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Feb. 18, 2021

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Short Paragraph: Party

She stood in the corner of the room, gripping her plastic cup so tightly she thought it might break. People were mingling, dancing, and chatting near her, but their words sounded muffled. She couldn't even focus on the loud music that was sure to break somebody's eardrums. The only thing she could focus on in that moment was how she was all alone with no partner. "I bet I look so stupid.." She thought. Her eyes scanned the room for something to do, until she saw an open door leading to the backyard. Pushing through the loud crowd of people, she walked out into the backyard and took a big breath. "Hey," She hears a masculine voice next to her say. "Are you by yourself?" A man with smooth black hair asks. She nods, taking a sip of fruit punch. "Well, I don't have a partner either, so... would you like to be mine?" He asks, with a big smile.

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Short Paragraph: Party

She stood in the corner of the room, gripping her plastic cup so tightly that she thought it might break.

People were mingling, dancing, and chatting near her, but their words sounded muffled.

She couldn't even focus on the loud music that was sure to break somebody's eardrums.

The only that thing she could focus on in that moment was how she was all alone with noout a partner.

"I bet I look so stupid.." She thought.

Her eyes scanned the room for something to do, until she saw an open door leading to the backyard.

Pushing through the loud crowd of people, she walked out into the backyard and took a big breath.

"Hey," She hears a masculine voice next to her say.

"Are you by yourself?"

A man with smooth black hair asks.

She nods, taking a sip of fruit punch.

"Well, I don't have a partner either, so... would you like to be mine?"

He asks, with a big smile.

Short Paragraph: Party


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She stood in the corner of the room, gripping her plastic cup so tightly she thought it might break.


She stood in the corner of the room, gripping her plastic cup so tightly that she thought it might break.

People were mingling, dancing, and chatting near her, but their words sounded muffled.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She couldn't even focus on the loud music that was sure to break somebody's eardrums.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The only thing she could focus on in that moment was how she was all alone with no partner.


The only that thing she could focus on in that moment was how she was all alone with noout a partner.

"I bet I look so stupid.." She thought.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Her eyes scanned the room for something to do, until she saw an open door leading to the backyard.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Pushing through the loud crowd of people, she walked out into the backyard and took a big breath.


Pushing through the loud crowd of people, she walked out into the backyard and took a big breath.

"Hey," She hears a masculine voice next to her say.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

"Are you by yourself?"


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

A man with smooth black hair asks.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

She nods, taking a sip of fruit punch.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

"Well, I don't have a partner either, so... would you like to be mine?"


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

He asks, with a big smile.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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