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arccosinus

July 18, 2020

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SHIRT IN THE PANTS

REAL-LIFE STORYTELLING (please note that I tried to make it sound in a more conversational way)

Hey, I’ve got to tell you something! Did you hear this story about the guy, who was shopping and dropped his pants?! No? I just can’t believe that’s true. So, here’s the thing. This happened in GB. This guy was shopping at a store as the manager thought he was shoplifting. So, this manager starts to act. He approaches the guy and he is like “I saw you stole something”. The guy replies: “no, I didn’t”. But the manager doesn’t believe! He continues to claim the guy stole something, he fights with him, points out at the pants, they are fighting. At some point the manager leverages a guard. So now there are two of them and they continue telling the guy he stole something for sure since there is no way one would have a bulge that big on their pants. That’s where it gets crazy. So, they’ve fought for like 15 min or something now and the guy decides that’s enough. He takes the guard into the cubicle, takes off his pants and how do you think what was there? Incorrect! He rolls out his giant 10-in friend! The terrified guard shooks his head and runs to the manager saying there is no stolen merchandize. Can you imagine? The poor man did get a compensation, though So I feel like he has been avenged.

Corrections

This happened in GBthe UK.

Although Great Britain and the United Kingdom mean two different things, we would never use "GB" to refer to the location in a sentence. It's mostly used as an adjective, but I think one mostly only hears it now when talking about "Team GB" (casual term for the British Olympics team) and then "GB athletes" etc.

You could of course also just say "in (Great) Britain." but "the UK" is more common :)

He approaches the guy and he i's like, “I saw that you stole something”.

"I saw you steal something" is also right, but it is less confident than "I saw that you stole something."

"I saw you steal something" - I saw you steal something.
"I saw that you stole something" - You 100% stole something, but I saw it so you won't get away with it.

The poor man did get asome compensation, though S, so I feel like he has been avenged.

N.B. "Avenged" would imply that the person who hurt him had something bad happen to him later? The first corrector has some good suggestions for alternative words.

REAL-LIFE STORYTELLING (pPlease note that I tried to make it sound in a more conversational way.)

Hey, I’ve got to tell you something!

Did you hear this story about the guy, who was shopping and droppedpulled down his pants?!

No?

I just can’t believe that’s true.

So, here’s the thing.

This happened in GB.

This guy was shopping at a store, asnd the manager thought he was shoplifting.

So, this manager starts to actkes action.

He approaches the guy, and he is like, “I saw you stoleeal something”.

The guy replies:,nNo, I didn’t."

But, the manager doesn’t believe him!

He continues to claim the guy stole something, the two fights with him, points out at the pants, they are fighting, and the manager points to the guy’s pants.

At some point the manager leveragescalls over a guard.

So now there are two of them, and they continue telling the guy he stole something for sure since there is no way one would have a bulge that big oin their pants.

That’is is where it gets crazy.

So, they’ve fought for like 15 minutes or something now, and the guy decides that’s enough.

He takes the guard into thea cubicle, takes off his pants, and how do you thinkyou know what was there?

Incorrect!

He rolls out his giant 10-inch friend!

The terrified guard shookakes his head and runs to the manager saying there is no stolen merchandize.

Can you imagine?

The poor man did get asome compensation, though S, so I feel like hethings hasve been avengrighted.

“Avenged” feels a little too serious here.

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arccosinus

July 18, 2020

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Wow, thanks, Sir!

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kt0914

July 18, 2020

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He approaches the guy, and he is like, “I saw you stoleeal something”.

Note that in a conversation, where you are speaking out loud, it is most common to use "he's" instead of the complete "he is"

This happened in GB.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This happened in GBthe UK.

Although Great Britain and the United Kingdom mean two different things, we would never use "GB" to refer to the location in a sentence. It's mostly used as an adjective, but I think one mostly only hears it now when talking about "Team GB" (casual term for the British Olympics team) and then "GB athletes" etc. You could of course also just say "in (Great) Britain." but "the UK" is more common :)

He approaches the guy and he is like “I saw you stole something”.


He approaches the guy, and he is like, “I saw you stoleeal something”.

He approaches the guy and he i's like, “I saw that you stole something”.

"I saw you steal something" is also right, but it is less confident than "I saw that you stole something." "I saw you steal something" - I saw you steal something. "I saw that you stole something" - You 100% stole something, but I saw it so you won't get away with it.

So, here’s the thing.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

SHIRT IN THE PANTS


REAL-LIFE STORYTELLING (please notice that I tried to make it sound in a more conversational way Hey, I’ve got to tell you something! Did you hear this story about the guy, who was shopping and dropped his pants?! No? I just can’t believe that’s true. So, here’s the thing. This happened in GB. This guy was shopping at a store as the manager thought he was shoplifting. So, this manager starts to act. He approaches the guy and he is like “I saw you stole something”. The guy replies: “no, I didn’t”. But the manager doesn’t believe! He continues to claim the guy stole something, he fights with him, points out at the pants, they are fighting. At some point the manager leverages a guard. So now there are two of them and they continue telling the guy he stole something for sure since there is no way one would have a bulge that big on their pants. That’s where it gets crazy. So, they’ve fought for like 15 min or something now and the guy decides that’s enough. He takes the guard into the cubicle, takes off his pants and how do you think what was there? Incorrect! He rolls out his giant 10-in friend! The terrified guard shooks his head and runs to the manager saying there is no stolen merchandize. Can you imagine? The poor man did get a compensation, though So I feel like he has been avenged.


REAL-LIFE STORYTELLING (please note that I tried to make it sound in a more conversational way)


REAL-LIFE STORYTELLING (pPlease note that I tried to make it sound in a more conversational way.)

Hey, I’ve got to tell you something!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Did you hear this story about the guy, who was shopping and dropped his pants?!


Did you hear this story about the guy, who was shopping and droppedpulled down his pants?!

No?


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I just can’t believe that’s true.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This guy was shopping at a store as the manager thought he was shoplifting.


This guy was shopping at a store, asnd the manager thought he was shoplifting.

So, this manager starts to act.


So, this manager starts to actkes action.

The guy replies: “no, I didn’t”.


The guy replies:,nNo, I didn’t."

But the manager doesn’t believe!


But, the manager doesn’t believe him!

He continues to claim the guy stole something, he fights with him, points out at the pants, they are fighting.


He continues to claim the guy stole something, the two fights with him, points out at the pants, they are fighting, and the manager points to the guy’s pants.

At some point the manager leverages a guard.


At some point the manager leveragescalls over a guard.

So now there are two of them and they continue telling the guy he stole something for sure since there is no way one would have a bulge that big on their pants.


So now there are two of them, and they continue telling the guy he stole something for sure since there is no way one would have a bulge that big oin their pants.

That’s where it gets crazy.


That’is is where it gets crazy.

So, they’ve fought for like 15 min or something now and the guy decides that’s enough.


So, they’ve fought for like 15 minutes or something now, and the guy decides that’s enough.

He takes the guard into the cubicle, takes off his pants and how do you think what was there?


He takes the guard into thea cubicle, takes off his pants, and how do you thinkyou know what was there?

Incorrect!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

He rolls out his giant 10-in friend!


He rolls out his giant 10-inch friend!

The terrified guard shooks his head and runs to the manager saying there is no stolen merchandize.


The terrified guard shookakes his head and runs to the manager saying there is no stolen merchandize.

Can you imagine?


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The poor man did get a compensation, though So I feel like he has been avenged.


The poor man did get asome compensation, though S, so I feel like hethings hasve been avengrighted.

“Avenged” feels a little too serious here.

The poor man did get asome compensation, though S, so I feel like he has been avenged.

N.B. "Avenged" would imply that the person who hurt him had something bad happen to him later? The first corrector has some good suggestions for alternative words.

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