Oct. 21, 2020
When I was a kid, I played many shooting games on my computer. Some of the games, which I played, were IGI, Delta Force, and GTA. Some people argue that by playing these games, you can become aggressive and violent. However, I never became aggressive and I didn't notice anything negative.
I believe that these games could affect some people negatively. For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might take a gun and emulate a game. Thus, I believe that these games have different effects on different people.
Shooting Games!First-Person Shooter
Since shooting games is too broad in meaning, FPS should convey the specific kinds of games you intended to say more accurately.
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Some of the games, which I played, were IGI, Delta Force, and GTA.
Some people argued that by playing these games, you can becomethese games incites aggressive and violent behavior in a person.
Expressing this sentence in third person sounds more professional.
However, I never became an aggressive person and I didn't notice anythmy behavior being negatively affected.
I believe that these games could affect some people negatively.
For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might decide to take up a gun and emulate a game.
Thus, I believe that these games have different effects on different people.
Shooting Games!
When I was a kid, I played many shooting games on my computer.
Some of the games, which that I played, were IGI, Delta Force, and GTA.
Some people argue that by playing these games, you can become aggressive and violent.
However, I never became aggressive and I didn't notice anything negative side effects.
I believe that these games could affect some people negatively.
Another way to state this would be, "I believe that these games can affect some people negatively". You can also put "negatively" in front of "affect" instead, but this is totally optional.
For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might take a gun and emulate a gamecopy the game in the real world.
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Great Job! Just a few corrections! I completely agree that these kinds of games can affect people in different ways.
Shooting Games!
When I was a kid, I played many shooting games on my computer.
Some of the games, which that I played, were IGI, Delta Force, and GTA.
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Some people argue that by playing these games, you can become aggressive and violent.
However, I never became aggressive, and I didn't notice anything negative.
independent clauses
I believe that these games could affect some people negatively.
For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might take a gun and emulate a gamcopy a game in real life.
This is correct, but I believe this is more clear.
Thus, I believe that these games have different effects on different people.
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Very good! All of my corrections are nitpicks but it's still good
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Shooting Games! This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect!
Since shooting games is too broad in meaning, FPS should convey the specific kinds of games you intended to say more accurately. |
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When I was a kid, I played many shooting games on my computer. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! When I was a kid, I played many |
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Some of the games, which I played, were IGI, Delta Force, and GTA. Some of the games https://www.grammar-monster.com/glossary/restrictive_clause.htm Some of the games Some of the games |
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Some people argue that by playing these games, you can become aggressive and violent. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! Some people argued that Expressing this sentence in third person sounds more professional. |
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However, I never became aggressive and I didn't notice anything negative. However, I never became aggressive, and I didn't notice anything negative. independent clauses However, I never became aggressive and I didn't notice any However, I never became an aggressive person and |
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I believe that these games could affect some people negatively. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I believe that these games could affect some people negatively. Another way to state this would be, "I believe that these games can affect some people negatively". You can also put "negatively" in front of "affect" instead, but this is totally optional. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might take a gun and emulate a game. For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might take a gun and This is correct, but I believe this is more clear. For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might take a gun and For instance, those who are living in a dysfunctional household might decide to take up a gun and emulate a game. |
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