Self Introduction for the "About me" Section on LangCorrect Self Introduction for the "About me" Section on LangCorrect

I am an English learner and a video game oriented content creator who often posts videos and does live-streams on Twitch and YouTube. I am an English learner and a video game oriented content creator who often posts videos and does livestreams on Twitch and YouTube.

While I don't think it's grammatically incorrect, it's way more common to see livestream without the hyphen in my experience.

I also do language learning related live-streams on Twitch sometimes. I also do language learning livestreams on Twitch sometimes.

related feels somewhat redundant here

Sometimes, I also do language learning related live-streams on Twitch sometimes. Sometimes, I also do language learning related live-streams on Twitch.

Just varying the sentence beginning here.

I haveFor a long time, I used another language corrections website (Lang-8 for a long time), but since it doesn't accept new users anymore resulting in a dying/dead community, I started to mainly use LangCorrect. For a long time, I used another language correction website (Lang-8), but since it doesn't accept new users anymore resulting in a dying/dead community, I started to mainly use LangCorrect.

Just connecting this sentence to the next one here. I also changed the sentence beginning again.

I have used another language correctionsexchange website called Lang-8 for a long time. I used another language exchange website called Lang-8 for a long time.

Since it doesn’t accept new users anymore and its community is kind of dead, so II have started to mainly useusing LangCorrect mainly. Since it doesn’t accept new users anymore and its community is kind of dead, I have started using LangCorrect mainly.

Since it doesn’t accept new users any more and its community is kind of dead, so I started to mainly use LangCorrect. Since it doesn’t accept new users any more and its community is kind of dead, I started to mainly use LangCorrect.

いいですね。

My immediate/short-term goal is to improve my English, especially speaking and writing. My immediate/short-term goal is to improve my English, especially speaking and writing.

'Immediate' is okay, but it makes it seem like you want to accomplish this goal in a really short timeframe, so I would personally use 'short-term' which (I feel) is a broader timeframe.

My immediate goal is to improve my English, especially in speaking and writing. My immediate goal is to improve my English, especially in speaking and writing.

C(Feel free to) check out the related links in the note section. (Feel free to) check out the related links in the note section.

Just added the "feel free to" so it doesn't feel as commanding.