Voting is a natural human act since the establishment of civilizations around the world. At the same time, election is one of the most important concepts in democratic societies, since each individual's opinions are different and they decide most things by election in politics. Due to this importance, it has been discussed in recent years that the voting age should be lowered from 18 to 16 in many democratic countries. While many people think that young people are not mature enough to vote, in my opinion there are many positive aspects in this situation.
First of all, young people have stronger roots in society. However, despite these deep roots, young people are not actively represented in politics. They do not have a say in matters that directly concern them such as education. However, regardless of their ages, young people can overcome many different tasks with ease. Besides education, they are actively involved in many jobs as interns or employees or they can be pioneers in many scientific researches. This shows that young people are mature enough to have a say in politics as adults.
On the other hand, democracy means equal representation of all individuals. However, although young people have to obey the laws, they couldn’t involved in the law-making process. This causes young people to feel that their ideas are worthless, and as a result, young people become indifferent to social and economic issues. For these reasons, lowering the voting age and giving young people the right to vote will enable them to be more active and responsible individuals in all areas of society. In addition to this, the voting of young people also increases the turnout rate in the elections. This means that the more people vote in the election, the more democratic results will occur in the election.
In conclusion, although many people think that young people are mature enough to vote, voting by young people brings many positive benefits to society. By voting, young people become more sensitive and relevant individuals for the society and they feel more closely connected with the society. However, the turnout in elections increases and states are governed with more democratic results.
Should the voting age be lowered?
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Due to this importance, it has been discussed in recent years that the voting age should be lowered from 18 to 16 in many democratic countries.
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This causes young people to feel that their ideas are worthless, and, as a result, young people become indifferent to social and economic issues.
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In conclusion, although many people think that young people are not mature enough to vote, voting by young people brings many positive benefits to society.
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Should the voting age be lowered?
Voting is a natural human act since the establishment of civilizations around the world.
At the same time, election is one of the most important concepts in democratic societies, since each individual's opinions are different, and they decide most things by election in politics.
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Due to this importance, it has been discussed in recent years that the voting age should be lowered from 18 to 16 in many democratic countries.
While many people think that young people are not mature enough to vote,; in my opinion there are many positive aspects in this situation.
no comma before "in"
First of all, young people have stronger roots in society.
However, despite these deep roots, young people are not actively represented in politics.
They do not have a say in matters that directly concern them such as education.
However, regardless of their ages, young people can overcome many different tasks with ease.
To many "However"
Besides education, they are actively involved in many jobs as interns or employees or they can be pioneers in many scientific researches.
This shows that young people are mature enough to have a say in politics as adults.
On the other hand, democracy means equal representation of all individuals.
However, although young people have to obey the laws, they couldn’t involved in the law-making process.
To many "However"
This causes young people to feel that their ideas are worthless, and as a result, young people become indifferent to social and economic issues.
no need for "And" and semicolon "as a result" instead
Like so: ;as a result,
For these reasons, lowering the voting age and giving young people the right to vote will enable them to be more active and responsible individuals in all areas of society.
In addition to this, the voting of young people also increases the turnout rate in the elections.
This means that the more people vote in the election, the more democratic results will occur in the election.
In conclusion, although many people think that young people are mature enough to vote, voting by young people brings many positive benefits to society.
By voting, young people become more sensitive and relevant individuals for the society and they feel more closely connected with the society.
No comma
However, the turnout in elections increases and states are governed with more democratic results.
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Besides education, they are actively involved in many jobs as interns or employees or they can be pioneers in many scientific researches. This sentence has been marked as perfect! Besides education, they are actively involved in many jobs as interns or employees or they can be pioneers in many areas of scientific research In the US, we don't often use the plural for "scientific research." |
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Should the voting age be lowered? This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Voting is a natural human act since the establishment of civilizations around the world. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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At the same time, election is one of the most important concepts in democratic societies, since each individual's opinions are different and they decide most things by election in politics. At the same time, election is one of the most important concepts in democratic societies, since each individual's opinions are different, and they decide most things by election in politics. commas before the FANBOYS At the same time, election |
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Due to this importance, it has been discussed in recent years that the voting age should be lowered from 18 to 16 in many democratic countries. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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While many people think that young people are not mature enough to vote, in my opinion there are many positive aspects in this situation. While many people think that young people are not mature enough to vote no comma before "in" While many people think that young people are not mature enough to vote, in my opinion, there are many positive aspects |
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First of all, young people have stronger roots in society. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, despite these deep roots, young people are not actively represented in politics. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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They do not have a say in matters that directly concern them such as education. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, regardless of their ages, young people can overcome many different tasks with ease. However, regardless of their ages, young people can overcome many different tasks with ease. To many "However"
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This shows that young people are mature enough to have a say in politics as adults. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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On the other hand, democracy means equal representation of all individuals. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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However, although young people have to obey the laws, they couldn’t involved in the law-making process.
However, although young people have to obey the laws, they couldn’t involved in the law-making process. To many "However" |
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This causes young people to feel that their ideas are worthless, and as a result, young people become indifferent to social and economic issues. This causes young people to feel that their ideas are worthless, and as a result, young people become indifferent to social and economic issues. no need for "And" and semicolon "as a result" instead Like so: ;as a result, This causes young people to feel that their ideas are worthless |
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For these reasons, lowering the voting age and giving young people the right to vote will enable them to be more active and responsible individuals in all areas of society. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In addition to this, the voting of young people also increases the turnout rate in the elections. This sentence has been marked as perfect! In addition to this, the voting of young people also increases the turnout rate in |
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This means that the more people vote in the election, the more democratic results will occur in the election. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This means that the more people who vote in |
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In conclusion, although many people think that young people are mature enough to vote, voting by young people brings many positive benefits to society. This sentence has been marked as perfect! In conclusion, although many people think that young people are not mature enough to vote, voting by young people brings many positive benefits to society. "Although" indicates contradictory clauses so that's why I added the "not" to the "are not mature enough to vote" clause. |
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By voting, young people become more sensitive and relevant individuals for the society and they feel more closely connected with the society. By voting, young people become more sensitive and relevant individuals for the society and they feel more closely connected with the society. No comma By voting, young people become more sensitive and relevant individuals of |
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However, the turnout in elections increases and states are governed with more democratic results. This sentence has been marked as perfect!
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